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When one of the Cutie Mark Crusaders gets her cutie mark, jealousy threatens to tear their friendship apart. How will the crusaders get past this new obstacle?

Credit goes to Thorbhaal on Deviantart for the cover pic.

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this is one of my favorite CMC stories

Comment posted by Fattymagee1 deleted Apr 30th, 2016

Iremember reading this a while back, i'm glad to see it here after so long.
You have just earned a follow and a favorite, keep up the great writing.


I also caught this on EQD back then; loved it then and still adore it now! Thank you so much for reposting this cute fic. Hope to see more of your work! :yay:


No, seriously, this was adorable, as well as skillfully written. I like the idea of AB's fill-in-the-blank cuite mark, but I think Twi figured it out a bit too quickly. Still, good story.

4/5 :moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache: And liked, of course.

Great Job!
5 Fluttershies! :yay::yay::yay::yay::yay:

> "You see," Twilight continued, "Apple Bloom's special talent is friendship.
*spit take*

in any other case, 5 out of 5 Fluttershys for good short story! :yay::yay::yay::yay::yay:

I remember this one

But then Cutie Pox happened and we learn Scoots and Sweetie would be alright if AB got her cutie mark first.

Ha ha yeah I know, It's kinda ironic isn't it. :twilightsheepish:

It was nice but the ending fucking killed it for me

I liked it. :rainbowkiss: I'm not sure that's really her cutie mark talent, but it was well-written, interesting, and a pretty unique idea.

the cmc's have takeen the featured bar!!!

Here I had been just recently thinking of the time when I had read this story via EqD, and guess what I find in the Featured bar? :pinkiehappy:

637589 ha ha i'm flattered you would be thinking of it after so long :pinkiehappy:, i'm surprised at the response its gotten on this site so fast. It's pretty awesome.

I remember reading this on DA like, 22 years ago! static.fimfiction.net/images/icons/thumb_up.png

Apple Blooms special talent is friendship...seems legit. :pinkiesmile:

fucking loved it.

OmyCelestia, I loved it.


I remember reading this when I was just starting out as a brony. I didn't know about EQD or FIM I think I found this one fanfiction.com or something like that. BTW, Great story I loved it.

Dude, this is awesome. Friendship as a talent - who'd have guessed? Maybe Apple Bloom'll be wielding the element of Magic next time Discord breaks out.

I'm not sure if I agree with the way you presented her cutie mark, but I really liked the story overall.

I think it was pretty good. I thought your descriptions of emotion were a little dull, but then again I'm comparing everything to "My Little Dashie" :3

638642 lol there's nothing that can really compare to the emotions of My Little Dashie. :twilightsheepish:

that was... amazing. and really sweet.
+5 scootaloos!

I like it. I like it a lot!
If there was a Pinkie Pie gasp Apple Bloom emoticon, you'd'a earned it!

This was a wonderful adorable and beautiful story. One of those that was completely obliterated both physics and character wise by canon, but still maintains greatness on it's own merits. Glad to see it finally here.

Hey, why does Applebloom get a better cutie mark than mine?
I don't know, Scooty.
Hey! Don't call me that.

i would like to see a pic with their Marks. Its a lil bit hard to imagine Apple Bloom with all that hearts.

It's a potato with a missile on it! Aw, come on! Dumb fendshep instead of awesome missile potatoes...

I FUCKING LOVED IT!! TERRIFIC WORK! TERRIFIC JOB! I declare it 'yay' approved :yay:"yay!"

So Cute. I found it strange how Fluttershy was so forceful, considering her timid nature. Sure she can be serious, but I just could not see her being so forceful with out her normal quaking. That bothered me. :trixieshiftleft:

Other than that, I think you did a good job and now we finally know about the crusader's cutie marks.

Random Spikey! -> :moustache:

638682 I have never read My Little Dashie. Excellent work on the story.

639990 Thanks dude, I'm glad you really enjoyed it :twilightsmile:. I would also highly recommend reading My Little Dashie, it's one of the best stories in MLP fanfiction.

Still a great story.

Why was Scootaloo such an arse?

I have to admit that the ending is just really and I mean really weird. Applebloom's talent is Friendship? She has cutie marks all over her body? She has colors of all kind around her entire body? What the hay kind of a cutie mark is THAT? It just really feels kind of weak to me that that's her special talent. I mean if she thought being called a blank flank was bad, then wait until she's called Polka Dots or something like that. This is just a really weird ending and just honestly didn't do it for me. I'm sorry, but up until the ending, the story was going fine. It's not God awful, but the ending could've been better IMO.

Oh man could that has a deviantart please make a drawing of Applebloom's cutiemarks and send a message to me there with a link. My name on DA is mikkillerib if it is possible.

640602 um I can try it might take a while

Here's one with Applebloom's mark, although I don't know if the other CMC have one.
And I loved this story the first time I read it. Nice work.

640624 take your time no pressure at all from my side

640638 k thanks, its been a really really long time since I've drawn something so yeah, for now punisher143's picture is a fairly accurate depiction.

*sniff* :fluttercry:
I wasn't crying! :twilightblush: What are you talking about?
Ok fine, I shed a tear or two...
That was a really good story though in all honesty.
That was great :rainbowkiss:

640413 Sorry you didn't like it dude, this was meant to be kind of a heartwarming fic, so I wanted a happy ending, and I thought that was the best way to end it :twilightsheepish:

640703 Oh I'm not against happy endings at all. I love them. This ending though I think could've worked out a little better like Applebloom building something and ending up with her cutie mark of being a builder. This ending though, I just wasn't comfortable with.

Um, I think you over exagerated Scootaloo a bit. I mean she can be a bit of an arse at times but not that much. And the ending seemed to be missing something.:unsuresweetie:

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