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Buttery Biscuit


*dances the dance of Italy oh-hoh-oh* OASIS! 3 Mile Mark! This is what it means to go EVEN FURTHER BEYOND! 00:00:00

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This story is a sequel to Carnivorous Trains


Cadence is stressed out, she has an alicorn baby to raise. She needs powerful sitters that don't quit on her. It would also be nice if Flurry stopped burning down her castle. Just when she thought the situation couldn't get any worse, she is called upon to solve a problem of love. Discord and Sombra's love problem. They are severely lacking love. So what does this stressed mother do? She puts Discord and Sombra in charge of her child. Join her as she desperately attempts to hit all her metaphorical birds with just one stone.

Reading the prequel is not necessary it's for the bit. This contains no actual sex. It's only for the comedy. Thank you Kody. Thanks for helping me iron out my thoughts. I also want to thank The Sleepless Beholder not only for the wonderful fan art, but for all their support, and for motivating me to keep writing. And thank you to DovakhiinMaster who is editing all my chapters, starting with the first one. You're a madman, thank you.

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Wow this was both funny and cute at the same time.

I loved Cadence’s rambling thoughts, you really show the kind of extreme paranoia of what it must be like to raise that demon child, and seeing Sombra and Discord in this situation is priceless, especially because of the reasons they state in the first chapter.
I also liked the little talk with the maid, it was a nice touch.

One thing I've to criticize is that it's in need of various corrections in the writing, especially missing commas during the ramblings.

Really good story and I want to see more.

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Thank you! I'm glad you liked it overall. I have another chapter coming out on Friday so you will be seeing more!

Ah, I think I fixed most of it. Right now I'm using google docs auto correct, then putting it into Grammarly (the free version) and then back into google docs. As we speak I am searching for a proof writer. If you can think of anyone I can message that may be up for such a task, let me know.

I love this story.

Sombra and discord are adorable, especially Sombra, and it really feels genuine instead of just for laughs.
Also, Cadence is great, she's just under so much stress I'm surprised she didn't have a heart attack before this, but she satill tries to do good for others. Clearly the princess of love at heart.
And Shining finally accepting them due to their willingness to protect Flurry was perfect.

I will be waiting for the next chapter.

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Thank you, that means so much. I worked very, very hard on it. So it makes me happy you are enjoying it so much. Thanks. :D

I hope you like the next chapter just as much.

Another great chapter.

First, I love tired/drunk Sombra! Never have I seen him like this, and I found it really funny that he's being considerate and 100% done at the same time.
Also, glad to see Ivy again.

Discord's worries feel pretty genuine since his "villainess" comes more from his nature than from his will to do evil.

Cadence continues to earn her title of princess of love with all the support and gift she gives, it really shows that she isn’t' just keeping them because of Flurry.

There are a few things that need some correction, firstly there are some 'your' that should be 'you're' like in this part;

Your both good at doing what you do

should be you're both good.

also, the scene with Twilight I felt like a too sudden change from worry and anxiety to straight up enraged, like its missing some catalyst that maybe I didn't see at first glance.

and one that actually had me laughing very hard in a good way;

He dashed into the room with all the excitement of a young cult

The fact that it's Sombra being described makes it even funnier to me.

I just want to thank The Sleepless Beholder for all their support. It really means a lot. You rock. :)

Aww, you rock too, and I'm still loving this story so keep it up :yay:

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Thank you!

I have fixed all the you're problems. Sorry, sometimes when I stare at something for too long I stop seeing the errors.

I agree. It was sudden. I think I used the wrong emotion there. I fixed it to frustration instead. This would make a lot more sense since that was the emotion I was building up, that and anxiety.

Thanks, I really do apricate your interactions and feedback.

You do well keeping things short if necessary, it keeps the punch in this very important segment. This "conflict" just gave the story another layer of interest, and honestly now I wonder how others will react once things get more known. Twilight’s friends could be both an ally or an enemy in this, and maybe Starlight, being one of the reformed villains, could sympathize with them more easily, which either can make Twilight see reason or create another No Second Prances.
This story is getting better.

it breaks for I love you

I think you mean "because I love you"

I will never forget the time I watched you bite off their heads or the time you hurt Rainbow.

