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Hoopy McGee

Hoopy's just this guy, you know?



It is the year 2038, and the Earth is slowly being consumed by a space-borne monstrosity dubbed the Black Tide, which is using nanotechnology to remake the planet into something hideously alien.

Erin Olsen works for Project Harmonics, humanity's last-ditch effort to find a new world before the Tide can wipe them out. But when that world is found, and it turns out to be occupied, Erin will need to find the courage to face the unknown in order to save the inhabitants of both worlds.

(Many thanks to Easteu for the fantastic cover image for this story!)

Now with its own TV Tropes page

There is now a follow-up to this story: Sunflower - Side Projects
Sequel: Project Sunflower: Harmony

Chapters (35)
Comments ( 3514 )

:rainbowhuh: My reaction at first., but it's pretty awesome. Keep it up!

This so-called "black tide" is really The Smooze, isn't it?

I guess if it starts singing, then we'll know. :rainbowlaugh:

Excellent story so far! However, in the future, you might want to try posting the chapters individually over time instead all at once. Also, :pinkiehappy:! Hopefully there'll be mane-6 interaction. What I see happening is she'll end up bringing up the humans accidentally, and shenanigans ensue. And I'm fairly sure there will be, seeing the characters listed.


My original thought was that I was going to write the whole thing, then post it all at once... opted not to, because, well... One, this will end up being fairly long, and two, I'm a feedback junkie :pinkiecrazy:

Also, and more realistically, I was having tons of trouble making the opening chapters work. I knew where I wanted to take the story, just didn't know how to get there. I really wanted to make sure I'd have the beginning of the story solid, even though I'm not 100% happy with it, rather than getting started, getting people reading it, and then scrapping it because I was getting tired of the headache I got from banging my head against the wall :derpyderp2:

I finally realized that I was over-explaining things :facehoof: Once I cut back a bit on that, things flowed more naturally.

@Zobeid I didn't even THINK of the Smooze, but that's actually a pretty funny thought! :pinkiehappy:

really like the story but I would maby make the chapters shorter

Guh, I will read this. Sounds intresting. But not now *yawn*

I really like where this is going, and I really like Erin. She jumped about seventy spots on my 'best pony' list when she threatened to buck anyone who laughed. :ajsmug: She's a live one!

I think the chapters length doesn't matter, You are putting in the Perfect amount of detail.
This Story is very well made and I would be surprised if you didn't want feedback, it makes writers appreciate they're work more.
You are doing a great job and i hope to see more of your writings, Good Luck.


good tension you are building


Oh you will just have surgery to put sensors on your body, nothing more.


I disagree. I like long, well written and paced chapters.

Allright, this really looks good. Awaiting more.

Awesome story! Can't wait for more! :pinkiehappy:

A very enjoyable story. Wish it was a bit harder Sci-Fi wise, though of course with magical ponies as an integral part of the story it's not really an issue.
Awaiting for more.

Folks, check out this awesome sketch by Easteu. Not only is it the first fanart I've ever received for my fanfics, but it looks awesome to boot!
Edit: Now in color and looking better than ever!

Well i just read that it won't be posted on equestria daily:fluttercry:
im extremely sad, this was a good story and i would love to read it, um is your username the same where your posting it, can you post here where i can find it. like i said ill be looking for this... i wish you good luck

I guess that it too close to the conversion bureau stories,
They are not posting anymore of them.:facehoof:
However, I want more, I like your take on that idea.:twilightsmile:

I feel this just made the plot extremly good, for those of us who like science it was even better, although my friend said to me he didnt want to read it because it was more about humans than ponies, i tried to tell him it gets realy good in next ones but he wouldnt read anymore, i hoped it was just him.:fluttercry:

I really like this story, the concept is really interesting and I see a lot of potential. I'm eager to see where you take this.

I am a bit nervous about the comments the other two volunteers who backed out made. I seriously hope this doesn't end like Avatar.

wow im looking froward to reading more ^^ keep it up


Ooh, I was just looking through my tracked fics and noticed the new title image. It's awesome! :yay:


I agree! Easteu did a fantastic job, and I think really captured the essence of the story.

