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Posh


Seasons change, and leaves may fall, but I'll be with you through them all.

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Cadance asks Luna what Flurry Heart dreams about.

Luna tells Cadance what she wants to hear.


Gold medalist in the December 2018 Write-Off, for the prompt "And at the End, You Shall Remain Alone"

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This is a really well crafted story, each paragraph smoothly moving onto the next. Right through to the twisted spires of Equestria's End, Flurry sitting on the bones of yet-to-come.

...Damn.

That's really all I can say.

I knew it! Furry is pony Antichrist!

Proof that overpowered baby characters herald the death of any cartoon universe.

:trollestia:

A wonderfully disturbing kiloword that also packs in some fantastic Luna characterization. The little details like Cadence being "my sister's niece" really shine through. Thank you for a lot of story in a little package.

Ok, someone's been watching too much DWK.

*looks at nephew smashing ice cubes with a 2x4*

Flurry will be fine.

Posh Plays The Ringed City,

Flurry Heart: What, still here? , give me that thing your Dark Soul...for my ladies painting.

Luna:...my what?

Comment posted by WannaFlugelHorn deleted January 9th

You chose a damned fine DaS DLC to rip, for the record. I can dig Flurry as the Usurper of (the) Flame (of friendship?).

9391010
Its use here is literal.
I do not see how this would cause offense.

--Spade

9391010

This isn't quite as good as that random comment I got about fan girl rainbow dash being an offensive stereotype, but it's still pretty memorable.


9390026
Someone finally commented on that!!! :pinkiehappy:

The question Luna should be asking is: Is this a nightmare to Flurry? Because if it's not, the implications are... unsettling to say the least.

Really enjoyed the story. The prose has a simple eloquence to it: there's no long flowery descriptions because the story doesn't need it. It uses nothing more or less than the exact amount of words needed to make its statement in an impactful way; something all fiction should strive for.

Very short, but no longer than it should be. Definitely has some Lovecraft overtones. Thumbs up! :pinkiehappy:


9391010
Overly sensitive much? Or are you just trying to pick a fight? Words have meanings that have nothing to do with gay people, and if they are used correctly and in context are only offensive if you choose to go out of your way to take them like that.

9391010
It’s been a vaguely offensive term since the 1980’s that was later reclaimed by the people it was aimed against. Throughout that time it has survived in its original meaning, it’s even used in what is arguably the best known Robert Frost poem. Unless you were personally offended by its usage I don’t think it’s something to be concerned over.

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For the record, I've always headcanoned Luna as freely using archaic or uncommon words, language whose meaning has changed over time.

She probably describes herself as "gay" when she's in a good mood, failing to understand why the ponies around her snicker.

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Most likely, She does laps into Shakespeare's English at times, it sounds like she still has some catching up to do. A thousand years in the moon is a long time, and many people feel that while 8 seasons have rolled past for the fandom in the pony realm it's been closer to three years (though I haven't been able to confirm that to be canon yet), so yeah, I'd expect some amusing choices of words. Also, does any pony quite have the courage to take her aside and go "Princess, you keep using that word. I do not think it means what you think it means."?

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While I definitely disagree about the context in this story, and as someone in the community, I could only roll my eyes at this. Using it in the story's context means nothing related to being LGBT+ and there is no problem with the author using it in this sense. But I did want to mention while it is reclaimed, not everyone in the community is comfortable with using it, just like the n-word. It's the same sense: some people identify as queer, but you shouldn't label someone else as queer unless they specifically want to be (especially if you're not LGBT+ yourself.)

Just wanted to clear that up. Again, in the context of the story? Queerly being used is fine. It's an old world and using it in the sense it did shouldn't be a big issue as the context is dramatically different.

Other than that, I found this story to be a nice little dark story. A bit short (standing at the minimum word length, in fact, which is rater amusing to me) and I wish that more was done with it, but I also appreciate it being open-ended and making us wonder about the little filly that causes chaos wherever she goes! I do wonder what would happen if Luna talked to anyone else about what Flurry has seen. Well-written too.

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Oh of course. I merely mentioned that to point out how muddy the waters are surrounding that term.

Flurry is destined to destroy.

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I only said this because many others have said negative things when I used the word myself, and I didnt want such a good story to get dislikes for something a simple as what could be considered by some a slur.

This story is really good. Like, it kind of made me jealous, because I want to be able to write like this. It reminded me of Harlan Ellison with the excellently crafted surreal imagery. Was it pared down some to be exactly 1,000 words as some kind of constraint or requirement?

Anyway, I tried to write surreal dream stuff and it turned out... okayish, I guess. Nowhere near this good. So yeah, I really can't say enough positive things about this story.

That… took a sudden and steep dark turn. :applejackconfused:

Flurry Heart is Eldritch Abomination confirmed?

P.S. Love the way you wrote the first person perspective.

Oh, the Ringed City? I've only reached the Drag Heap.

9393089 Actually, it's the opposite. The original version of this story was about seven hundred words in length; it was written for the Writeoff Association, which has a word limit of 750 for short fiction. In order to get it submitted to FiMfiction, which has a minimum length of 1k, I had to expand it by about three hundred words.

So, some of the descriptions and paragraphs are a bit fluffier than they were previously.

Flurry Heart: They were so happy an alicorn was born, they had little thought as to the future such an omen might portend.

I mean, this is the infant that nearly managed to obliterate the entire Empire just by getting cranky. Armageddomare, she may well become.

Small typo

Yet between you and I

between you and me

I didn't authorise this.

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Yet you added it to the list of stories that are partially your fault. You've already claimed responsibility. Confess your sins.

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I never said it wasn't my fault. I said I didn't authorise this. You are not permitted to post your stories without me signing off on them first. It prevents me from inserting Doctor Whooves and questionable lines about Twilight and her brother.

9395118 I couldn't find a good place to squeeze in the incest.

The red hood has come to eat us, it has come to eat our dark souls!

never question that demon child they call Flurry Heart

Brrrr. The teeth, man.

THE TEETH

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