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The Tomorrow King.

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It is Twilight Sparkle's first night as a princess of Equestria, and she cannot sleep. As the excitement she felt during coronation fades away, it gives way to a deeper anxiety. The young alicorn lies awake, her thoughts dwelling on her new destiny, her responsibilities, her fears, and her own mortality.

Or, as the case may be, her lack of it.

As morning draws nearer, Twilight leaves her bed haunted by a question, and so she decides to seek out the one pony who can answer it.

Now has a dramatic reading on Youtube! Major props to Goombasa.

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this has to be one of the most beautiful stories i have ever read.

Huh. So immortality is a choice, you say?

Not bad, I can believe it.

~Skeeter The Lurker

I like it, immortality being a choice is a good alternative. Short but well written and enjoyable, thank you for the story.

Celestia smiled warmly. ”Princess Twilight Sparkle, my brilliant star pupil, my most clever little pony. I have waited a thousand years to meet you, and you know what? It was worth every single day.”

That line... so... beautiful. That line made the story I think.

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I'm particularly proud of that one. :twilightsmile:

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Well it does make a lot of sense. If you have lived for as long as Celestia has, you'd either be bound to see things super optimistically, or have given up a long time ago.
Good work on the story :D

Nice story here. And nice touch on how it ends too.

Beautiful. And I love how we're not backed into the corner of one headcanon or another.
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It's not over yet right? I mean, there's at least antoher chapter about Cadence and Luna and such?!?!

/me puts this story in the "screw angst, I'm a pony" folder along with Mourning Sickness and a few others.

Good show.

a perfect story on so many accounts. its not often that I add one shots to my favorites list but today I need to make an exception.

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.. worth every single day.

My inner platonic Twilestia shipper shed a tear. A glorious, figurative tear.

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Yes. Shipping Goggles FTW.

Seriously, a beautiful little piece, and I much prefer the headcanon of immortality being a choice rather than a burden, or not an option at all.

Approved. Upvoted.

A nice little story. I liked it.

UNLEASH THE D'AWWS

make it a series, make it a series so that i may love u

They dutifully bowed their heads when she passed them by, non on them questioning why Princess Twilight Sparkle was up and about so early.

just one little error slipped by, it looks like

Overall, I liked it!

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Well, it happens. Usually I have to read through the story a couple of times before I spot them all. Nice catch, BTW. Glad you liked the story.

Possibly the best story on this subject that I've seen so far. Have an upvote :twilightsmile:

I like the premise of this. It harks back to the choice Tolkien posed to the Half-Elven, Elrond and his twin brother Elros.

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J.R.R Tolkien is King :twilightsmile:

To think that all the butthurt, sadfics and drama could have been avoided if the writers had simply done this :facehoof:

Also, as the resident Twilestia mod, should this go into Shipping or Student/Teacher? 'Cause you've kept them both IC, and that means some solid Les Yay is always present.

Very nice. I've never been fond of the "woe is me, I'm going to live a long time!" stuff, this is an excellent exploration and refutation of that.

Very nicely done, really enjoyed reading this story.

I feel like this particular approach to the alicorn immortality issue is pretty uncommon, if not unique, and I believe it tread the line between the sadness and hope evoked by the dilemma quite beautifully. The question of how one responds to the inevitability of death is one I have a lot of trouble with, personally, and so the fandom perception and investigation of Twilight's new position is something I've only danced on the edge of for some time.

I have to say that your interpretation is the most comforting and appealing that I've seen, and I thank you for writing it. :twilightsmile:


PS: You further kick ass by sporting Qilby as your avatar. I bestow all the props I can muster upon ye.

And not just them, it would be like that with everpony. I'm... I'm not sure I could stand that.”

THE EVERPONY FOREST

Absolutely fantastic. :twilightsmile:

To be honest I has hesitant to reading this, since the other fics that touch on the subject are angsty Emotality fics which get annoying after the second one that pops up. But... but this was none of that, it is just Celestia and Twilight nothing more and nothing less. No angst, no instinctial crisis, no "Deep Dark Secret" just a teacher and her student, and Celestia is right, Twilight does have her life ahead of her.

And this line:

Celestia smiled warmly. ”Princess Twilight Sparkle, my brilliant star pupil, my most clever little pony. I have waited a thousand years to meet you, and you know what? It was worth every single day.”

Did it for me, that is one of the most beautiful things I have read. Thank you, thank so much for sharing this.

-Celestia's Paladin

>>>All I can say is this: A never-ending life is neither a curse nor a blessing. It is simply a life, not that much different from any other.” >>>

You have earned a like. *the universe gasps in shock as Alondro LIKES a story!!! THE END IS NEIGH!!!!* :fluttershbad::raritycry::pinkiegasp::twilightoops:

Cut it out, universe! I like plenty of stories! I just... write really long, detailed criticisms... because I over-analyze the hell out of everything... I'm a scientist! I can't help it!

