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DeiStar


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Twilight was expecting to have a nice, relaxing morning bath. What she did not expect, was for Rainbow Dash to interrupt her by crashing through the window. Twilight, instead of yelling at Rainbow, invites her to take a bath together.

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Not a shipfic.

Learn to read the tags.

:pinkiehappy:

EDIT: Congratulations on the feature.

Reading this and loving it :pinkiehappy:

I can now sleep in peace. Thank you, DeiStar.

That was 'sweet' I guess you could say. :twilightblush:

I was half expecting the letter to be full of accidental innuendos. I've been reading too many comedy fics...

While i'm partial to Twidash...This was extremely cute, and something i could see them doing.

This fic made me feel all warm and wuzzy. Thank you. :heart::twilightsmile:

EVER SINSE I WROTE 'When You Were Young" I'VE NOTICES STORIES LIKE THIS!

Very nice! Touching, a bit silly, and not too sappy. Doesn't take itself too seriously, but has some real value in it.

A nice little tidbit of WAFF. Write on! :twilightsmile:

How does she keep the bathwater hour for so long? I've never seen one hold heat for longer than a half hour.:pinkiegasp:
Dat tub:rainbowderp:

Oh, sweet story, too.

Not a shipfic huh?

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Well alright then... friendshipping is an acceptable alternative. Great story!

I liked it... But I have to say that I would have liked it a lot more if it weren't for the grammar errors or the way some of your sentences seemed to repeat themselves or drag on. I suggest joining that pre reader group.
That being said, I loved the idea. Very cute story, it's something I can see the actual show doing.

I read it mainly because it wasn't shipping. I was curious as to how it would go. Well done.

1225347

But that image... :rainbowhuh:

You should change it, can lead to someone missing this great story because they don't like shippings.

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Magic bath stuff.

I was a little too surprised to see this wasn't a Mature fic. It's just that the description was a little misleading.

1229094

Yes, I must admit that almost the whole thing was written very... awkwardly. Most of it wasn't necessarily wrong, but there were more optimal ways in which things could have been worded.

Great story:yay:, with lots of details.

Short and sweet. It's nice to see these sisterly interactions between the Main 6. =)

Very impressive one shot, and of course it's not a shipfic.:yay:

I've always been of the mind that friendship is the best ship. :yay: This was cute and sweet.

I don't know why but something tells me that you (the author) recently viewed the episode with RD getting Tank.
why? It is the only episode where she really open up and shows emotions :rainbowlaugh:

Fantastic story.
a green thumb and 5 spikes on the way: :moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache:

1225347
Friendshipping

Not the ship I wanted, but still a well done fic.

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You have been successfully trolled, my friend!

Loved this story though.

Saw the description, thought "Hmmm, I wonder what this is going to lead to..." :raritywink:

Then saw the tags and rating. :rainbowhuh: Mind=blown. Shall read later. :twilightsmile:

Nice. Liked it a lot.

1229511 With some of the word choices, I'm thinking English might not actually be the authors first language.

she is a sweet little mare in the inside

being just one example of this.

Never knew Trollestia wrote fiction! Cover image totally threw me off. That, and you can't see tags from the Featured Box. Saw the image, read the description, clicked the Featured Box, and never looked back... except to do a WTF when the wing massage never went beyond a wing massage. When on FimFiction does THAT ever happen?

While this isn't a shipfic (curses :trixieshiftleft:) it was well written and pretty cute. :twilightsmile: Take my thumbs. *cuts them off and hands them over*
...Shit, I cn'tbarly typ.

Warm. Check.
Fuzzy. Check.
A wee bit teary eyed. Check.
Thanks for the story. It made me feel very nice after a crappy day. :twilightsmile:

twilight and RD in a bathtub that does not fall under clop?

you sir are one reason why I like this fandom! have an internet!

and a stache! :moustache:

more staches :moustache::moustache:

More! :moustache::moustache::moustache:

MORE!! :moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache:

MMOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAARRRR!!!!!!!! :moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache:

Awwww. It is somewhat refreshing to see a scenario like this that doesn't devolve into a hormone-fueled orgy.

“Soarin’! It’s Soarin’, all right?” dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/sillyfilly_Rainbow_Dash.png
dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Soarin_dayum.png Woot! My favorite! (Even if nothing comes of it in this story...sequel maybe?:pinkiehappy:)

Very nice story though. Saw a number of typos scattered about but nothing major. Mostly things like "in" when it should be "on".

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Correct. My first languge is Spanish, hence why there might be some errors scattered around the fic.

I'll try to spot them and fix them.

Thanks. :twilightsmile:

:heart:Awwwwwww....:heart::twilightsmile:

1230320 if you'd like I could go through this story again, point them out and give you suggestions on what I think would go better there.

Just adorable. :twilightblush:

That was very heartwarming!
It was definitely a pleasant read. :twilightsmile:

Concept? 4/5

Execution? Left a lot to be desired.

Your dialogue for both Twilight and RD felt... Stilted? Forced? Wrong?

I don't know, but your diction really bugged me, I was struggling to read this. I mean, they were simultaneously perfectly in and out of character. Everything they DID was perfectly in character, but the WAY they did it left a funny taste in my mouth...

It's sort of like watching a TV show that's been translated from another language.

1230320 Hey. You should totally troll all the peoplew who love this by doing a clop version. Just my opinion. I think it would be hilarious, and that's what I'd do. I would write the cutest story ever written, and then I would mind-buck all the bronies by rewriting it as clop. But then again, not everypony is a troll.:trollestia: You have my thumbs-up, my favorite, and my:moustache:. Please write more!

She says she's always been a flyer
She lands on fifteen clouds a day
And though she says she's not a crier
Well, I knew what I could not say

(Sorry. That just slipped out. It won't happen again.)

This was really cute. Hope there are more somewhere.
Hope Rainbow wins the race now.:rainbowdetermined2:

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