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Spacecowboy


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Eyes are a gateway to the soul

Even the most common sayings can lead into larger things. Twilight sends a letter to Celestia confronting her unjustly founded fears of Twilight's immortality years after the passing of her last friend.


Based off an idea conceived early this morning. Approx 1 hour went into this. Finally have a proper counter to the Twilight Sadfics out there.

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Damn. You need to take showers more often.

This was impressive. DAMN impressive.

~Skeeter The Lurker

Damn it, I need a mop. I swear every time I read something like this I wind up leaking liquid pride... Not for me of course, but pride in the fact that I'm a part of this wonderful fandom. Keep up the marvelous work or I swear I shall come down on you with great vengeance and furious anger!... And lots and lots of cupcakes! :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

bonsey #3 · Jul 21st, 2013 · · 1 ·

And yet again, not a crap was given about Spike.

Spacecowboy
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I'd thought about throwing a line in there for him, but... he's Spike. So, here's a :moustache: for you now.

I normally don't bother to read one shots, but that one was definitely worth the time. Upvote shall be given. I like the saying you used even though it sounds more badass in French or German (Les yeux sont une fenêtre dans l'âme/Die Augen sind ein Fenster zur Seele).

Spacecowboy
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Most sayings when put in a language other than English seems a lot better. Is the translation the same for French?

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Not directly. It says "The eyes are a window into the soul." Frankly, there are many versions of that one, so yours if accurate, but that's the one that struck with me mostly 'cause it's closest to the German version "Die Augen sind ein Fenster zur Seele."

Spacecowboy
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And I've learned something new for the day! That's pretty nifty to know.

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I don't quite follow? :twilightblush:

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Wasn't aware of it's origin. It's a very common phrase, and it's always interesting to learn where such things originate from.

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Aww, did I hint that it originates from either french or german? If so excusez moi, but the origin of that phrase is unknown. Some say Shakespeare used it first, some say Leonardo DaVinci. The phrase you used, as well as its "sisterphrases" exist in almost every language.

The eyes of our souls only then begin to see, when our bodily eyes are closing.
Die Augen unserer Seelen beginnen erst dann zu sehen, wenn usere körperlichen Augen sich schließen.

Thou sun, of this great world both eye and soul. -Milton.
Du Sonne, dieser Welt Aug' und Seele.
Tu soleil, de cet monde oeil et âme.

To name a few of the spinoffs.
Well, that's somewhat useless but still. Have a nice day. :pinkiecrazy:

I want this to be featured. It deserves it.

Not bad. I enjoyed this.

Bout Bloody Time.:twilightsmile:

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Who's that?

:flutterrage: We must find the down voters and BURNS THEM!!!!!

2912905 :yay: Yes, burn the haters!

Finally, I've been waiting for a fic like this for an age. :twilightsmile:

Bravo! :yay:

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Liked and Fav'ed.

and a caring pony underneath her hard exterior.
but her eyes showed an infinite ability to care for everypony and everything.

You used "care" or "caring" pretty close to one another when describing Rainbow and Flutters. You could easily change the second instance using "kind" pretty easily.

Though I know this was not meant to be sad, I cannot help but feel a little morose. Yes, Twilight is able to overcome the loss of her friends and is able to look forward to meeting many others. However, she cannot make new memories with her old friends. That is think is always the kicker, even though her friends are with her in memory, they are just that. There is no surprise to look forward to, no sense of wonder. Memories hold no bewilderment. So even though Twilight may be happy, there is still some linger sadness in the fact that all she really has of her friends are memories, and will those even start to fade after a time?

Wow. This is great! Short, but very well done. Made in an hour, but with the effort of several day's hard work.

Spacecowboy
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Thanks Four. Adjusted it, I was supposed to use kind with Shy, I just derped then never caught it. Was supposed to allude to their elements and whatnot.

As far as the sadness, it's hard to hit on what I included and have it not have some sadness. But, the glass is half full in this instance.

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Thanks a lot. : )

Spacecowboy
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Glad y'all enjoyed it!

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I'd been trying to think of something to counter the Twilight sadfics out there, but it took a long time for me to find something I was happy with. This is short, to the point, and does a decent job I believe.

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Whoops, missed some. thanks for reading, glad y'all enjoyed it.

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I wish there were more fics like this and less "Immortality is a curse blah blah".

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Thanks you much, glad you enjoyed it.

