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DeiStar


DeiStar

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It seemed like it was going to be a perfect morning for Twilight, until she realized she had woken up with Rarity and Rainbow Dash, tenderly cuddling next to her on the bed. Just what the hay happened last night? And why do they keep calling Twilight 'mistress'?

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Comment posted by DeiStar deleted Feb 28th, 2013

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Bro that is soo close to he title of my story i laughed!

i liked it:twilightsmile: thought it was funny:twilightsmile::twilightsmile::twilightsmile::twilightsmile::twilightsmile::twilightsmile::twilightsmile::twilightsmile::twilightsmile::twilightsmile::twilightsmile::twilightsmile::twilightsmile::twilightsmile::twilightsmile::twilightsmile::twilightsmile::twilightsmile::twilightsmile:

Trollestia strikes again! :trollestia::twilightoops:

This was definitely interesting.
Trollestia strikes again:trollestia:

is it sad that i was disappointed it wasn't a real mistress thing? Cause up till Celestia came in it was looking pretty fun.

Dat ending.
“I’ve been told you’ve got a thing for hooves, Rainbow.”
:rainbowlaugh:

I died when I found out it was a prank!:rainbowlaugh: I thought it was legit for a sec.

“Well…” Celestia wiggled one of her front hooves, removing it from her golden shoe. She felt a sensation of freedom, since her golden shoes were always too tight. Maybe it was time to get some new ones. “I’ve been told you’ve got a thing for hooves, Rainbow.”
:twilightoops: ...Shit.

The level of trolling can not be quantified with real numbers.
:trollestia:
Quite entertaining.

And this is why I keep an mp3 of "Black Chick's Tongue" on standby whenever this kind of story shows up. It just adds to the humour so nicely.:rainbowlaugh:

Though...you know, I think maybe Celestia was less Trollestia, and more the other -estia.

TLC

Just by reading the description, I was like "Twi, does it really matter?":ajsmug:
Read later.

Um... wow. Did not expect this, Dei. Mind = blown.

Though, I have to wonder... what was it Twilight joked about on the friendship report that worked Celestia up like this?

Darn it, that's going to keep me up all night.

LOLZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZ :pinkiehappy:

When Dash asked what to do next, my first thought was, "Do the same thing to Spike" :trollestia:

:duck: +:rainbowwild: +:trollestia: = WIN +:twilightoops:

Was pretty enjoyable, though my suspension of disbelief got broken at the mention of it being a prank. The whole lust bit seems to imply they went quite a bit beyond foreplay. The prank bit then kicked me back to show mode. And those two things conflict, make Dash and Rarity seem OOC.

:applejackconfused: I uh.......
I'm gonna go take a cold shower now.

When you're thousands of years old, I guess you have time to get creative with your pranks.:trollestia:
And yet Rainbow was oddly... agreeable :rainbowhuh:

lol Trollestia :trollestia: Strikes again lol

hhahah classic wow they are wicked with jokes :pinkiehappy::rainbowlaugh::raritywink::scootangel::yay:

This was a very funny Trollestia story, nicely done. Quite a few awkward sentences and errors around, but I was still laughing throughout the story. That was one crazy prank to pull on Twilight. I hope she gets over having her first kiss and first... err "experience" stolen for it. It might almost be worth writing a sort of epilogue a month after where she tries to get revenge for it.

Just some edits I saw while going through:

As much as she wanted to shout those questions, she found herself to even whisper them to Rarity. "she found herself unable to even whisper them"

All she could do was to observe at the situation. "All she could do was observe the situation"

Her face showed actual doubt, thing that Twilight noticed. Not sure what you were going for with "thing that Twilight noticed." Unless you wanted something like "Her face showed actual doubt, that Twilight could notice."

She suddenly realized of the second source of warmness that was hugging her back. "She suddenly realized what the second source of warmness, that was hugging her back, was."

She managed to make Twilight to look back at her, this time with a dumbfounded look on her pretty face. "She managed to make Twilight look back at her"

Meanwhile, Rainbow Dash grinned and kissed Twilight’s flank, sliding her tongue through her leg, finally arriving to her back hooves. Twilight felt Rainbow’s tongue, making her shiver with pleasure as she slid it through her leg. You kept saying "through her leg" when it would be something like "along her leg" or "down her leg"

Lust that the she desired. "Lust that she desired."

