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The Monster of the Year contest is coming up, and Scootaloo has an entry sure to give Ponyvillians the scare of their lives: a murderous spirit from Zebra folklore.

Beyond known reality, something awakes, called by the speaking of its name. It draws closer, closer, to the little town at the forest's edge. When night falls, its reign of terror shall begin.

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Cover art by totallynotabrony. (Source.)
Edited by GaryOak and Reia Hope.
Creature design by Necros66.

Chapters (8)
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Comments ( 71 )

Oh my stars! I'm sorry, but if this isn't a comedy, I'm going to be so disappointed.

Hmm... let's see where this goes...

I'm in.

Sweetie Belle, you always did have the worst ideas. :rainbowlaugh:

This should be good

That's a more modern-language version of Beowulf than I've ever seen before.

Engage attentive stare.

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I can promise it's not badly written, but for the record, I won't be bothered if it gets under your skin in a bad way and you need to quit. :heart:

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It's the new Seamus Heaney translation--basically, Beowulf for lazy people.

Well now. I've been anticipating this. Definitely looking forward to seeing what you make of it.

Also, ponies selling hoof clippings to glue makers is pretty ingenious.

I am so pumped for this

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Alas, it was not my idea. It was a fan theory to explain how ponies were able to make certain types of glue--for furniture and such--in which hooves were still a necessary ingredient. I read it years ago, but heck if I can remember where (TVTropes, maybe).

Finished chapter 1. I love in-universe lore.

Also,

Golden Oak was still standin'

Ouch.

I can't begin to tell you how much I've been looking forward to this story!:twilightsmile:

Cue the actual Krastos complaining that they got his appearance wrong... Right before making glue out of them.

It lives! Woohoo!

If Krastos the Glue Maker was voiced, what would he sound like?

7671323 I wanna say Jim Carrey, but Gilbert and Busey are close too

Twilight tapped her chin. "The encyclopedia entry said Krastos was from Zebra folklore, so if it were real, it wouldn't appear in Equestria anyway."

Well, even the monsters have to look for new jobs. Also, I can easily imagine Twilight loving conspiracy theories...

And I'm guessing Zecora is now in a rather... sticky situation.

Ok, I am scared now. Good job.

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Three blind mice.

See... how they...
RUN.

Is it slightly bad that this reminds me of the Knights who say Ni? There's a very particular word they can't hear or say. And then everyone inadvertently keeps saying it. And in continuing to say "Krastos the Glue Maker," they're only making the problem worse.


In retrospect, maybe I should have used "Voldemort" as an analogy.

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I could explain, but that would be telling. :3

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Is it a tulpa, perhaps?
I could very much see that going horribly wrong with terrifying rapidity.

A spelling error has slipped through, I'm afraid. Either that or 'laylight' is a thing I'm unfamiliar with, but I'm pretty sure it was intended to be 'daylight'.

I'm really enjoying the story, though.

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Fixed. Thx for the heads-up.

as market day had been cancelled over some sort of mischief, there was no place to buy more

This is what I miss most about living in a college town: everything open 24/7
And Halloween too, I guess.

Looks like Cranky's in a sticky situation. Ha HA! Ha... hm...

...Let us have a moment of silence. :fluttercry:

Mass mind wipe?
Cause I think that could work.

Tulpae? In a story that does not take place in the envisioner's own head? So laaaaaaaaame.

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Dropped harder than the second nuke on nagasaki.

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I can't tell of you're trolling or just stupid.

Scratch that, you're immensely stupid either way, the only difference is whether intentionally or not.

Don't let the door hit you on your way out.

Well, they're royally screwed...

It's not over yet...:pinkiecrazy:

This one felt slow to start out — especially with the short chapters — but in between the Cranky scene giving us our first actual glimpses of the monster and the protagonists clutching for a survival plan, I can feel it shifting into high gear. Looking forward to the next chapter.

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I'm glad you bring this up, because the short chapters are something of an experiment, and if they don't work as well as longer ones, that's good to know. But now I'm reminded of three years ago, when you said something similar about the first two chapters of Biblical Monsters. I just wish I had a similarly shocking twist later on...

Well, we'll soon see whether I pulled it off this time.

Such a strange, unsettling ending...

I can't tell if it's meant to be hopeful, like maybe the bell was a sign from Fluttershy or Cheerilee, or if it's a sign that maybe the monster they put down isn't really gone.

Definitely an interesting Halloween-style story for the season, Horse Voice. Thanks for it!

Titanium Dragon is going to love this story because you murderized poor, dear Fluttershy.

It did a good job being a serious treatment of Krastos, for sure. Spooky and unsettling and vaguely depressing, which I mean...it should be. So kudos, HV. Kudos.

A good read, but I think it would have benefitted from being again as long. Horror that happens so fast that no real sense of dread or desperation can develop just isn't quite as strong.

Comment posted by ShimonSaid deleted Nov 6th, 2016

Glue? Fucking gl—oh. Oh I see how it is.

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You've got a "thefence" in there. :B

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Slight metric nitpick: The line would read better as "we must not linger long out here" or something similar.

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Okay, cleverly done. :) You called him "Turned" at one point, though.

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Well, shit, that was bleak. D:

Finally getting around to it. Don't disappoint me, HV!

There's a joke about horror tropes to be made here, thanks to the poison joke episode...

I'm liking the build up so far. Keep this up!

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