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This story is a sequel to Arrow 18 Mission Logs: Lone Ranger

In the year 2258, Randolph Edwards, captain of the Arrow 18, was stranded on the planet when Luna saved him from an explosion. Though his life was saved, he had lost his legs, and any chance to get back home any time soon.

After extensive research to ensure the proper parts won't fail, selecting a group to send, and training said group, Global Space Agency has sent a new team to the mysterious geocentric planet and retrieve Captain Edwards.

It has been 4 1/2 years since Randy last saw another human, and is excited about being able to go home


This is the unofficial sequel of Arrow 18 Mission Logs: Lone Ranger by AdmiralTigerclaw. In need of cover art.

First Published
20th Apr 2017
Last Modified
20th Apr 2017
#1 · 4d, 23h ago · 1 · ·

Awesome to see more of this universe :)

One thing I saw that messed with me for a moment:

Twilight had been given a pair of prosthetic legs that Twilight built

I don't think Twilight should be who received the legs.

I don't normally see errors, as I suck at spelling at whatnot (thank you spellcheck) figured I would point that out though

Cant wait to read more.

#2 · 4d, 21h ago · 1 · ·

One of the greatest fan fictions of all time continues!

#3 · 4d, 20h ago · · ·

>>8107925 Thanks for pointing that out. I fixed it.

#4 · 4d, 19h ago · 2 · ·

Randy was outside that night, looking through his telescope at the night sky when he noticed something. It wasn’t a star, so his first assumption that may it was a commit or something.

'commit' should be 'comet'. I actually had a whole lunatic Paranoia-style reply lined up before I came to my senses about this.

The Princesses Are Your Friends™.

#5 · 4d, 16h ago · · ·

Though it was later named Equus

Uh, why? Pony-Earth have lot of other inhabitants that not equine. I'm pretty sure that the would object about naming planet over ponies.

Oh and their world actually named Earth :).

seeing as humans had a natural immunity to magic

IIRC humans in Arrow 18 don't have "natural immunity to magic". They have immunity to several magic effects like Luna dreamwalking, cockatrice stare and lots of others but not "total magic immunity".

#6 · 4d, 15h ago · 1 · ·

Mfw I scroll through fimfiction and find this!

:yay:

#7 · 4d, 14h ago · 1 · ·

I loved Arrow 18! I can't wait to see how this well go.

#8 · 4d, 4h ago · · ·

Did the Admiral endorse this sequel?

#9 · 4d, 2h ago · · ·

>>8108176 I'm accepting to any corrections you'd point out, so I'm glad you didn't go into anything overboard. And thank you for pointing that out. I'd rather be corrected than to hear a rant about what's wrong with my story (unless it's legitimately constructive criticism).

>>8108267 Admittedly, I might be mistaken about what Randy actually named the planet in the original story. But I'm not the one who came up with the idea for that name as being the name of the planet. And besides, calling the country "Equestria" is just as bad. And that's canon. In any case, the name wasn't my idea.

Oh and their world actually named Earth :).
Although I won't deny that as being canon in the show, when in the show have they ever called the planet "Earth"? If your answer is "Earth Ponies", the word "Earth" doesn't just refer to the name of our planet. It also refers to the ground in general. And as a final note, in the original story of Arrow 18, it's confirmed that it's a planet that's NOT Earth. Although, would you feel better if I add an "Alternate Universe" tag? I was thinking about doing that anyway, considering the inconsistencies with the canon.

IIRC humans in Arrow 18 don't have "natural immunity to magic". They have immunity to several magic effects like Luna dreamwalking, cockatrice stare and lots of others but not "total magic immunity".

That's what I meant by "immunity", because just because you have an immunity to something, it doesn't mean that something can't come near you. But to be fair, I didn't specify that. So how do you feel about me editing it to say "natural resistance"? And the point of what I said was to point out that Twilight wouldn't be able to use magic to enchant the prosthetic legs to act on his will.

#10 · 4d, 1h ago · · ·

>>8109448 I did ask him about it, and he pointed out that there is already a sequel that he endorsed that's intended to leave things open for sequels. Arrow 18: Supplemental. So if he considers this story to be part of the canon of his story is debatable. But to put it simply, AdmiralTigerclaw himself told me how to translate the pony language.

#11 · 4d, 1h ago · · ·

>>8109743

Although I won't deny that as being canon in the show, when in the show have they ever called the planet "Earth"?

In "Hearth Warming" episode when AJ/Smart Cookie pointed that Pinkie/Puddinghead holding a map upside down Pinkie answered that "The Earth is round, there is no up or down!".

And considering that word "Earth" more or less just mean "something under our feets" I doubt that humans are only one who called their planet like that. Most likely all aliens home planets are named "Earth" in their native tongue.

But to be fair, I didn't specify that. So how do you feel about me editing it to say "natural resistance"

I think that "resistance" sound better that "immunity".

#12 · 3d, 22h ago · · ·

>>8109871

In "Hearth Warming" episode when AJ/Smart Cookie pointed that Pinkie/Puddinghead holding a map upside down Pinkie answered that "The Earth is round, there is no up or down!".

Okay, fair enough. But that's another reason to add the "Alternate Universe" tag.

Most likely all aliens home planets are named "Earth" in their native tongue.

Well, that's assuming that their dialect and reasoning would be similar to ours.

#13 · 3d, 3h ago · · ·

Quantum Entanglement is an odd piece of phlebotinum to allow for instant communication. We are already on the verge of functional quantum computers, and I'm fairly sure quantum entanglement has already been achieved under lab conditions. At the time this takes place, with FTL travel in existence, quantum entanglement would be the phlebotinum equivalent of 'nuclear' stuff in the 50s  (and how it's viewed today). 'Quantum Connectivity' utilizing computers should already be in use.

Additionally, the problem with entangled particles is that they cannot transmit usable information. A much better piece of explanation would be to say that new communication systems were developed that could utilize Quantum Entanglement for FTL comms.

Also, you wouldn't have prototype computers utilizing it. You'd have prototype communication systems attached to computers. After all, computer =/= transmitter.

#14 · 2d, 21h ago · 2 · ·

<BACKS THE FUCK UP, SITS THE FUCK DOWN, FUKKEN' READS DIS BITCH>

#15 · 2d, 16h ago · · ·

Holy shit, a sequel?!

MUST

READ

#16 · 2d, 2h ago · · ·

>>8111778 Does the real world science really matter in Star Trek science babble? The original story did just that, science babble. Besides, the "quantum connectivity" is part of the hardware of the computer, so it wouldn't be a program. The name is a description of what it does. And besides, it's not the same as a quantum computer (though it would require the usage of a quantum computer). The only reason I'm using the quantum entanglement idea is because I once saw a video describing how federation ships in Star Trek can communicate instantaneously over long distances using real world science.

#17 · 1d, 22h ago · · ·

Why do authors feel the need to make what should be highly trained professionals behave like their in the back of the school bus. Would it be to much for characters that don't argue all the time on the most idiotic topics.

#18 · 1d, 11h ago · · ·

>>8114269 If you're talking about Alec, technically he's not a "trained professional". And besides, his issues are in fact part of something unrelated.

Arn
#19 · 22h, 50m ago · · ·

>>8114269

It's the stress man...

They're going toward something that "should" be a black hole.

In a system that "shouldn't" be stable.

To a star that "shouldn't" be orbiting a planet.

On a planet that "shouldn't" support life.

To a world where ponies "are" the dominate life form.

Those are the facts...they need something silly to argue about.

Or maybe you can show a good story with professional astronauts, fimfic or otherwise...

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