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A real lady killer.


One of the positive things about being enlisted in the Solar Guard is all the mares Rainbow Dash could possibly chase after.

A negative? The one she's really after is in the Lunar Guard, and she's pretty… batty.

Cover art by silbersternenlicht on Derpibooru.
Pre-read by Not Enough Coffee.
Proofread and edited by Dreams of Ponies and AAIQU.
Winner in the 2017 Thestral Writing Competition and 2nd place in the 4th Flutter-Dash Contest.
Featured 10/20/17 - 10/24/17.
With an audio reading!

Chapters (5)
Comments ( 183 )

THIS IS SO ADORABLE :rainbowkiss:

I love it! It was a magnificent story!!! Your doing great!:scootangel:

What does this have to do with American Bronies?


I'm an American? :unsuresweetie:

That's it? Just a place to shill your fic?


Groups are places to shelve your stories. It's really not an abstract concept.

Welp, there goes my chance at winning, right out the window... All in all though, great work!


Contest entries are scored by rating, and yours isn't rated T. You still have a chance. :scootangel:

Actually, I meant for the Flutterdash contest, and that story is rated T. Thanks for the info though, I didn't know that!

Congrats on being featured

Awesome so far, but phone battery forces me to delay reading the second half, so for now ill just leave an error here ;p

The match over almost as soon as it started, 

I think youre missing a “was“


I was just testing you I swear. :twilightblush:

An interesting idea and lovely execution. Nicely done

Loved it. :twilightsmile: You wrote it wonderfully, Jack.

Grats on getting featured!


Hope you like judging it for the contest. :scootangel:

*face palm* Just realized the title of this story is a blood type :rainbowlaugh: Anywayssss... super cute and thestral Fluttershy is epic! Great story!

Wow 339 views and featured cool!

This story deserves a sequel.


Glad to hear you liked it. I was pretty proud of that title. :twilightblush:


I was debating whether or not to make things between Rainbow Dash and Fluttershy a bit more saucy...

I wonder if people would like to see something like that. :raritywink:

bat pony does rainbow pony

I'd like for this to be expanded upon. You have an interesting world here that's prime for a larger story.

I need more Flutterthestral in my life

I love these title puns

I LOVE Quicksilver so much in this. An ThestralShy is fantastic, would love some backstory and some continuation on this world :pinkiehappy:

I actually laughed at Rainbow's reaction to the "use protection" line. She's getting all worked up about her superior telling her to be careful and get consent and all that, like she feels awkward hearing it, and my Army experience is just translating the whole thing as "standard weekend safety brief". The disconnect between military and civilian makes for some funny misunderstandings on this site.

Oh please do! This is a very interesting story and would be lovely to have a sequel.


Trash, 0 out of 10, 90/3 place. At least you tried.

“They say that in the night guard the cider’s mighty fine!”

“It smells like rotten apples and tastes like turpentine!”

“They say that in the night guard, the pay is mighty fine!”

“They gave me a hundred bits, and took back ninety-nine!”

Marched to that (well, the human version) every day in basic.

Very adorable.

I have some nitpicks

“I would of thought you’d be eager to rest. You got a thing for thestrals or something?”

Would have*

which almost glowed in Luna’s blue moon.

I hate that phrase with a passion that burns hotter than Celestia’s white sun.

Quicksilver crossed her hooves. “I admire that you’re all gung-ho about this whole thing, but don’t you think you might be moving too fast? I mean, you two just met, after all.”

Hell no, she’s not moving too fast! That’s how you get to know each other, you dunce. It’s just a date. It’s not like she’s marrying her yet.

Luna’s midnight sky painted the scene above them as they reveled in one another's company.

Again. It doesn’t contribute anything. It’s just an eyesore.

You should make a sequel. I love Flutterdash stories.

This one especially, I love the thought of Flutters becoming a Thestral, but since you didnt say how, I really want to know more.

Needs a second chapter or sequel where Dash talks to Mommy Luna.
Maybe thankingf her for watching over Fluttershy. Getting grilled.
Trying to ask for her blessing in courting Fluttershy.

So uh... I just noticed the puns in the name of the story and chapter title... What hellpit did you crawl out of to imagine something like that? Does your evil punnery know no bounds?

From what I've gathered from Terminal Lance and .50Cal, another standard safety brief is just wrap it before you tap it, make sure it doesn't have a ring on it, don't call 1st sgt, and don't lose any fights


Fixed the syntax error. Thank you! :twilightsmile:


Sleep deprivation mixed with inspiration of ideas crazy enough to work.


I'm glad you liked her. Writing OC's is always a fickle thing. :twilightsheepish:

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