After bumping into a rude pony from flight school, Rainbow tells a rather large lie to save face.
Shouldn't have did that, Dashie.
A two part story.
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All Art Is Quite Useless
When I'm not writing stories, I'm writing essays. My keyboard sees fairly frequent use. University student, high functioning Rainbow Dash enthusiast, and satirical activist.
All Art Is Quite Useless
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I'm all over this one!
Really liking it so far. Story flows so well.
Looking forward to the next part.
ouch rainbow that was kinda cold, poor twi she really dident deserve some of those.
Wouldn't it be Shouldn't have done that Dashie? Please do tell me if I'm wrong.
Other than that I rather enjoyed this story, and I am definitely going to be following this.
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Oh yeah, you're totally right. It's a colloquialism, intentional mistake. Thanks for pointing it out though! Glad to hear you're enjoying it.
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What didn't Twilight deserve? I do suppose Rainbow could be seen as acting cold in this chapter in some context, but I'm not entirely sure what you're getting at with this comment. Feel free to clarify!
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Thank you very much, I'm glad to hear so as one of my main concerns was the pacing. I'll be releasing it soon, so watch this space!
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That's great, thanks! Hope you enjoy the second part once it's out!
AAIQU
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Ahh, an intentional error! It seems there is still much I have to learn about writing.
Now this is a believable set up for these two to wind up together. I'm not sure if I feel more sad for Twilight here or Dash for being that oblivious.
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So you've got descriptive grammar and prescriptive grammar, right?
Descriptive grammar is a linguistic tool based upon analysing the patterns that writers and speakers commonly use in discourse, prose etc. and looking at the rules they themselves follow and set. Generally, if it's being said or used somewhere already, it's fair game.
Prescriptive grammar is adherence to official processes as outlined by grammar books and taught in schools. This is where people determine whether something is explicitly 'right' or 'wrong', grammatically correct or grammatically incorrect, and there's generally little wiggle room.
Fiction writers are more likely to lean a little more to the descriptive side of grammar for stylistic purposes, as you have a little more freedom to write without being under the constraints of every rule in the book. How much you do or don't lean depends on who you are and what you're writing, of course, and some may stick very close to the rules at all times.
Prescriptive writing is most useful in non-fiction and academic writing, as when you're imparting knowledge you're best off being as clear as possible at all times.
Just my basic reasoning on making an intentional error in my story description on this occasion.
AAIQU
Ps. Don't worry, we've all got lots to learn!
This story is amazing! I can't wait to see where it goes!
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I use more of a Chekhov's gun approach when it comes to story writing. Or at least that's how I describe it, others would probably call it moronic, but there are a good few people who enjoy my work...speaking of I should probably start writing the next chapter for my one story. TTYL
Rainbow, you are one dense motherbucker
Marginally depressed Twilight. Don't worry things will get better I hope.
Fantastic story.
Woah this is some good stuff!
But poor Luna
And all the hints that Twilight displayed, oblivious Dash[/spolier]
It's been a very long time since I actually enjoyed trudging through the TwiDash incoming folder. Thank you
I've always been confused by this set up. Why do people care so much about impressing assholes that they basically never see? Like, maybe I'm immune? But if somebody I hadn't seen since grade school, or high school, ages are vague in mlp, came up to me and started berating my life while building up their own, I'd probably shrug, congratulate them on their nice life, and then return to not thinking of or caring about them as I had been doing prior to their return.
I don't really know, it just seems like a silly thing to put effort into caring about. Plus, indifference is sort of the only way to win, technically, since there's no social power over people that couldn't care less.
On a related note, I'm not sure if it's only women that do the one upping thing or if it's just confirmation bias on my part because as far as real life is concerned, I've only ever seen women do this. So if you have examples of men doing this, I'd be happy to see or read about it, if only so my opinion isn't so narrow.