Anyway, it's nice to see stories here and there that realize an eternal life need be neither more nor less stressful or painful or joyful than a regular life. It all depends on the individual. Some could handle it with ease, some would go mad after a few days, some would simply exist gaming endlessly in their parents' basements... :trollestia:

I consider the mayfly. Would it pity all those creatures who live so much longer than its single day in the sun? Would it cry out in woe if it were granted a span of years or decades?

And would we wish to become a mayfly, knowing it would leave us with only one day.

It is all a matter of perspective and reason. And bipolar disorder. :pinkiecrazy:

Oh...

173 likes, 0 dislikes

You have done well, young one. :raritywink:

3443913 I have often found that those who live life in despair never accomplish very much as they are too hopelessly lost in self-pity to ever bother actually living. It becomes a self-fulfilling cycle of progressively self-destructively morbid neuroticism.

Meanwhile, I fiddle about contentedly in my garden... until the government tries to tell me what to grow!

Then ah gits mah gun! :flutterrage:

(Manic insanity helps too) :pinkiecrazy:

Nice to a fic that deals with an alicorns immortality as a choice instead it being forced upon them or it only being granted to Celestia and Luna for a change.

This is an beautiful and heart warming story and this line really shows this

Princess Twilight Sparkle, my brilliant star pupil, my most clever little pony. I have waited a thousand years to meet you, and you know what? It was worth every single day.”

It really shows the connection that both Twilight and Celestia have formed between each other over the years and how much Twilight means to Celestia, it was a very touching moment.

I definitely like how this story can actually be considered canon to the series, given the circumstances.

”And if I hadn't chosen an immortal life, I would never had lived to meet you.”
Twilight blushed. ”I-I'm hardly worth...” she started, but a gentle hoof touched her lips and silenced her.
”Yes, you are,” Celestia smiled warmly. ”Princess Twilight Sparkle, my brilliant star pupil, my most clever little pony. I have waited a thousand years to meet you, and you know what? It was worth every single day.”

Simply magnificent lines and a delightful story. Make sure you submit to EQD. :twilightsmile:

I... This is...

Listen, I'm going to give a full comment tomorrow after some rest. I simply MUST be at full capacity to express the honor I feel to have read this.

But before I go; 'Cloud' and 'Squall'? You cheeky dick-waffle.

Craine...

That was so extraordinarily touching and beautiful. A fine deserver of its spot in the feature box, and a lovely peace to warm the aching soul. Very wisely and gently written, well done.:twilightsmile:
Just... one thing.

”It can wait.”:trollestia:
”But...” Twilight frowned. ”But it's the sun.”:twilightoops:

My thoughts exactly.:twilightsheepish:

I like it.

I know there's a lot of controversy about Twilight's hypothetical lifespan, and I think this hits the subject perfectly while also being my favorite new headcanon. Purely voluntary immortality seems like a pretty good deal to me. Suck it, RealityCheck!

I...I...I... It's like Celestia just shit stomped my feels with her words! :raritycry: It's beautiful, I simple love it! :twilightblush:

This is one of the most breathtakingly beautiful short stories I have ever read.

Now this is an awesome story. And immortality being a choice, quite an interesting take on the situation.

210 is the thumb-up I am registered as for yer story. I find this tale quite, heart warming.:twilightsmile:

Damn dude, you have more then 200 likes and no dislikes... impressive.

Alright! That's how its done! Twilight thanks you. :twilightsmile:

A story that made me like Celestia more. Thank you for this wonderful story :twilightsmile:

B-E-A-Utiful. This made my night. This has changed how I view Celestai now. I really hope how the immortality choice plays out in FIM. Otherwise its bull if Twilight lives forever and her friends are mortal. Absolute crap. I'm don't think people would like it if all six of them became immortal either. Thank you for this story. :)

But where's Rinoa and Tifa?

Definitely a smart way to resolve the immortality dilemma. Being a transhumanist, I don't think of a life without an end as a horrifying prospect, but at the same time I am contemptuous of the idea of forced immortality.

Congrats on the ratio up there. 230+ ups to 0 downs.

I like the style and the characters, they feel very organic and real. I was a bit worried because it seemed a bit comma-heavy but that was just me being a worrywort. Really, this deserved the feature and I'm glad I read it (even if it was because of that whole image thing).

Hmm. I'm a fan of the immortal or mortal argument, but this approach is interesting. Mind you if I wrote such a story I might have to adjust canon to suit considering thatTwilight becoming an Alicorn was abrupt and definitely not optional in canon. Your approach leaves somewhat more room for the story rather than the reality of the situation driving the story overmuch. Almost wish this wasn't the end of this story. :pinkiesad2: Of course, where does one go from there?

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I think that her living forever and her friends not is okay, the issue is how trivial it appears to be to become an alicorn. Surely others have tried and failed, so why would it be incredibly easy and even accidental for Twilight. Almost makes you wonder if ponies would try and steal the elements and that spell and try and makes themselves alicorns too....\

I'll be honest, my favorite part was with Cloud and Squall. Even if their names are, how you say, thinly veiled.

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