“There are three things all wise men fear: the sea in storm, a night with no moon, and the anger of a gentle man.” - Patrick Rothfuss
After considerable effort, Princess Cadance is pregnant.
Beset by fears and doubts, she comes to Flurry Heart's cribside to vent her heart.
Flurry Heart is deeply upset at this betrayal.
Written for the Cadance Is A Terrible Mom contest, where it took an Honorable Mention!
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Nah, this is definitely still a comedy, and hilarious, and absolutely not what I was expecting. I was expecting, like, Stewie Griffin, not Chrysalis. But I love it.
Not sure if it works for the contest, though, as Cadance doesn’t come across as a bad mom so much as not a mom at all. Although I guess she will be a bad mom soon. Or maybe not. Depends on what kind of sibling Chrysalis can be.
Oh God now I’m just imagining Cadance on first seeing “Flurry” and having to present her to everyone else.
Cadance: “A pony foal’s wings are not that big.”
“Flurry”: “Well mine are! I will have great and powerful wings.”
Cadance: “...wait, say that again?”
“Flurry”: “Great and powerful wings.”
Cadance: “Are you Trixie?!”
“Flurry”: “Sometimes! When I want to be!”
While it indeed, has darker implications, the fact that the story doesn't take itself too seriously keeps it at comedy.
PS: This idea was genius!
Yeah, I don't know what to make of this.
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Hahahaha oh that conversation at the end was perfect
"Urk!" declared Flurry Heart.
"Um, dear?" asked Shining Armor at her bedside while the doctor busied himself at Her Highness' other end. "I'm not sure you should be doing that."
"She wanted to be here," growled Cadence as sparks began to fly from her glowing horn. "She demanded it. I'm not going to deny my darling daughter's request to be present at the--ARRRGHHH!!--birth of her sibling!"
Shining Armor took a long look at the coil of blue magic surrounding Flurry, pulsing and throbbing in time with his wife's labor contractions. "I still don't think--"
"IF SHE LEAVES, YOU'RE UP NEXT! bellowed Cadence through a contraction, which left Flurry to make a squeaking noise much like a dog toy being squeezed.
After due consideration for his mortality, Shining Armor settled back down and patted his wife on the fetlock. "You know best, dear."
Thanks for the submission!
i am not sure what to make of this
Not as dark as I was expecting based on comments and my general knowledge of ornithology. Bonus points for managing to reference both real and mythological brood parasites.
I did NOT expect this. And it's absolutely comedy, you struck gold in there
Side note, if you're curious,
This is the line in the fic that stops it from getting anywhere near dark enough to overwhelm the comedy.
There were hilarious laugh-out-loud twists to be had in this story.
If mares in labor have the same level of pain as women do in labor, "Flurry" is going to enjoy it.
Ha
Nooooo, I love Flurry why would you do this....
I kid this was hilarious and I didn't see it coming. An interesting idea but by god does it make me hate Chrissy all the more lol.
Great work
It went about as well as I thought it would go, but somehow better at the same time.
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You know, the never-the-last-word tradition that seems to have sprung up in FiMFiction's comment sections?
I do love it.
That was not the direction I expected that to go at all.
There's something weirdly compelling about this. I kind of want to see a sequel set, like, maybe ten years later, you know?
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A curious thing - that was actually one of two last second additions I made. That line was because I realized that while I knew what the situation was in my head? It wasn't specifically stated and the reader could interpret it as there having been an original Flurry Heart.
The second was the Pharynx bit after I realized at the last moment of "Oh crap, they appeared in the same scene together. I better explain that ASAP."
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Both were good catches.
Aaah, so that explains the name
This is a good fan theory.
Hilarious base concept, wonderfully dramatic treatment of it. I'd say the tags check out. Thank you for this, and best of luck in the judging.
Wasn't expecting Flurry Heart to be Chrysalis, but is a great twist.
Yeah, that fits :)
what the fUCK
That just means it's funnier.