Regardless, as far as the story itself is concerned, I love it, it's well written, engaging, and I found myself giggling pretty often at just the sheer ridiculousness of the whole situation. More than anything though i appreciate the subtle thought you put into everything. There was a few comments early on about Dash's mane, and what i saw from you that I don't from other writer's is just the realistic take on just what having an actual rainbow for a head of hair would be like. I burst out laughing at the 'greying one colour at a time' comment.
Another subtlety I appreciated was probably less one you intended and more just a consequence of the direction you've chosen to take the story. But the way in which Twilight acted to Rainbow Dash. Being friends, Twilight is probably fully aware that Dash doesn't like her the same way she does Dash, regardless of how long she's felt the way she does, she's had time to deal with the obliviousness. Which was displayed by Twilight momentarily appearing hurt at the 'it's just an act comment' but Twilight didin't miss a beat in her elation at being asked to date Dash.
Overall, I just thoroughly enjoyed reading this piece, and I'm excitedly awaiting the conclusion. Please change nothing, as you've come across gold here.
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I would be the same, but can you imagine Rainbow react in this way, knowing her character?
I'm seriously waiting for a scene where Twilight tells Rainbow (or the other way around) how she feels, but not using a direct approach.
Like that Copper and Tellurium joke.
From the picture and the way the story was going, I was almost wondering if this fic was taking place before Magical Mystery Cure and then the events of that episode were going to happen in the middle.
But nope, Rainbow Dash can't picture Twilight as her girlfriend, even fake girlfriend, without being prompted. Poor Twi. (I know it's probably more like because it's hard to think of her as a princess even though she is one, but I think my explanation is funnier.)
The premise is something believable for Rainbow, and I like Twilight being relatively practical about Rainbow's obliviousness, but the characterization for Rainbow in this makes her seem like such an idiot. Like really rubs it in your face; it's 10k words of her being petty, immature, and overall dumb. The thing with the other princesses seems to have no purpose but to emphasize her idiocy, since it's insane she wouldn't immediately at least consider Twilight as the obvious princess to drag into this; it really would have benefited from starting with her dismissing Twilight at first for some reason.
Poor princess Luna. Wish we could have seen RD's attempts with the other princesses, but I'll just have to settle for the brief retelling. Can't wait to see how it goes down between her and Twi. This whole thing is going to be way more than Rainbow bargained for.
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Oh hells... someone remembers their periodic table.
Wooooooo!!! Love this!!!
I’m....hummm...
I enjoyed this. I did. This is unequivocal.
I’m not sure who’s the bigger bitch though, Tidal, or Rainbow, and that bothers me a little. I really liked the way that they agreed to keep ‘practicing’ and trading ‘fake’ dates.
And this, ladies and gentleman, is how you write a shipfic. Fantastic work!
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I dunno. That's a textbook corny line. Ask them what copper ions you form and see how they respond to ensure they have a G.E.D.
This was absolutely glorious! The perfect example of true (fake?) love! Who knew Twilight could flirt so well or Rainbow being romantic.
I am so pleased with this piece. Props to you.
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I'm gonna say you're G.E.D program actually had freakin questions from highschool on it. Georgia's is a joke.
Hmm, I liked this, but I can't help but feel a dip in quality from the first chapter the the second.
OH MY CELESTIA JUST BE TOGETHER ALREADY.
I warn you, if the story is as good as the descriptions makes it sound, then I probably demand a sequel.
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Because the more she tries to ignore it the more it'd stick in her head. Unless I feel utter contempt for someone's existence, like they're a bug to me and just as easily dismissed, then rising to a challenge like this is practically second nature. ... Granted, I've got a better head on my shoulders than Rainbow here by far. It just stews, and festers, and while the other person's off living their life feeling like they got one over on you it just becomes a consuming train of thought that fights back the harder you try to let go of it.
Depending on the severity of the situation, it can be quite literally maddening and even cause depression. It's not healthy to walk away, sometimes.
That was amazingly petty and I love it. Makes Dash and Twi feel like real people instead of caricatures from a child's book with lessons and morals.
Real people are petty sometimes. And also it's a GREAT story to tell about how they got together, someday.