Still re-writing the first three chapters, but I decided that I would continue writing new chapters concurrently. I want to keep the story going, especially now that I've finally reached the point (PONIES!!!) that I am most excited about writing.

Also, FYI, writing AJ's dialogue is hard for me. If it comes across as too corny, and you have recommendations, please let me know. In addition, spellcheckers and Applejack don't get along very well.

Yay, an update!
...I've got nothing.


me too.
Great story.

I Love You man, I've been waiting for this story to update. Very good chapter, although some people when they hear voices in they're head put in italised to make it look like a thought. but i don't know im not a good writer, Thanks for the story...i will be waiting...watching...:heart:

Goddamm, I always sucked at constructive critisism.
Well, I have no Problems with AJ's accent, but I'm german and can't really tell. Oh boy. I just wonder...
1) Eri is full of tecnologic stuff. Maybe Unicorns can notice...
2) While she isn't connected to the lab (like right now), will all data be saved for later transfer?

Keep going, Hoopy!

I'll say it again, Erin is a great character. Very human, fallible without being exaggeratedly inept to further a plot or create artificial tension. "'Wonderful', he says," probably won her another couple ranks on my best pony list all by itself, and I really respected her for not stealing that apple. I feel like I'm in there with her, too, when I read - there's something I can't quite put my finger on in your writing that totally draws me in.

Of course she'd start meeting members of the Mane 6 immediately. Call it a geas, ta'veren, or simple narrative causality, but I think it's no coincidence that interesting things are naturally drawn to them. Probably a side effect of the Elements.

(Specifically in reply to 222330) AJ sounded good to me too.

Imagine the shenanigans if Twilight picked up on it and got her hooves on all that tech. I know I'd be scared. And yeah, I'm pretty sure one of them mentioned data storage previously. They certainly would have set it up that way, since they were planning for possibly having to communicate only through larger windows.

I'm a little bit interested in the 20 minute mute button that we heard about earlier, where it is, when she might use it. It has me curious.

A very good chapter. The flow of the story is absolutely irresistible, I dived into it and nothing could distract me. Of course no small part of it's charm is how relatable and believable Erin is.
AJ's accent is perfectly fine, as far as I can tell.
The only problem I see right away is, like with every good story, that it seems too short.

i re-read all of the chapters for the 4th time, i love this story. i check to see if it updates every day. then if it doesn't i re-read it again.

Must Read more, it's killing me:fluttercry:

Sorry about that! Next chapter has been delayed due to crazy work stuff, but should have it out by end of day on Sunday :twilightsmile:

Thanks for a ETA on the next chapter, i really like this story. I will be waiting:pinkiehappy:

"No, yer a freeloader,"

:rainbowlaugh: I love it.

It was nice to get an idea of how her enhanced abilities actually stack up against Equestrian ponies. It's a frightening idea that what they thought would give her a significant advantage turns out only to put her on par with a trained athlete. Still, even that's not half bad - I'm sure she's thankful for what she's got!

Great story so far Hoopy! I eagerly await more chapters.

Like so many people have commented so far, Erin has been a great character so far. Your representation of the Mane 6 has been exactly how I would have imagined them to react.

The only question I had in my mind was the source on the initial reconnaissance information. I am assuming by the way it was written it was some kind of UAV device, and this amount of description works well with the story as we really don't need anymore information regarding this. It does raise the question of, is there now a large amount of human technology floating around Equestria that Erin may have access to, or may have been discovered by someone?

Great reference to the pinkie sense! I never considered it at all.

Yes very good chapter, i hope i don't have to wait long for the next one.
Please don't keep me waiting forever, This si a very good story and I Want MOAR:pinkiehappy:

This text is delicious, can't get enough of it. Reading every new chapter makes me genuinely happy. :twilightsmile:
Everypony seems to be perfectly in character, and with Pinkie it's no small feat as far as I know.

