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Draven Eclipse


Not so long ago, Equestria barely defeated two almost unstoppable creatures known as humans, which they called the Second and the First. Almost five years later, another one has shown up. The military takes up arms, the princesses are stricken with fear, and the Elements of Harmony assemble, ready for battle. But 'the Third' has no idea what's going on, and only wants to know how he came to be here, and how to get back home. Good questions indeed...But will he ever get his answers? Or will his predecessors' legacy catch up to him first?

“Side story/prequel to Human by DannyJ, but can be read on its own. Contains spoilers.”

Chapters (7)
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That description alone makes me think this will be a superior HiE story. Marked to read for later, will return tonight. :trixieshiftright:

653618 Ditto. After I've read it, I will edit this comment with my thoughts.

[strike]I'll just ask you one thing: did you ask DannyJ permission to make this? I won't rage with this point, but I just think it would be the polite thing to do.[/strike]
Disregard that. I just saw his update about it.

Yup, it is definitely well written and I'm kind of eager to see what happens next... curious, because I usually hate HiE stories (this and Human being one of the few exceptions)


I'm liking this. Can't wait for more! :twilightsmile:

This is a bit different than usual..



Just read Human.. Am now officially psyched to hear about this prequel/prologue.

I think he took it in stride, all in all.

Heya Dannyboy, how's it feel to have other people writing side-stories for your work? :pinkiecrazy:

Here's a question; do you consider this canon to the story of Human?

About the fic; looking pretty good so far. Not quite as zany or fast-paced as the beginning to Human was, but I suppose that's to be expected. Consider yourself tracked. :rainbowkiss:


Completely. There are already a few subtle references to this story in recent chapters of Human if you know what you're looking for.


In that case, I shall give your story's latest chapters yet another read-through. You magnificent bastard you. :rainbowwild:

Wow! Now I know how to write a good story! Use drugs! Thanks DannyJ! :D

...just kidding :3.

Good story so far also.

I had this idea a few monthes ago.:twilightangry2: Never got around to trying it out. Oh well, good on ya for getting it out here!:pinkiehappy:


A human sequel/prequel:yay: brace yourself epicness incoming:pinkiehappy:


I wouldn't have pegged Human as being a story someone would start writing sidefics to, but I'm pleasantly surprised. Continue to surprise me pleasantly.

I enjoyed this chapter thoroughly. Added to favourites.

She approached the river edge and took a deep breath. She had to make it quite clear from the beginning that she was a friend. Unlike those stupid ponies that had attacked the last humans who visited on sight.

I lol'd, that's how a lot of HiE fics i read went! :rainbowlaugh:


I'm to tired to read this right now, i'll read it later. Send this to Poultron!

Hmmm.... When I read the title I thought this would have something to do with "50 Shades of Grey"...

Great story! I lol'd at the editors notes and the allusion to Pokèmon. Keep up the great writing!

P.s. the only bad thing is that this may spark a chain of 'Human' stories leading to us meeting the Nine-hundred Twenty-sixth

Haha than
*braces* Oh man I am so excited. Any idea when it will be here?
Why thank you, more to come :3
Does that make me Berry Punch? Awesome!
I have never read that book before. But who is up for a romance subplot?!

A sidestory of the first fanfiction I gave a chance. (Started chapter one minutes after the damned thing was posted.) AND its good. AND being edited by the author of the first story. AND that editor promised bat-shit insanity even through evil editor power means.

Go on... :twilightsmile:


"Fifty Shades of Grey" originated as a Twilight fanfiction. I haven't read it either, but personally, I don't expect this mix to end well. :ajsleepy:

You haven't read "50 Shades of Grey?"
It's an erotic fiction. You don't want to.
At least I don't think you want to . . .


That would be the 'Twilight + Fanfiction' mix. And I mean the Stephenie Meyer Twilight, not our Twilight :twilightsmile:

well first off i would like to thank you for your addition to FIM.com. it is one of the better ones that i have seen and only one chapter in and you have me hooked! keep up the great work!

I sware if I had a dollar for every time I see a Human In Equestria fic where the OC rans his/hers hand through his/her hair... I'd be a billionaire...:facehoof:

THANK YOU SO MUCH. I love human, but I was really missing the mane 6. Hopefully they will have major roles in this fic, since they are actually alive in this time period. And thank you you not making third a brony, HIE fics with bronies are so awkward.:rainbowkiss:

*looks at description*

Someone correct me because I am very confused, if this takes place 5 years after Lord seconds reign, and his reign was 1000 years after the original elements died. How come the Mane Six and alive and Lyra. Someone help a confused person out, before my brain fucks itself.

This takes place five years after First and Second first appeared in Equestria. The events in Human take place 1000 years after First and Second appeared.

Ohhhhhhhh, Thank you for clearing that up, my brain was reading everything wrong :derpytongue2:

Fancypants is part of the Brotherhood of Man. Why am I not surprised?

I'm confused, the original Brotherhood of Man wasn't so much evil as just curious about the new species, and then slowly evolved into the evil, princess-hating cult they are today, right? :rainbowhuh:
Correct me if I'm wrong

35 views and 123 likes? Because screw logic. Real comment will come in a few hours time when I read the fic this is based off of...Wow I really need to think things through more.

Interesting. I use to leave comments in your Human story about me being the third after I read second killing what his face I think Broadsword because that part of the story came out of no where. I didn't know there was going to be a third. Well anyway keep up the awesome work. I can't wait for the chapter. :pinkiehappy:

well if my eye sight wasent blurry from all the reading i would read this but till later i will have to put this on for read later.

I haven't bothered to read the comments yet, so I have no idea if this has been answered already; will Hayato (the Third) have powers like First and Second? The Authors Notes said it would stay true to the Human universe, but I wasn't completely sure. :derpytongue2:

hmmm... not bad... i will have to read more before giving an actual opinion. :rainbowdetermined2:

Fantastic. It will be interesting to see what comes of this.

I assume the plot revolves around Tirac, the dragon extinction, and this Eclipse thing? It also brings up other questions, such as where the Third is during the events of the other story. The First controls the afterlife now, and it was said that he was the only human there, and the Second is doing stuff as well.

So then if the Third did not die then what happened? Did his spirit leave with the other elements when he passed on? Did he go back home?

All questions I look forward to getting the answers to.

There were many grammar issues.
And the writing was... adequate.:trixieshiftleft:

The plot didn't make sense to me, oh well.:unsuresweetie:

...just use a text-to-speech software, problem solved. :derpytongue2:
Also, that'd allow you to perform other tasks simultanously, such as, say, playing videogames or draw silly pictures and whatnot. :pinkiecrazy:

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