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Even the toughest of us have emotions. When a certain cyan daredevil is feeling under the weather, Twilight ventures to help Rainbow out of her rut, and possibly gain more than she had hoped for.

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That was stupid cute and I loved it.

stared and thumbed up. Enough said :heart:

Short, cute, shipping involved. I smell featured.

I.....wow......one of the best ships on the Rainbow/Sparkle angle ever read............thanks for the uplift....I needed this one today......bloody good show!

And you are excused from the minor mistakes mentioned in the A/Ns
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I'm jelly. You can have a complete story under 20k words. That will not be possible for mine.

That was just too cute for me to handle. I-I-

So beautiful, love it. This just touch my heart, great work. :heart: :twilightsmile:

I enjoyed this. It was that pick-me-up cute that everyone needs from time to time.

One thing that peeved me off about the story was your use of links to video's and music and whatnot. I mean, I'm here to read your story, why would you want to direct my attention elsewhere? Stuff like that should only be added into the A/N at the end of the fic in my opinion, because it encourages re-readability, being able to enjoy a scene that much more because you know what inspired it, not have it be a distraction while reading it.

Cute... painfully so.

This needs featured. That was just pure cuteness wrapped up in a few thousand words.

Any hope for a sequel? :twilightsheepish:

That was a fun read, (helps that its my favorite ship) brought some moisture to the eyes near the end. Excellent story really well done. Only question, what does yonks mean?

That was ridiculously cute and I loved every moment of it! :twilightsmile:

Cute and sweet. A little over the top with the Wonderbolts favor Twilight was able to arrange, but not enough to make me stop reading. Thumbs up for you.

Couple of minor errors, as you mentioned:

Daring Do and the Quest for the Goron’s Ruby - should this be Gorgon's Ruby?

Well Twilight said you’d help us with out flying techniques today - should probably be "our"

Also, I've never heard the word "yonks" before. At all. Ever.

>>I’ve been trying to get into the Wonderbolts for yonks now
>>Rainbow’s been wanting to perform with you guys for yonks, now

Actually had to Google this one! Some sort of local British slang for years / a long time / ages? Learn something new everyday, I guess.

Very sweet. After dozens of doomed romances dancing across my screen, I was happy to see one that worked out nicely -- at least for the moment. :rainbowkiss:

Oooo, Chester See. Awesome choice:pinkiehappy:
Gushy Cutesy:twilightblush:

It's short and the reveal feels just a little bit forced.

All in all though an enjoyable piece of writing. :twilightsmile:

D'aaawwww, this story let a flower of happiness bloom in my heart. Thank for that. :rainbowkiss: :heart: :twilightblush:

1354190 Hmm, yeah good point. But the story was inspired from those two links, so I don't know how it would have worked without. Thanks for enjoying it though :twilightsmile:

1354439 Gorons from Legend a of Zelda: Ocarina of Time. Just a little reference I though I'd throw in. And yes, well spotted. I'll edit that now :facehoof:

1355160 Hmm, forced how? Elaborate a bit?

And thanks to everypony who enjoyed my story. Honestly wasn't expecting so much positive feedback :rainbowkiss::pinkiehappy:

1354439 It's commonly used in England, just as I recall the author saying about 'sweets' instead of candy.

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Yep, that's what Google said, a few links down. Like I mentioned, learn something new every day!

Good show old chap!

1356197 1356236 Tbh I have no idea where I picked that up from, lives in New Zealand and Australia all my life :rainbowhuh:

Holy shit. If this were any cuter, it would've given me a heart attack.

1356451 Be thankful I did not involve Fluttershy. :pinkiehappy:

i love Twidash so much, and I'd say this is one of the best Twidash fics I've read. It wasn't that thourough, but it didn't need to be. You got everything across in that short of a time, and It was amazing.
So yeah, I'd say second best Twidash fic ever (behind Building Bridges). This will give some of the stories in my favorites on my user page a run for thier money.

:heart: Loved it! Few errors such as at one point you said "it will happened eventually" when Rainbow was talking about her concerns.

That was so cute that it turned my blood to syrup. Just a really enjoyable and fun read. Take my thumbs up and virtual pat on the back author; you have warmed my icy heart :raritywink:

Goron’s Ruby... :ajsmug:
Zelda reference? :twilightsmile:
The hell is a "yonk"? And how long is it. :rainbowhuh:

Also, this story was so cute it gave you a thumbs, and a a favorite. :yay::yay::yay::yay::yay::yay::yay::yay::yay:

D'awww. :pinkiehappy:
Well, I'm off to bed before I wander into another sad story again. :fluttercry:

That was an exceptionally heart warming story. It has earned my like, my favorite, and the feature it has. I would love to see a sequel, but it also has the perfect ending. You have made my night, and perhaps my day as well. I shall be watching you.
tl;dr Bravo, good sir, BRAVO!:moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache:

This was brilliant...I can't even explain how much this touched me. I love Twidash and whenever I read a story with them, it melts my heart. I wish I was able to write romance like this. The ending was beautiful, it made me cry. I don't usually cry when it comes to ship-fics, unless it's The Party Hasn't Ended but; this was just so touching...I couldn't help but cry.

Great story, and all I can give you is a thumbs up, a fav, and a watch. I hope that's enough. :twilightsmile:

My heart has stopped working.

Excuse me.

*collapses*

Very good!
:twilightblush::rainbowkiss:

TwiDash is best ship, by far the cutest :rainbowdetermined2::heart::twilightsmile:

SMP

Beautiful just beautiful.:fluttercry::heart:

Nice, short and sweet. Definitely a good TwiDash story :twilightsmile:

abort abort cuteness overload!!! :pinkiegasp::pinkiegasp::pinkiegasp::pinkiegasp: BANG... and crash :pinkiecrazy:

D48

That was very sweet. Good job.

I cried. This world needs more love. :heart::twilightsheepish::rainbowderp:

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Why do I feel like you're one of the few authors of your status who actually takes the time to not only read other people's stories but actually leave a comment. Its really cool that you do.

HURK! SO...CUTE…HEART…EXPLODING…TWICE!!! :heart::heart:

And a moustache to you, sir, for the best TwiDash ship I've read yet. :moustache:

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well done, a nice, short but touching story and so adorable, felt a little rushed in places including the wrapping up of it, but that in not uncommon with (im assuming) a one shot story like this

also, i am australian (nsw) aswell, and the term yonks does float around not too common but it is still used along with the rest of our slang XD
keep up the great work and hope to see more (maybe even a sequal to this fic maybe?)

cheers
thorlain

D'awwwww.

Fantastic TwiDash. I'm just sad it couldn't be longer though.

Holy cows. Too cute. This was really just a great read, it made my night. It was totally worth reading. I would love it if there were a sequel, but it would be fine if it ended here; that was the perfect ending. Seemed a little rushed, but if it had gone slower i don't think it would have the same effect.thumbs up, fave from me! You have earned my mustaches. :moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache:

Beautiful, that is it, take a internet, the only fan fic that tops this for me is Of Harmony & Chaos . Fantastic read thanks for the good feeling I get from this now. :rainbowkiss::twilightsheepish:

Nice, short and sweet. I admit to laughing out loud when I clicked on the double rainbow link, but I never like to see other media incorporated into a story like that - as I believe someone else said, it distracts you from the story. I didn't actually click on the second link until after I'd finished reading because, frankly, I was expecting Rick Astley's "Never gonna give you up" and I just wouldn't have been able to take the climax seriously if that was the case :rainbowlaugh:

Other than that though, this was a good read! Keep them coming :pinkiehappy:

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