When did this happen? This is my own ignorance in the show.

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Thank you!

She ends up biting off thier head in the movie with Tempest. I feel like she does in the show but not as harsh as I describe it here. Of course in this au Candace sees one of those. The hurt Rainbow thing is something I'm making up and will expand on later. If you wanna know. I wrote it down bellow. Do you think I should expand on it in this chapter? Its kinda a while before I bring it up again. I thought it would potentially take away from the moment but if you feel like it might not. I can add it.

so tldr theres a fight and twilight gets stress. She puts up a shield at the wrong time, rainbow gets too close. She ends up throwing her across the room
It really is an acident but she still ends up hurting her.

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It doesn't need explaining, I was just curious if it was something that happened and I didn't remember, like the movie.

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Ah I see. Okie dokie lokie. Yeah she yells at them I cant remember what happened play by play but she does. The rest of it I made a tiny bit harsher sounding. Let me know if you have any more feed back I love hearing from you! :twilightsmile:

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I remember now, it was her own insecurities about her mission. This was a solid chapter so I don't have much except that I want to see more :pinkiehappy:

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Thank you very much, you're too kind! :twilightsmile: you'll definitely be seeing more!

"Yes, I have been enslaved by Sombra, it's truly a tragedy. I did not just side with him because you keep hogging all the covers at night. I'm not bitter about that at all."

Oh also Shining and I tried to get Celestia to agree to turn the sun into a marshmallow but she said and I quote “no.”

My favorite parts :rainbowlaugh:

This was a really fun chapter, and I love that Celestia got involved and had fun. The idea of these characters being involved in a pillow fight just sounds perfectly natural in this story.
Also like that Discord is starting to get more comfortable with his pranks to keep a little chaos around him. We know he truly needs it.

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:rainbowlaugh: thanks I also love those bits. I'm glad that you like it and that it was a convincing scene. I wanted something nice and light after the last few chapters. ^u^

An interesting chapter, I wasn’t expecting that revelation about Sombra, and now I'm as intrigued as Cadence.
Also, poor sombra, I know what it feels like to have something you think is perfectly logical get debunked with laughs, but I know they didn't have mean intentions.
Also, Tia be careful what you tell Twilight, she isn't the most stable pony in the stable right now.

A couple errors in here:

“Yes, Cadence?” Discord said, wondering as to why he was called here. Flurry Heart was snuggled into his arms, she was currently asleep. It had taken Discord forever to get her to take a nap.

Wasn't Flurry in front of Sombra's cupcake?

She can eat whatever she wants, Cadence can

I think 'Cadence can' should replace the 'wants'

he hadn't expected to wrong

I don't understand the meaning. He didn't expect to make a mistake?

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Thanks. I know how that feeling too and I'm glad it didn't come off mean spirited. Cuz they didn't have mean intentions. No, she really isn't.

A couple errors in here:

*facehoofs* oh my Celestia i can't believe i did that. Woops, i fixed it.

I think 'Cadence can' should replace the 'wants'

Done!

I don't understand the meaning. He didn't expect to make a mistake?

yeah, he did not expect to make a mistake. I clarified it :D

thanks again for your feedback!

This was the weridest one by far, but still fun to read.
I was honestly expeting for Discord to reveal he was doing it on purpose at the end XD

The chapter could use a second look to fix some grammar mistakes.

PS: I find it funny that I've done a similar joke in a story.

This looks goooooooood. I shal read the rest.

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Yeah, I know, but I couldn't help it. This is like the staple of all parents. That one song you never hear the end of. And I thought about it but this is too common of a childhood thing for it to be Discord although Discord does approve it is chaos.

Yeah I tried to find an editor but I had no luck. I asked Competence but he is sick. So maybe he will take look at when he is better if I am lucky. He isn't a mlp fan so I'm not sure he will. I'll try and get a second pair of eyes on it.

Really? What story? I have to know!

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aw thank you, let me know what you end up thinking!

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it's called Chaos and Madness.
To give you a quick summary; Post season 6, Discord recruits Chrysalis to be his partener-in-crime to prank ponies and cause chaos in Equestria and have fun while also trying to help her better her life situation so they can have even more fun.