Ever sent this to EqD? I don't see any issues, and it sure would push the views. For such a great story those are way too low.

Again, I want to thank everyone for reading, and for feedback! :twilightsmile: It really makes my day. Also, hearing that the Mane 6 (that I've introduced so far) are in character is VERY important to me. If I ever deviate from that in your eyes, please don't hesitate to let me know!

EQD rejected my entry, unfortunately. There were some grammar and punctuation errors in the first three chapters, and they found the pace to be a bit slow (too long to get to the ponies, as I recall). Plus some other issues, mainly with the science behind "ponification", which is a word I completely and unashamedly stole from the Conversion Bureau stories :scootangel:

I'm currently re-working those chapters, which looks like it will reduce it from the intro plus 3 chapters to a slightly longer intro plus two chapters, thus getting to ponies a lot faster (hopefully without losing story elements!). Work on that is going slowly, though, as I want to keep writing new chapters for all the folks that have read it so far.

My goal is to get at least a chapter of about this size (between 4-5k words) done every week. This is pretty easily do-able, at least when I'm not working crazy overtime :applecry:

I have an idea that I have for that, but I'm not 100% sure if I want to work it into the story or not... I guess we'll see!

Heheh, yeah, I was kind of building her up a bit, to make it seem like she was going to be a Mary Sue, then I yanked the rug out from under the poor girl's hooves :rainbowlaugh:
All according to plan :pinkiecrazy:
But you're right, being able to keep up with Ponyville's top atheletes is not something she should be ashamed of. She just doesn't know yet that they're basically the best around.

Also, as a side note, the spell-checker in Word HATES the Apple family dialogue! :applejackconfused: :rainbowlaugh:

How do I respond to people instead of posts?
Anyway, grammar and spelling is easily fixed I guess. About the "too long till pony", maybe some jumps into equestria would work, or an insight at the team wich observes "Ponyworld" once they find it.

Wow, this was a fun read. This is actually one of the most interesting scifi stories I've read here on Fimfiction. I love the sense of desperation among the humans and personally I didn't mind not getting to ponies until later on. Might be cool to try to explain more about how some of the technology works, particularly the portals. This is really good though. I want moar!!!! :flutterrage:


...Seriously? If it comes down to the human race, our species having no choice but to murder another to survive, we should die?

Hell with that. At least if I'm regretting xenocide I'm still alive and able to do so. Humanity can do incredibly evil things and get better- just take a look at our old enemies from WW2 now! Extinction, on the other hand, is kinda harder to recover from.

Besides, why would we drive the ponies extinct? All we'd have to do is launch an overwhelming first strike against Canterlot. Local deities, obliterated in nuclear fire, local magic superweapon, vaporized along with them. All hope of effective resistance effectively destroyed while still leaving a more than viable population of ponies to continue the species. Sure, they'd hate us for the next century or two or maybe even longer, but what could they really do?

Well, new post is up, a bit early (my self-imposed deadline is a chapter by end of day each Sunday). This one is a relatively long one, second longest so far, but I'm fairly happy with it. Some new OC's, though hopefully not so many that it gets annoying.

Just click on reply at the post you want to reply to, then type. If there's another reply you want to make, then click on that post, and it will automatically add the post wherever your cursor is.

Thanks again, everyone, and as always, feedback is welcome! :twilightsmile:

"Magical magic"
"Magicaly magical?"
"Black magic"
Great chapter, can't wait for more. i will wait though.
i wonder why twilight was looking at her funny, possible defect in her pony body that noone noticed.
the book she was reading, reading her mind...

And Celestia/Luna observe Project: Sunflower with Twi, wich is why she was shocked.
Try hiding tec from immortal, magical alicorns...

It's so fascinating to see Equestria from this perspective. I've probably already said that. :derpyderp2: She's going to be floored yet again when she starts to find out exactly how much of that book was literal, I think.

IT'S BEEN A WEEK!!!! I WANT MOAR ALREADY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
...If you wouldn't mind that is :fluttershysad:

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