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TCC56


Vagabond short fiction writer. Veteran of many fandom wars. Believer of light in the darkness.

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Telling Discord to 'find more friends' is asking for trouble.


A Most Delightful Ponidox short.

Featured 10/9/2020 - 10/12/2020!

Now with a live reading by StraightToThePointStudio!

And listed in Equestria Daily's 23 of the Best Fanfics to Read for Fluttershy Day on 4/28/2021!

Reviewed by PresentPerfect to earn a rating of Recommended as Light Reading!

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Comments ( 33 )

I'm sure that Sunset would have been much more aggressive about the problem.

I think I can imagine how that would go...

In any case, a delightful little slice of life. I just wish there were more of it. I'd quite like to see the Fluttershies give each other's bodies a spin. Especially since there isn't much of the two interacting with each other, rather than Discord and Twilight. Still, what's there is quite fun. Thank you for it, and best of luck in the judging.

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I just wish there were more of it.

Yeah, I entirely admit this one's come up a bit short. I've been brawling with it for about three weeks, stuck at "Okay, I've got the setup done and... now what?" The rest eventually flowed out, but it didn't develop to nearly what I'd originally been expecting it would.

OH dear gods my sides! I Wish I could see Twi's reaction to learning of the prank!:rainbowlaugh:

Nice, had some laughs!

Looking back I love the fact that it was human Fluttershy (the one who barely knows Discord) that scolded and nudged him. Very humorous detail!

Two Fluttershies? Too much cuteness, soon it will get the critical mass.

Great story image! :pinkiehappy:

And wow! That story! Did not expect that surprise! :rainbowlaugh:

And that ending! :rainbowkiss:

Maybe he should invite his alter-ego from that universe

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Did Starlight ever get punished for A) grievous bodily harm, or B) destruction of school land and property?
I'm pretty sure those are actual crimes, not just in-school misdemeanours, especially since she's not a student.

Given how well Fluttershy can be others, being "herself" is a snap.

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There's not enough room in one universe for two egos that big.

"Yes! You should tell her that!" Discord opened a door behind Twilight - one that led to a random bathroom inside her castle - and shoved the Princess through it. "Tell her hi see you later arrivederci!"

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This is a pretty good story. If one Fluttershy's not enough, just get more

Cute little idea wrapped up in a cute little story. Though I feel for Fluttershy when she has the unfortunate first experience of getting her fingers bitten when trying to give one of her pets a treat.

Overall: 9.683/10, needed more Fluttershy.

Have an upvote for that unexpected, fun turn :ajsmug:

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Discord wasn't meaningfully harmed in a permanent manner so I'm not sure that part of the charge applies. Of course, the fact that Starlight clearly didn't know that at the time means that a lawyer could probably make it stick... (consider that she tried to explain at as something other than point-blank annihilation, which she wouldn't have bothered doing if she thought he could come back from that)

What's with all the blank spaces?
Edit- Oh my gosh after checking the page on my computer I've found out that my ipad no longer allows me to see words that have been italacized.

What the heck, mods? Why is ipad no longer allowed to see italics?

Cute story. :twilightsmile:

Wait...there was a twist? ...is a sequel possible to expound upon it?

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No longer allows you to see words that have been what? Your comment just cuts off mid-sentence and the suspense is killing me.

:P

Across the table, the other Fluttershy cleared her throat. "Um, Discord? Wrong one."

Done played himself! :rainbowlaugh:

This was a fun little read

Hey, at least she didn't tell him to make more friends. That probably would have ended up much worse (and not fit the prompt).

Ahh, now this is some adorable and funny entertainment at its finest! Truly is a short story that can be remembered for a whole lifetime! I hope ya didn't mind, but I just had to make a reading of this funny fic!

Audio Linkyloo!: https://youtu.be/ehMhBH7zGHU

(I don't mean to offend anyone with this comment in any way!)

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As always - it is an absolute honor. Thank you very much.

By now, you probably already know what I think about those hyphens.

Despite the length, the story at least meets the needs of the idea well enough. I sure would have appreciated something more, but I'd be remiss if I didn't point out that the premise alone is amusing.

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By now, you probably already know what I think about those hyphens.

You really, really hate my inability to remember proper em-dash usage, eh? :derpytongue2:

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Well most of them are technically supposed to be en dashes, given that you've spaced them. :derpytongue2:

Honestly, it's no big deal, but I like dashes, so I feel a small ping of sadness every time I see a hyphen used were a dash ought to be. You do get kudos, though, because I can tell you at least like the idea of using them. :trixieshiftleft:

Aw, this was such a cute story. Very sweet and genuine writing. The best ponidox entry I've read so far - hope you win!

I loooooove your title. Reminds me a lot of my own life -- predictably, this is all eiggengrau's fault...

Nice use of two of Fluttershy's easily overlooked character traits: her acting skills and willingness to use (good-natured) trickery.

You know I wasn't expecting such depth nor was I expecting such deception from FLUTTERSHY of all people!

Tho I am VERY happy to say that this did indeed go beyond my expectations! A+!

Nicely done, mate. I myself have something like that in mind, I might let you know when the story is up. :)

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