She turned her head and asked her servants, which shrugged in confusion. "servants, who shrugged"

She wasn’t ready for what she was going to saw there. "to see there"

She was in front of the stove, baking what it seemed like pancakes. "baking what seemed like pancakes."

And now I will never be able to use :rainbowwild: in a non-fetish context.
Curse you, Daring... I mean, DeiStar! Curse you!

And now this needs a sequel.

:twilightangry2: Of course, you know, this means war!

And you know, I thought the cut-away contained actual HLS. I'm curious how far it actually went. In any case, screwing with Twilight's hormones like that maaaaay have been a bad idea. Bait and Switch and all that.

Now that's funny!

Damn, that was pretty damn awsome! I just went "DAMN! What the hell happened last night!?" the moment Celestia apeared.

Also, best ending evah! :trollestia:

This was written a bit choppily, but it's such an original concept I don't really care. However, I was beyond surprised when I noticed that this writing had a bit of a flair to it - my flair. You write a lot like I do before I edit. It freaked me out for a moment - 'did I get featured again?' or 'did one of my others set up another account without me realizing it?' but -- well, actually, I'm still unsure. Are you me?
EDIT:
*continues reading*
TwiLestia. Goddammit. Get away from me, you're not me.

that was bloody brilliant!!:trollestia::trollestia::trollestia::trollestia::trollestia::rainbowlaugh::raritywink::twilightoops::facehoof:

I loved the story really I do, just this sentence

*“What do you mean, Mistress?” Rarity asked. Her face showed actual doubt, thing that Twilight noticed.*

actual doubt, thing---seems weird.

Sides that I thought the whole thing was very funny.

Trollestia=Molestia?

I figured it to be a prank, up until Rainbow started kissing her way down Twi's leg. Then I thought prank again when Celestia was downstairs.

Best prank or best prank?

Now that is some funny stuff.
Though it's KINDA creepy that :rainbowwild: and :raritywink: went along with that prank...
:trollestia: is always good, though.
:rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh:
Sequel! Sequel!
That is all.
Journcy Out.

Twilight is best mistress

In the back of my mind I was wondering if it was a prank :rainbowlaugh:.

/Priceless/! :rainbowkiss:

I think that was kinda cruel, in more ways than one.

1026433 Can't honestly say I blame you.

that was awesome. should've known the princess was up to something <.<

T'was lulzy. Me like.

That would be priceless,
great job!

I was thinking it would all be a dream in the end, but this was better. Good stuff. XD

“Well…” Celestia wiggled one of her front hooves, removing it from her golden shoe. She felt a sensation of freedom, since her golden shoes were always too tight. Maybe it was time to get some new ones. “I’ve been told you’ve got a thing for hooves, Rainbow.”

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This is what went through my head when she doesn't remember last night
MEANWHILE

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The bulk of this story stumbles over reiterating what the description already established. I didn't find Twi's predicament funny for the most part because all it amounted to was parroting the narration, literally in some cases.Like:

“Oh, I’m glad you did,” Rarity replied, still with her warm smile on her face. She looked at Twilight and leaned her head to give her a quick smooch on the nose.

The smooch caused chills to run through Twilight’s body, almost like an electric shock. S-seriously, w-what was going on? W-why is she on my bed? Why is she c-calling me mistress? And why did she give me a smooch on the nose?

You repeat things over and over again, as if your audience can't comprehend why waking up in this situation would be weird. Then, instead of pursuing the weirdness by introducing scenarios not already covered in the description, they just instead have sex. When something original and unexpected does happen, the fic ends with a pithy explanation.

In the end, the punchline stretched my disbelief too far, being both clunky and somewhat cruel. Neither Rainbow or Rarity are into girls, but they were perfectly fine with (presumably) having sex with Twi for the sake of a prank? On Celestia's orders? And this was all some sort of roundabout punishment for a previously unmentioned misdemeanour? What?

many lols were had:rainbowlaugh::trollestia:

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Which is why we shall use imaginary numbers instead.

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Trollestia is evolving! She evolved into... Molestia.

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