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The star system Omega Centauri was just another oddity on a map to scientists in the not too distant future. However when they found the star was orbiting an earth-sized, earth-like planet instead of a black hole as its motion had suggested, a mission was scrambled to investigate this most unusual of celestial behaviors.

Hamstrung by politics, and nearly crippled before it began, the 'Lone Ranger' mission was reduced to just one crew member and left to his own devices.

These are the logs of Arrow 18 and its lone commander. This information is classified TOP SECRET by the Global Space Agency.

Do NOT tell the princess.

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And thus begins one of the most unique HiE fics yet.

As they say, Tracking like the Firey Hoof of an Angry Sun Goddess.

Yeah, this is going to be good.

Indeed, a well- written epistolary fic. :twilightsmile:

Very good so far, very good. I shall definitely track your story: I'm always interested in first contact scenarios written the right way.
Only thing I could find wrong was you forgot to uppercase a mention of the "Raven". In the paragraph above the last picture you used. Nothing major.


Excellent story, this is so getting tracked. Interesting take, and I'm really liking how you're building up the interaction rather than just having them speak Human right from the start.

Looking forward to seeing the reactions to other sapients like griffons or cows, especially after the exchanges of food. And now we get so see how Rarity responds to the flight suit.

Great story, looking forward to more!

this is gunna be sooooo goood.

You play Orbiter! I love DanSteph's addons!

What's this? A Human in Equestria story that actually has interesting interaction between characters and point of view of the human character? Really, this was a very entertaining read and the manner in which they first attempt to communicate was very clever. What makes this so different from the other Human in Equestria stories is that you actually know how to pace the story.

It's a slow but enjoyable build up with the characters. I can't believe it, but I'm going to track a Human in Equestria story.

Keep up the good work. :ajsmug:

FYI, first comment on this site.

I have to say I'm liking this so far. Twilight being First Contact Pony makes a lot of sense - especially since I suspect the unseen observer is Luna.

I also think our unnamed protagonist is handling the whole thing pretty well. I'd be amused to see the scientific communities reaction...

"Sapient, you say?"
"Well they've got agriculture, buildings, businesses and a managed environment, so yes."
"And... intelligent?"
"I think this one would give you a run for your money..." :twilightsmile:


Of course they don't. Why do you think the scientific community went HAYwire?


My reaction upon seeing the UCGO Arrow freighter in the opening pic:
Followed by

AdmiralTigerClaw is an Orbiter fan! Now I've got to read this.

I have to say, i make a point to avoid "Human in Equestria" fics, but this is absolutely golden, loving every second

I'm really enjoying this so far.

Oh my god, this is simply fantastic. Tracked harder than I have ever tracked a story before.

Most interesting HiE fic ever. Good job so far on the 'different languages' path. It's a really good plot device.

I really like the pointing out of the sun-moon cycle.


Cant tell if troll,

Or just ignorant.

AdmiralTigerClaw, you have once again captured my attention. *tracked and thumbs up*

This is quite a different take than any HiE fics that I have read so far. Almost refreshing in a way. And because of that I find myself wanting more. Well done sir. Well done.

Keep up the excellent work!

Haven't read a Human in Equestria fic this good since Thessalonica Legacy. Really well done. Poor unnamed protagonist having to do a mission designed for 30 people all alone. I like the more sci-fi approach to reaching Equestria and how it is Celestia and Luna manipulating the sun/moon respectively that got humans attention. :rainbowlaugh:

278477 or maybe commented on the description before the chapter, thinking it was a typo :ajbemused:

... can't tell if mule,
or just mule.

this is wonderful MORE MORE! '

i love the fact that this is a HIE story that does not have the human be a brony. the entire slow buildup, the slow scientifc methodology employed by the narrator. the fact that they do NOT share a common language. the scientific puzzlement at a geocentric solar system, this warms the cockles of my science loving heart. please MORE

( i also love how Luna is just creeping about, nice touch)


If you cant tell if I'm a mule or not you have other problems. :raritywink:

Besides that, I always like HIE taking a more scientific approach to the troupe. And this is no exception, and despite that you still find a refreshingly different approach to getting to Equetria. Using the journal entries to tell the story works well, in how it is done here. Characterization is spot on, and I cant wait to read more.

