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(*Facepalm* on my part for not being able to read your PM until 20 minutes ago)

Solid concept and execution here, good luck trying to get it on EQD!

The next day, Rarity shaved Sweetie's mane and tail off. That would be a sequel well worth reading.

:pinkiehappy: That was funny as hay. Especially the ending.

so much d'aaawww...

I told you it would be a good story! What did I tell you? :eeyup:

This was a pretty good story. I like how you handled Rarity and her freak out. Plus a mischievous Sweetie Belle is always fun.

Hey! Did you credit me?

XD Aw, Sweetie Belle...you rascal.

I knew it, though! I began to figure out why Sweetie Belle did that...and it was all just to spend time with her sister. Awwwww!!! This was adorable. :pinkiesmile: I love the sweet sisterly moments between Rarity and Sweetie Belle! :twilightsmile:

Hah! Aww, that was very cute. :pinkiehappy:

It was a nice, fun, and sweet story, I especially loved Sweetie's motivation.
good work.

Isn't Her tail and mane kinda made of the same thing. Why would you need separate shampoos?

Beucase she's Rarity, she can never spoil herself too much. :duck:

I'm not usually a huge fan of rarity but this fix made it with sweetie. Really cute and adorable:pinkiehappy:

I thought this was gonna be based on Conkers bad fur day... :derpytongue2:

Episode material right here :twilightsmile:

LOL I had RD and Pinkie dye Rarity's tail green in a story of my own :rainbowlaugh:
Aww, this story was very cute. We need more Sweetie Belle and Rarity family stories :twilightsheepish:

The Next Day:
:twilightoops::Sweetie Belle?! What happened to you??"
:unsuresweetie:: I... Um....
:duck:: Oh, yes, sweetie. Do tell us.
:unsuresweetie:: I.... I fell.... Down the stairs.... Into a bear trap.... And a cupboard fell on me...
:raritywink:: Yes.... That's what I THOUGHT.


Seriously, I love that combination, those are my school colors actually.

Darn it Rarity!

I read this story before it was published, as a proofreader for D*. :twilightsmile:

XD I knew she was going to do that! XD

That was very enjoyable! I'm going to be sharing this one!

Damn, you again. Heh I took your advice by the way.


Younger siblings.


Nicely done, a nice slice-of-life story :twilightsmile:

Good story. Original concept. Very well written.

There was only one small thing that struck me while reading. You repeated the same word in one sentence, namely:
'' swiftly throwing another balloon towards her sister, finally impacting her sister. ''

Probably remove the second 'sister', for better flow and to make it feel less repetitive. Other than that, very nicely done.

Story summary:
:raritydespair: :raritycry: :raritydespair: :raritystarry: :unsuresweetie: :raritycry: :raritystarry: :raritydespair:

Great story:raritystarry:

I love this story! And congrats on making the Feature Box!
Five out of Five mustaches for you!

576014 I couldn't agree with you more, seriously with all the good ideas we fanfic writers come up with you think Hasbro would praticaly begging us to let them use our ideas, oh well the offical seasons are good enough anyways. :facehoof:

This story made me very happy as the older sibling.

You sir deserve all the glory that is coming your way.

Aww.:heart::twilightsmile: I loved this in its entirety.

Chapter 2: "That night, Sweetie Belle vanished and they never found the body"

Nah, it was pretty adorable. One thing:

"live by my own"
should either be "Live ON my own" or "Live by MYSELF." Only typo I noticed

It's a miracle Rarity didn't beat her up.

Your avatar makes that all the more hilarious

Oh man, this really feels like an actual episode of MLP.
...It really does.

...It really, really does. Are you sure you're not a writer for FiM?

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