A kingdom needs a protector to defend it.
A protector needs a weapon to defend the kingdom.
A fundamental truth from the times where Luna was the hero of Equestria instead of a nightmarish fairy tail.
So now that Luna has finally returned, she is in need of a new weapon to protect the kingdom once more.
But when swinging a sword becomes a major obstacle for the princess, is it the fault of the blade, or the one who wields it?
An entry in Imposing Sovereigns III, using the prompt Luna/Kindness.
Pre-read by the always amazing daOtterGuy who as if he wasn't amazing enough, also made the cover art!
Now with a reading by StraightToThePointStudio!: Reading
Chapters (1)
"where Luna was the Equestria’s hero"
I don't think there should be a "the" here. Unless I'm missing something.
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Fixed, thank you!
This Story is awesome writen and i love what it meant. I myself am a protector of my friends and family, but i prefer a shield than a sword for thus behind me. And your Story Shows why a sword is not always the answer. Nor is it a shield. Sometimes its the mind of yourself that need to be wielded.
Very good.
In these moments and words it reminds me why Luna is a better person then Celestia. Their is a realiness to the sadder and more hurt characters then the ones who just xunderstand.' I.e what ever that means.
My tops for this kind of story telling would be Sunset, Applejack and Rainbow...sometimes Luna. :)
Good stuff!
A fine moment of introversion, somewhat spoiled by an overused phonetic accent and iffy pronouns. (Thou/thee follows the same logic as I/me.) They don’t ruin the story, but they did consistently disrupt my immersion.
Still, I love Luna grudgingly recognizing the true foe and being disgusted by Celestia’s diplomatic failures along the way. Thank you for this, and best of luck in the judging.
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You always seem to have the perfect song for a story
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Yeah, sadly I lost my notes on how Luna talks, so I had to go mostly from very bad memory. I'm happy that it still got the story across and thank you!
Sometimes our worst enemies are not physical.
Yes, Luna, put the sword away. We don't want you stabbing someone >:)
...or do we? *wink wink*
I liked this a lot. A really nice introspective piece.
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*Changeling invasion happens*
Luna: "Excuse me, I'm gonna go get my sword."
This was a great story, and a good life lesson overall. You can have the best weapon in the world, but if you don't know your enemy, it will be useless
Nice job.
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*comes back later to see Cadance and Shining Armor making out and changelings gone*
"See, this is why I keep my sword on me."
Really enjoyed this. An excellent life lesson about how we like to project our inner demons to external ‘foes’. Loved it!!
She proceeded to flip it end over end in a daring display, before catching the blade in her magic and presenting the hilt to…
…herself.
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Is it Quillon or Quillion? You spelt it both ways, and it's kinda confusing. The latter sounds better to me, but whichever you go with, it would be cool if you fixed it. This was the only standout mistake to me. Otherwise nice work, neat little character vignette.
I can't form a cohesive sentence to say how dang beautiful this is! Same goes with how clever the idea is and everything! Brilliant stuff! Hope ya didn't mind, but I couldn't say no to making a reading of this gorgeous fic of yours!
Audio Linky!: https://youtu.be/mF7Sdre8cv4
(I don't mean to offend anyone with this comment in any way!)
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It's Quillon, thank you for noticing it, I've already fixed it.
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Thank you! Very happy that you enjoyed it!
Luna with a sword!
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Better than Baby with a Gun!
"Oh no. We just pointed them at gryphons and yaks and minotaurs and let them go full chimp. Honestly I do not like them, but wind em up and watch em go. At least until the rest of the world got their tails in a twist and went on with their buzz words about "war crimes" and "depopulated nations" and "shameful atrocities."
Seriously, donkey's do not give a fuck
Why was Luna wielding sunlight? I suppose she was just cutting the clouds away, but it still sounded weird.
Hmmm
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A review from the mansion to you.
ooh that sounds like a beautiful sword that is very fitting for Luna
aww, fun that this was literal and not metaphor for "a lot"!
that is a shame because Luna with a warhammer is super awesome
ooh, love this paragraph! just that moment of character of her knowing and understanding the yaks is great. and yeah, Equestria does seem way too isolated from the nations around it for this to have always been the case, and oof, the way that Luna manages to blame herself for this as well!
of course my current headcanon for this is that Celestia did indeed deliberately do nothing while the Griffons came to ruin, which really is not very cash money of her...
dang, this is very animé! super cool and fitting for a powerful Alicorn Princess
aww! that is a sweet moment of connection
aww, that is touching!
aww, a great way to end it! showing, and not telling Luna's acceptance of the new world she finds herself in, paying off her meditations on just how much both Equestria itself and her relationships with the nations around her have changed. and i loved how this takes seriously the sorry state of the nations around Equestria, and Celestia's aloofness about it, and how it all must seem to Luna. definitely want to incorporate some of that into my own Luna.
thanks for writing!