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I guess it might just be me then. If somebody was boasting they had a better life than me, I just wouldn't care. Like, I don't have anything to prove to them. Even if it was an old asshole from grade school being like "wow, I'm so much better than you!" I'd probably laugh and say, 'okay, cool, you just keep on believing that.' And then not devote my time to them.
Like, there's literally millions of people in this world with an objectively better live than me, but they don't feel the need to rub it in my face. Probably because they're more secure than whoever this child bragging at me is.
It might help that I actually have depression and so I've told myself hundreds of worse things than any other person on this planet would think to say, making any insult I hear tame by comparison. Or maybe it's because I treat people from my school years like strangers and, as a person, I only ever take things that people I know well personally, since strangers are incapable of knowing who I really am as a person. Whatever the reason, I'd consider the instigation childish and probably either do nothing or make fun of their need to impress me. XD
Man, it's been so long since I've read pony fics, and I come back to this gem of twidashy goodness! This was a great, cute little story. I certainly wouldn't be opposed to a sequel
Ok, TwiDash is my new favorite Ship. I REALLY want a sequel although you fulfilled the title and story line. You just left me wanting more, which is probably the place to end it.
Moral of the story... Lying solves everything!
RAINBOW YOU BASTARD!!!!! YOU HURT LUNA, AND YOU CANT EVEN SEE THAT YOUR FRIEND WASNT ACTINC. BRUH,
Wait, what about the marriage!? I wanted that!! AAAAA! RAINBOW!!!!! STOP BEING MEEE
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Wait, really? Twidash just became your favorite ship? Because of this story?
...
That's kinda incredible.
Anyways, this story was very nice. I've never seen this approach to twidash before, (well, maybe once, but not quite like this) which is refreshing. Although that bit where Twilight mentions crushing hard on Rainbow for years is pretty corny and seems cliche. However that is my only gripe with the story. The fake proposal was very over the top, but I think I liked it, as unlikely as it seemed. Yeah, this was highly enjoyable. Can't believe how dense Rainbow insists on being, haha!
A princess who was a princess? You don't say.
Seems like a mistake.
Love this, absolutely love this. The characterization was on-point, everypony felt like real life people/ponies you'd want to talk to and seeing Tidal get her show stolen after being such a bitch throughout the entire deal was so satisfying.
It's amazing how with such a short story you inspired me to want another million chapters. The way you wrote them together was amazing. 10/10
I may not ship these two, in fact I ship Twilight with Starlight, but I still think this was great.
Why is it marked as complete? This makes Pinkie sad!
Loved the story, and you can never have too much TwiDash!
I like it for the whole TwiDash thing and good writing.
I don't like the conclusion of the party scene, it feels really off for me, i know Rainbow likes to boast and stuff but this was a bit much, she may don't like Tidal but it seems rather off character that she would try to ruin the party for her, especially with the announcement she made.
Personally i would have liked if Dash would have realized that she is actually pretty happy with Twilight and that she doesn't need Tidals approvement or anything, telling her that she is the selfish egomaniac that simply can't be happy for others, after the announcement she would have congratulated the two and told Tidal that she sincerely wishes her good fortune with the kids and everything but after everything Tidal said, she doesn't wish to be in contact anymore, leaving Tidal with the realization that no matter how hard she tries she is not the center of the universe. After that TwiDash moments of admitting or half admitting things to each other and stuff.
With the whole engagement thing to crash the party for Tidal it kinda felt like Dash just became as much as a flankhole than Tidal.
But that is kinda just my personal opinion, overall i like the story :D
That''s what you get for being shellfish, Tidal wave. You were so shore of yourself that you ended up getting swept away in the moment and now you sea that you've been bested. Oh whale, hope you learned your lesson at least.
I love me some TwiDash. Very nice story you got here.
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Except the part seems to pretty obviously be an attempt to say to everypony "Look at how much better I am than all of you underclass Trash who actually have to put hard word and effort and actual earn what you get while for me I get everything I want handed to me without question by the very gods themselves" without actually saying. She is basically Spoiled Rich but tries to be more subtle about it.