The second story in The Shareverse
Act One: It's been 10 years since the last two Dreamers died in a final battle, at least that what the official story says, during the fight, a young three year old filly named Winter Song was caught in the crossfire of the two elementalist, when she was found she had a sever case of amnesia and couldn't even talk another language than prench, luckily for her Fluttershy knew her before the accident and adopt her. Now the elements of kindness have to raise her own biological daughter alongside her adoptive one wich become as much as important as her real daughter in the ten years she took care of her.
But all is not sunshine and rainbow when the spirit of disharmony and the tyrant of the night return after almost 11 years of absence, they will start events that could change the face of Equestria forever for the better or the worse. And in the shadows the Soul Reapers are still preparing to take the throne of the elders gods.
So how a surprotective sister and a shy unicorn with a pyromaniac double personality will survive in all of this? This can only end well.
Act Two: Equestria mostly have recovered from Discord’s game and Winter Song having reach the age of conscent have made choices that could destroy her social life. So she does the only sensible thing to do... And run away from her troubles by coming back in her old town Ponyville.
But she will learn that sometime you can’t run away from everything. But will she be able to sort her social life while one of the biggest threat the council ever faced finally pass to the action and try to take over the world?
I'm sure some of you want to see how Winter Song really look like, here her picture it's not the best, she don't have her cutie mark on this, wich is a sea pony in the middle of three snowflakes and her mane and tail look a little more messy in real life, but it's the best I could come up with the pony generator.
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I have used almost all my supply of chapters I kept to update everyday like I did, so the next updates will be slower since I have to write them as I go on. So sorry for the inconvenience and have a good day I will do my best to not make all of you wait too long.
Did TheUnknownAlicorn proofread the title or description of your story? That's generally a turnoff for most readers.
Hello. xIMPERSONATORx; silver_fang's editor.
Wow. I'm so very lost; you've an enormous potential for backstory. It's a very imaginative universe, but this exposition went over so much in such a small amount of space.
The use of French is an interesting touch, but your editor should brush up on the site's FAQ.
2638967 Well he was suppose to help me proofread the chapters and help me improve my grammar but I didn't receive any response from him yet.
That Changeling fact is what i use on my story
i'm happy im not the only one who think like that
You really need to check over the synopsis and title, seconding what xIMPERSONATORx said, the lack of grammar in those is a real turnoff, which is a shame since it seems the people who have read the story like it.
As I always say, as long as someone can interpret what you're saying, the grammar isn't a big deal. Some people are just anal about that, and it should be ignored.
However, some of your mistakes CAN NOT be interpreted directly, and I recommend you get someone to proofread the whole thing. If you're going to fix a few errors, you might as well fix them all while you're at it.
2864490 I tried to have some proofreaders and a editor, but I never got any responses from any of the ones who accepted to help me, after a while I gave up at getting one.
2864557 Ah well, it's no biggie.
Could not
and im so sorry for the time it took for writte that
2950575 Fixed
And don't worry all writters have this horrible thing called life that keep them away from ponies time to time. Now I must really go sleep see you another time.
First!
On a second note it's good to be back on the main story, I don't know if the chapters will come as quick now that I have three stories to juggle with. But it will take more to keep this mare down
two chapter at the same night
I see... I give a free like and favorite and comment.
Good afternoon, sir or madam, I would simply like to point out that in the title it should be, lives not lives. Thank you.
I'm dying of laughter at the John de Lancie part.
Dude. DUDE. Just a kind advice: if you want more people to read the story, please don't have 5 grammatical errors just in the description. Just sayin'