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aceotaku


Hi! I'm an MtF transexual who writes a lot of fics! I hope you all really enjoy my work (though i have a tendency to not update certain stories for long stretches of time... Anyway! I like adventres!

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This story is a sequel to Rainbow is Magic S2: Love Hearts and Bug Eyes


Princess Cadance's past is a mystery, especially to herself. After Celestia and Luna sense a surge of Dark Magic in the far frozen north, Cadance and her wife go to investigate along with Rainbow Dash and the other bearers of the Elements of Harmony in order to deal with it, and hopefully uncover the truth of Cadance's hidden past.

Unfortunately, waiting for them is a dangerous new enemy, one with one goal in mind: revenge.

Chapters (3)
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Candace has a wife in this universe? Or is it supposed to be husband

9610805
wife, detailed in the direct prequel to this story ;3

Okay guessing time,

Sombre either jealous-brother
Or ex-lover
Or or evil dad/step-dad

9626230
and remember that SOmbra's a dragon in this story

Okay WTF and

Spike: I need an adult

Sombra: I am an adul-

Spike: who isn't insane

Also looks like I was wrong about the whole Cadence brother/Dad/Step Dad/Uncle twice removed thing.

9640239
XD yeah SOmbra dn Cadance's connection is basically supposed to be purposely mirroring rainbow/canon!twilight's relationship with spike

hope you liked it!

D48

Well, this is looking fun and interesting, but it is seriously let down by your first major plot hole in this AU. The Elements vanished. They very clearly had them at the beginning of the story, but they mysteriously disappeared once the plot got going. Instead of pulling on the Elements after the train got tossed when things were looking like they were about to get ugly and blasting Sombra the moment he proved himself an asshole, they just sort of cease to exist. :facehoof:

9698021
yeaahhh uhhh I...I'll be honest, I forgot and didn't think to recheck (a problem I still have trouble dealing with as a writer). MAYBE I can write something in a later chapter about it that'll fix it (or go back and edit earlier chapters to mention why the Mane Six don't just use the Elements to beat Sombra).

Granted, the question "why didn't they use the Elements" DID pop into my head before reading this comment, so its not like I'm blind. I'm just dumb XP

D48

9698228
Yeah, I think this is one of the few cases that legitimately calls for editing in fanfiction because it is jarring enough to knock readers completely out of the story.

As for ideas, I do have one although I'm admittedly not happy with it because it's still kinda dumb. Only one car got thrown, so you could say the Elements along with the rest of their bags were in another car. That creates obvious problems with it not making sense to separate themselves from the Elements, but you might be able to get around it if you can very temporarily split them off into a dining car or something to make it a nasty coincidence which powers the story.

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