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Oh i have that on my to-read bookshelf but i haven't read it yet. I'll have to make sure i do! It looked like a lot of fun.

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Okie dokie lokie I can't wait to hear what you think!

lamas with hats

Did you think I would miss that?

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I love this story. All the characters are tangible and the chapter lengths feel natural. I really enjoy reading it. You did a good with this story Biscuit. I can't wait to read the next chapter!:pinkiehappy:

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Hehe I am glad you did not miss that, there was also this gem.

a unicorn named Charlie

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I am so happy you enjoyed it so much. It makes me happy. I worked so hard on it so I'm glad it came off well. I hope you end up liking the next one. It'll be out on Monday. :pinkiehappy:

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Huzza! I'll be there Monday! (Or another day, my schedule is always wack)
I saw the Carlie one too, I just know Lamas With Hat's better, lol. Mostly because... Well... "Carrrrral, that kills people!"

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That's ok get around to it when you can. I followed them both they ended so oddly. My favorite is "My stomach was making the rumblies - that only hands would satisfy." lol.

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He would fit in great with Sheoggorath lol

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Im not sure who that is but i will take your word on that. XD

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Le gasp. You don't know about my boi Sheo? NOOOOOOOOOOOO

Sheoggorath is the Deadric Prince of Madness, from the Elder Scrolls series. I'll spare you the details, but he kind of rules over madness, it's his sphere of influence. The most recent game in the series is Skyrim, and I recommend it to all (including you). Try it sometime, it's not something you'll regret!:pinkiehappy:
Have a wonderful day friend. :)

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I do not. I don't think I have ever played Elder Scrolls. I'll have to check it out. Thank you for letting me know. I hope you have a wonderful day too friend.

Great chapter! You ewere right I LOVE IT.
Ivy should be a profesor in the school of friendship, and I liked that you gave Moon and Spear different valid reasons to be wary of them but not scared enough to avoid interaction.
Youi did a really good job here, well done!

I needs a couple of fixes in the writing (I assume you spelled Chrysalis wrong) but other than that this was a great chapter.

PS: I didn't know you could add a chapter in the middle of the story

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I'm glad. I love it too. That is something that I did not think about but I will. Considering I'm thinking about a sequel. Thank you :D

I did spell it wrong I have fixed it.

I will pm you screenshots of how I did it do you can it too.

This was great, I loved the Celestia joke, and it think this is the first time we see these two being so vulnerable, it does give me some worry.
I see that the circle of distrust keeps going, and hope it breaks little by little with time.

PS: Hope you're feeling better, and I’m glad you can give yourself happiness with your stories :twilightsmile:

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Thank you. I thought the joke was funny too. I wouldn't worry too much extreme exhaustion is common for most new parents from my understanding. Plus Flurry is how do I say this nicely? A very difficult child.

Me too. :)

Thanks. A bit i might make some more i duno depends on how i feel. (including Friday)

Beautiful chapter, as always Biscuit. Per as usual, I look forward to the next one. :pinkiehappy::heart:

Aw that sounds very fun, and creative. I'm happy to see that flurry is progressing in her control, or at least reduced chaos XD

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It does sound like fun! I would play.

Me too :) she is getting there.

Great chapter one again :heart:, though I'm terrified of when Flurry discovers the floor is lava. :twilightoops:

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Thank you and oh my god. I didn't even think about that. That would definitely be intresting. I will definitely be keeping this thought in the back in my mind for later :3

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Big oof to the coffee tables. :fluttercry::rainbowlaugh:
I'll look out for it, and you're welcome. :pinkiehappy:

Wow, there was a lot in this chapter.
Discord's and Sombra's fears are worring, it shows how they truly see their friends.
Fluttershy seemd quite observant in this chapter, and you show a sort of artistic drive in discord that I really like. Also, drunk shenanigans are great as always.
The most interesting however must be the duel, and I wish it get's expanded more in the future.

Besides that, you should made some corrections when you have the time.

Keep the good work!

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It is indeed a long one. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

Wait what kind of corrections? Gramer? Plot?

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Grammar. Plot seemes pretty good so far.

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