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This story is a sequel to Discord Visits the Afterlife
Though Ponyville at large is still mourning Fluttershy, Discord remains entirely unperturbed by the loss of his first friend. The reason becomes clear when he offers to take Twilight and her friends to visit Fluttershy in the Elysium.
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So unless I'm wildly off the mark, Discord's method consisted of, well, killing the mane six and meeting them once they duly end up in Elysium?
... I suppose that does seem like the most direct way of getting people to the afterlife.
Whoa, loving the sequel already! Also sorry about the mortality gloom you have going on, but also glad to hear that you are working through it constructively from the looks of it.
Closest analogue to your feelings were me as a kid, i used to have nightmares of a sort where I'd imagine myself being dead and just not existing anymore. Real spooky stuff that kept me up at night...
Anywho, looking forward to the other half!
"more than others" perhaps? Also ouchies
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I'm pretty sure he didn't kill them given he said that he never said they had to DIE to get there and that they would only be visiting for a little bit. Logic chaos or otherwise would dictate that he has a non death way of transporting them in an explody sort of way, kinda like when Twilight became an Alicorn. No one in any official media stated she died and got reborn, only teleported to a different plane that apparently Celestia is able to visit whenever she wants.
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Fixed, thank you.
Ahh yes a black lotus reference
I see Discord has good taste in Wii games.
So far this sequel doesn't have as much humor as the first one-shot, although that's understandable if you just lost someone close to you. I wonder if you're going somewhere with the Time Turner subplot or if that was just a throwaway reference that went over my head. Anyway, I'll be tracking this to see if Applejack will see her parents again, and also to see if this story will mention Fluttershy's family.
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It’s not something that’s especially important to this story, though it might make a bit more sense if you’re familiar with the My Little Planeswalker series.
Huh. Samus as the daughter of Flash Magnus. That's a brilliant bit of insanity. And Dragonlord Ridley is an amazing if horrifying mental image.
Weird. Normally it's Elysium or the Elysian Fields. I don't think I've ever seen the article used with the first option.
I see neither magical sparks nor two-toned suns on that hull, so I'm going to have to call foul.
"And yet, I feel less inclined to say something. How bizarre."
Heh. Poor Dr. Turner. There are Ditzies out there who could tell you stories about being prepared for sudden name changes.
Hmm. Now I wonder if there's a lotus vale somewhere in the Everfree.
You're handling the topic very gracefully. Looking forward to more, whether or not the rest of the Mane Six has to make their way through the Underwhere first.
Damn Discord, I know you like to do things a little over the top, but you better clean the mess before they come back.
This story just got ninety three times better.
No, really. I loved the interactions with Epona, the comical pacing, the philosophical implications and Pinkie's rant (altough now I'm not sure about her sanity or if she really is that simple and her mental power is subconcius, or if she is conciously thinking about deep existencial phylosophics, and fakes a persona because she knows that she can't mantain her friends if she doesn't... I have oficially gone too deep.)
Also, the explanation about the difference between planes kind of makes sense.
You have become one of my favourite writers on this site.
Is it wrong that my first thought here was "Superintendent Chalmers!"?
In any case, definitely one of the nicer demiurges I've ever seen. Always noce to see a god with a sense of humor, especially one who can laugh at herself. Now to see if the group can track down Fluttershy.
I guess Epona won't let the ponies remember Elysium because living mortals aren't supposed to know what happens after death. Nonetheless, if all but one of the main characters forget what happens, it's like it never happened for them, which means they don't learn anything, which makes me wonder why I should get invested in what Dash and her pony friends get up to. We might as well just focus on Discord since he's the only one that matters in this tale. I'm sorry, but making your main characters forget what happens in their story is almost as bad as the "it was all just a dream" ending.
Edit: I should add that I think the biggest problem is not so much that the characters are going to forget, but that this revelation came so early in the narrative. I think that's what's really putting me off. The ending has been given away, so now I'm wondering why anyone is even bothering.
But maybe I'm too cynical and jaded.
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While I appreciate the attempt at criticism here, I don’t think I can agree.
First off, I don’t believe it would make sense in-universe for a benevolent deity to avoid mentioning the very important detail “hey, you’re not going to remember any of this,” especially not one when Honesty is a characteristic that deity had personally made to be integral to the harmony of the world. Epona would likely see it as cruelty to omit that information.
Secondly, the claim that “you know what will happen” is... not true. You don’t know how this is going to work. You can probably make some kind of guess, but unless you can read my mind you can’t really “memory loss” plot point will end up working in practice, or how it will actually play out in the end. You’re making a lot of assumptions about how the characters may or may not be impacted that I don’t really feel are justified.