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The Polish version of that saying translates directly as:
The eyes are the reflection of a soul.
I wonder how many different versions there could be...



And this is a story that has earned its rightful place in the feature box! I am going to pitch in to make sure it's high up there!
Seriously, for a sudden idea and an hour of work, this is masterwork, really. All of highest quality!:raritywink:

Keep up the good work!:twilightsmile:

2913131 No, thank you for writing this! :twilightsmile:

It's always nice to see that I'm not completely in the minority on the immortality issue... There is a slowly creeping number of these sort of stories, which I am very glad to see!

Nice work. Short, but to the point.

Spacecowboy
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And we cross paths once more! That's very interesting. So many variations on the simple saying.
Thanks for the kind words, this was a concept I'd been trying to find a way to convey for some time, it just took me months to get it down.

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No problem at all.

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Indeed. Downsides and upsides to it, gotta look at the upsides more often. And yeah, it is short, but that was indeed the point this time around. First one shot I've successfully completed in the last seven months. Most either balloon into their own stories or sit forgotten once I get 500-1000 words in.

Wow.. Words cannot describe the feels that I am feeling right now... Or did that describe them? Did this sentence contradict itself? Eh... Whatever, Good one-shot. I mean REALLY Good!

Spacecowboy
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I'm glad that you enjoyed it. : )

2913351 I would have to be a ROCK not to, but am I a rock?

The world with never know.

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So you're saying the glass it half empty? No wait, I'm an engineer, I don't even know what I am supposed to think!

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I don't know why, must still be drowsy.

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Or Spike's still alive. Remember, the show talked about a dragon having a 100 year nap. A NAP. Chances are dragons probably live for, thousands of years there if they can afford to take 100 just to sleep.
Ponies obviously have much shorter lives in comparison.
So it's not that no one cars about him, it's just that he's probably still alive and thus not important to the story since she'd talking about the loss of her friends. :moustache:

Spacecowboy
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:rainbowlaugh:

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Truthfully, I had indeed thought about Spike, and giving him a line in the one shot. Whether he would be napping, off in the dragon lands, I pictured him as being out of Equestria or not reachable at the time. Or something like that. I went to write two or three lines, but ended up deleting them all. Few other things got nixed, poor Spike is just one of those things that's so easy to forget.

This pretty much matches my own view on the "curse of immortality" thing - sure, you'll outlive your friends, but with a friend the same age as you there's a 50/50 chance you'll wind up bidding them farewell the same way anyway. Immortality means your memory of those friends will live on forever, and that you'll have all the time in the world to make new friends as well.

Not to mention that based on my interpretation of the details of Twilight's ascension, alicorns aren't so much immortal as they are able to freely come and go from the realm beyond death. So maybe Twilight will be able to visit with her friends after they're dead too. :twilightsmile:

Yay, found a story where someone explores the happy side to immortality. This was good to read.:twilightsmile:

But, I don't hate you for that. Even as I watched the first of my friends pass, I wasn't sad. Looking at Pinkie lying there, her body wracked with pain as she took labored breaths, her eyes reminded me about all the good times we had. Her joy filled them until her last breath, as if saying everything would be just fine. I'm fairly certain some ponies thought I was going insane when I couldn't help but laugh as I sat there at her bedside. But how could I cry? Sure, I was sad, but everything with Pinkie was focused on keeping everypony happy, and what better personifies happiness than laughter?

This ending of Pinkie Pie is used ALOT, but every time... *Sniff* I tear up at it...

A great story, to be sure, but I could have sworn that Faust has already said that Twilight would not outlive her friends.

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Yup. Enjoyed finally writing a 'look at the upside'

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Pinkie is just awesome. Even in death.

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Fanfiction my friend, fanfiction. Was a counter to all the 'woe is me, I'm an alicorn and immortal' stories folks did.

This reminds me of quote by dr seuss: Dont cry because it's over, smile because it happened.

I think that this story enscapulates that quote perfectly. I really wish there were more stories like this, it seems like fimfiction is an ocean of sad tags some days.

Spacecowboy
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Mother fuckin Dr. Seuss. Gods, yes. All my yes.

A quickie based on immortality? Does that make TQP the long version? xD

Spacecowboy
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quickie. lol. Dirty thoughts!

You know, I like this because it isn't saccharine or purposefully tug-at-your-heartstrings bittersweet. It feels heartfelt and like you wrote these words from a sincere place. You don't see that very often.

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Thanks, and glad you enjoyed it

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