I'd heard about the TV show My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic from my college roommate who is way too into the show. Disturbingly so, actually, but good gravy I would never watch the darned thing! What am I, five? I've got better things to do with my time than watch a silly little girl's show. However, that didn't stop... something from transporting me into the world of the show, so here I am... in Equestria... trying to get home. This is gonna be interesting.
Special thanks to GuyFace, Jack Kellar, Storm Shaker, Spiffy McSquee, and Goober Trooper for helping me with this one!
lmaooo the ending.... oh man he's going to the moon
..... also clean up the spelling and grammar a bit but I love the concept and will keep following
1341884 Clean up the spelling and grammar. Where do you see mistakes? (I don't doubt there are mistakes, I'm just curious as to where you saw them)
1341894 At the beginning of the story:
Needs a punctuation mark at the end. I saw more, but I'm too tired right now.
Oh shit. I WANT MOAR
That was priceless!
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More. MORE. MOOOOOOOOOOAR!!!!
Dat bitch be going to the moon in a couple o' days.
Random crap aside, I'm liking this so far, although I am REALLY looking forward to what happens next chapter, especially after the ending.
:| TD. TD. I have a question. Do you like .... Bananas?
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yeah... he's fucked.
Okay, I like it so far.
Thumbs up and favourited. I'm looking forward to what comes next.
human be trippin' balls
Let that be a lesson to you Celestia that only Pinkie Pie can break the 4th Wall.
I like it a lot. I laughed a few times even thought I am at work. Keep it up
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He's screwed. If Celestia doesn't do something to him for that, then by golly the Mane 6 will tear him to shreds! What happens next, I've gotta see soooo....yeah. I'm listing this story as a favorite.
He mentioned out loud that they were cartoon ponies. I'm sure somepony will notice and ask where he saw a cartoon about them, especially if he just came to their world.
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I'm liking it so far! Upvoted and favorited. I can't wait for more!
Dat Gears of War 3, I'm a player myself, a REALLY good player.
1342133 Dafuq are you doing here? Back to writing!! JK JK
If Celestia doesn't fry this guy, and somehow prevents the Mane 6 from beating the tar out of him, then he should consider himself the single luckiest creature in existence.
This is a really interesting story so far. Great job!
I already hate the main character though, is that bad?
Any story where Celestia gets punched in the face is alright in my book.
He did exactly what I would have done in his situation
She just ripped permanently him from his reality, friends and family just because she messed around with magic?
Hell I would have grabbed her by the horn an kneed her in the face.
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But... But I have finished it...
Ha!!
Take it bitch!!!
Bill: hes dead
That last line was gold.
I wish I had some semblance of artistic ability or else I would draw that scene.
There ya go x3
TO THE MOOOOOOONAH BEYEEEEEETCH!!!!
"At any rate, I took this news like I thought I would, with all of the 'quiet dignity and grace' that I could muster. I walked up to Celestia and punched her in the face."
Holy shit dude. Not only is your insert the absolute stupidest I have ever seen, but you better have a good explanation for how he gets out of this to make a convincing story.
Lol I like this guy, he's not afraid to have a pair around the Princess. I imagine I'd have problems bowing, proper titles and all that as well. Pffft, silly authority.
One of these days Celestia: POW!
Straight to d'sun.
1344110 Not at all. You don't have to like a protagonist to enjoy the story, so long as your dislike of the character is...positive (does that make sense?) You dislike him so you want to see what he does in these situations because it's interesting.
1344166 Noooooooo you must be looooyal to teh prinssseeeessssssss
Lol, I'm just kidding. This wasn't that bad, actually, and I wouldn't mind reading another chapter of it.
I'm hoping for some originality from this, not just what you've done with the concept. I've seen this sort of story before, but they always end up loving the ponies and becoming bronies or self inserts. I'd love to see the main character turn to absolute revulsion of the ponies, or just simply trying to ignore them long enough to get home and then never thinking of them again.
But then, I always like seeing new things instead of the same story told a thousand different times.
I'll at least be watching this for the next while.
1344429 Fear not, I am going to do my darndest to make sure that this one is original
This young boy has a problem. You don't punch someone in the face if they make a mistake on this world; you shouldn't do it in a land of cartoon ponies. To show such and egregious lack of self-control is sad. I don't believe I would like this person in real-life.
Sorry about that, the story is wonderful, I can't wait to see how this turns out. Maybe TD will learn some manners while he's in Equestria, he obviously needs it.
Well...I have to say this is a rather nice contrast to the multitude of HiE's out there.
I was originally just going to call this another version of ""I Hate Ponies!" by Scripture, but I'm pleasantly surprised. By its title alone, I suspected this to be a poorly written Trollfic.
I would say more...but I need coffee at the moment.
1344483 I'm glad that I impressed you on some level then! Yeah, I don't do trollfics. I like the show too much for that.
1344101 I don't think he's that lucky...
Oh... this ain't gonna be pretty... *tracked*
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That's exactly it. I'm very curious to see what happens next!
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God dayum the amount of errors is horrible ill re-read it and send you it through a pm
FALCON PAUNCH!!!

Awesome.
Keep it up, this is really good.
Hopefully, before she banishes him he can go on a rage and scold her.
Lol, she was irresponsible and now she's gonna get it.
That last line made it for me. I'm now hooked to see just what happens to this perfectly well-adjusted young man who cold-clocked a demigoddess in the snout.
Well, everything went to hell faster than possible!
i love the story its awesome so far
Heh, the first HiE fic I have read and it's rather fabulous
Reading this was a little challenging though as you kept changing tenses. Here's an example:
Present tense
Past tense
"I hop out of bed and walked over to my closet where I pick a work shirt off of the rack and put it, as well as a pair of black jeans, on. As I finish this, I looked up at my dear roommate who is currently surfing the web on his own laptop. I rolled my eyes when I see where he is: Ponychan."
As you can see, you keep changing the tense even withing the same sentence.
This would be the same if it was all in present tense:
"I hop out of bed and walk over to my closet where I pick a work shirt off of the rack and put it, as well as a pair of black jeans, on. As I finish this, I look up at my dear roommate who is currently surfing the web on his own laptop. I roll my eyes when I see where he is: Ponychan."
And this would be it in the past tense:
"I hopped out of bed and walked over to my closet where I picked a work shirt off of the rack and put it, as well as a pair of black jeans, on. As I finished this, I looked up at my dear roommate who was currently surfing the web on his own laptop. I rolled my eyes when I saw where he was: Ponychan."
You did that kind of thing all the time. I suggest you get yourself a beta-reader to help you with that, or try to keep a close eye on it yourself. It'd improve the fic a lot