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It's not so much a criticism as a personal turn-off. I just don't like the timing or the way that the future memory loss was revealed in this chapter. In order for me to keep going I need to know why the characters would bother to find Fluttershy other than simply killing time, but that hasn't been explained, yet. Why would they do something they know they're going to forget?
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How can you be sure that I wasn’t planning on addressing this exact point, though? Again, I feel like your response is jumping to conclusions about where this story is going.
*Sheds liquid pride*
I remember a head canon I liked. Now in this one Twilight wasn't an alicorn but her daughter was and she was worried that her daughter would have to live so long and lose everyone they loved. Celestia showed her a glimpse of the afterlife saying that while alicorns are all but immortal and won't join the dead for a very long time, they could still visit every now and then. Maybe Twilight can be like Discord and visit.
I hope this chapter helped you come to terms with whatever you've been grappling with. Excellent work with its emotional intensity.
My eyeballs have become cryballs
This is beautiful.
Thanks for this. This was a good chapter.
I hope we get to hear from AJ's parents at some point, talking about their visit.
Typo:
think
This idiom is about thinking like in "think again".
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Er... no?
I don’t know how to say this other than that it’s not true. It’s a common phrase, enough so there are entire songs named after it.
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And there are songs that use "could care less" (CoughCrysaliscough), irregardless, giving free "reiGn", etc.
Original idiom:
https://en.wiktionary.org/wiki/have_another_think_coming
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Literally the first link on that page:
https://en.m.wiktionary.org/wiki/have_another_thing_coming#English
I don't even mind nitpicking grammar, but there's no mistake here.
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"Alternative form" as in:
https://thoughtcatalog.com/nico-lang/2013/08/44-everyday-phrases-you-might-not-know-youve-been-saying-incorrectly/
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Anyway EOT.
Pffffft Discord you tease.
CLIFFHANGERRRRRR
Oh well at least there's another chapter
Okay, I am officially a massive fan of your portrayal of a classical Graeco-Roman afterlife. You perfectly balanced the different aspects of
FausticornEpona's personality. I honestly wouldn't mind if the real God was actually like that.I am literally tearing up right now. Whenever I get really into a good story, I start doing the voices for the characters out loud, and it physically hurt to do Rainbow's lines, but I did them anyway because I HAD to. I HAD to give this masterpiece the respect and the effort that it deserves. Even more so since I just lost my grandma.
I know this story isn't over yet, but I have to say it. Thank you, Zennistrad. For everything.
I just discovered this story thanks to the Feature Box (still have to check out the first story), and spent the last twenty minutes or so sitting in an admittably poorly-lit room reading this while an old music record played in another room.
And I have one thing to say. Wow.
WOW.
This story is amazing. The discussion in Fluttershy's cottage, Epona, Rainbow Dash, how you handled Twilight's longevity, and this whole chapter... I haven't been this amazed by a multi-chapter story in a while.
In the name of whatever higher power may exist, how does this not have more likes!? Have a Like, Favorite, and a "Tracking".
Wow.
Heh... For once, I actually have a plausible excuse for the water in my eyes: fumes from curing a cast-iron pot. Doesn't make my heart ache any less.
You forgot a "forget".
We all have to take that last ride... Just don't care for the schedule that's all
Know more dead friends then alive. We all will take that last ride -[ Even if you don't like it ]
Is that a Super Paper Mario reference I spy at the end there?
Clearly written from the heart, and I mean that in a very good way. Thank you for an incredibly intense chapter.
This is sad, but good sad. Cathartic sad.
They discarded two cards and drew three
He thinks she's dead too, doesn't he.
Oh. Well, close enough.
Thanks for sharing this with us. I hope it helped you.
And I hope these ponies get to take some peace with them, even if their memories fade.
Well, thanks for making me cry every chapter. It's been nice. I'm really, really hoping the last chapter, if you write more, will have Fluttershy coming back to life, or at least allowing the re-Mane-ing 5 to keep their memories.
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it is indeed
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>flutterdash
you had one fucking opportunity and you fucking bungled it
one job to do and your useless ass couldn't just do it
had to fuck it up
you pathetic waste of flesh
do the world a favor and stop living
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Do you feel better now that you’ve gotten that off your chest?
Cross my heart and hope to die more like.
Lol. The Fausticorn has arrived.
Gosh, I want heavenly air to clear my sinuses! That's some good air!
Dafuq? Is she braindead? This is how you get smote.
Wow, those are the absolute most sensible words ever spoken.
I can think of a few
I'm glad you've written this fic too... Our mortality holds us close, not letting us know what waits.
A Farewell Poem:
Winter returning
Peering into forever
One forgets treasure
Nicely bittersweet. Glad to hear this fic helped you process some stuff. Thank you for it.
Now all Shy has to worry about is the occasional Discord visit.
Sliepnir from Norse mythology?