P.S Luna is a creeper.

Like this one a lot. Nice approach on the subject and I like the logbook style. Have been thinking about how to pull that off for a HiE fic myself.

I usually dislike HiE fics, but this one is tracked! :pinkiehappy:

Found a minor error: "I returned to my spot to continue observations a little more discretely" It should be discreetly, not discretely.

>> AdmiralTigerclaw

Alright, I said I'd read it and I have.
Wow. I've read a lot of space-opera-style fanfics, but yours is the first I've come across that felt like real Science Fiction. My inner scientist/engineer was squealing like a schoolfilly the whole time! I love how this first contact situation wasn't resolved in thirty seconds by either the local ponies speaking English or Twilight (or the princesses) pulling a Universal Translator spell out of nowhere. Not that I have anything against those tropes, but this was a wonderful change of pace.
I have to say I am -very- jealous of your protagonist. He gets to fly a DanSteph Arrow freighter to a freaky rule-breaking solar system, cruise over Equestria in an XR2, has a Sagan-esque first-contact with Twilight... yeah.
Overall, I really like the style (logbook, very appropriate) and pacing you've got going here. Aside from some minor grammatical goof-ups (of the kind that everybody makes) this story has a lot going for it. Consider it tracked! I'll be anxiously awaiting the next chapters.


I.. I believe that I actually love this fic. It's the best take on HiE I've seen yet, and I don't usually even like HiE fics. I think the main selling point is the fact that there's no fourth wall to be broken, and that the language barrier is portrayed realistically.

I am very, very eager to see this update. Great job!

This is very interesting. I am looking forward to seeing more!

About time there's a HiE story that human isn't a brony and/or trying to get away from the crule wrold by being "magically" teleported to Equestria. And they're interacting differently than just by simply speaking English. Keep up the good work! :twilightsmile:

This is very much an interesting idea of a story, and one I'll very much track and read. Well done so far, my man!

LOL, I like it. Will track and hope for updates.

Wonder how Apple Jack and Fluttershy will react when they finally meet him.

Language barriers are certainly interesting parts of HiE stories, and this one is a new take indeed - and very well executed. Some small spots of editing need doing, but mistakes are only minor. This is truly a fantastic piece of work, and I'm waiting for the next chapter quite anxiously!

The pictures are annoying, do not like.

Comment posted by Geyshawins deleted Mar 24th, 2016

Very interesting start, definitely be tracking. About ten minutes after I finished reading the second chapter, I finally figured out who was watching the protagonist. (Felt like a total idiot afterward)

This is awesome.
Keep going.

I am so far beyond looking forward to the next chapter. I'm jumping up and down, and tripping over horse-apples waiting for the next chapter!:rainbowlaugh::rainbowwild:

Absolutely astounding. You really have hit the nail on the head with this. I've never read such a good first-contact HiE fic before. Bravo good sir, keep at it. :twilightsmile:

278840 Just to be clear it is the -pictures- I do not like in the fic.

The fic itself is one of the better ones I have read on here ever.

I hope to see more of this.^_^

One small mistake: "Tomorrow" is spelt "Tomarrow" at one point.

As someone who has been subjects to my friends arguing over the complexities of spaceflight, I am in love with this fic.

I expect more in the future.

Is anyone else getting the vibe that this thing that's stalking him is actually Luna?


I was skeptical of this fic, but I'm really happy I gave it a shot. I wonder how you will go about with dialogue once Twlight learns English.

Very good, love how this plays out. Keep it up!!!:pinkiehappy:

or i will cry:fluttercry:

like a women on her monthly:raritycry:


This is a great story. Please keep it up. I would give constructive criticisms, but I just can't find anything wrong with it. I didn't even notice any (unintentional) grammar mistakes (though that's not saying much. I'm a terrible proofreader).

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