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Arcanum -Phantasy

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This story is a sequel to The Golden Trail

When a daddy Unicorn and a mommy Alicorn get together and love each other very much, they get a rambunctious little Flurry Heart. When a daddy Siren and a mommy Windigo get together and love each other very much they get...a very lonely creature. But maybe Flurry can change that.

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Comments ( 197 )

hm this interesting story...very good opening almost like a prologue! hopefully in second chapter will explain (or in flashback) why flurry and her friends decided to check out that cave. one error though it's "followed not fallowed" question: ruby and sapphire (flurry heart's friends)names aren't in relation to Pokémon?

Really good and interesting so far.
I hope this fic gets featured.

"Sense when did you swear?"

It's supposed to be, "Since when did you swear?"

Thanks for the input and no, their names where inspired by Steven Universe. I simply flipped the personalities a bit.:twilightsmile:

It's intriguing. I'll track this.

A lonely Windigo is something the official series is still missing. Don't know if they will ever bring them up. Maybe in the upcoming 44-minute Hearth's Warming special? Well, unlikely but still possible.

it's been a long while (for me anyways!) since reading the first chapter. great character progression on all fronts
also liked haze using an alias "alto" I think he's using one? only missing an extra 's' of the word hiss.

I love the idea of super rare ingredients/critters just being "lunch" to poor Alto.

If Alto and Flurry are same age and have same growth speed then the topic of Alto's mother's killer will be very dramatic.

I found two typo.

"All day today, Flurry wanted to know everything she could about Windagos."

shouldn't it be windigos?

he looked like he ran a marathon with led weights tied to his legs.

shouldn't it be lead?

1. Thanks for that.
2. No I ment led like the metal.

Isn't lead the metal spells the same with lead the leader.

Loving this story! It’s very rare to find a Windgo story and this could be a really good one. Be sure it’s long and fun to read! :twilightblush:

Huh. So it is. I'll be sure to fix that when I have a chance.

You seems busy. Good luck with whatever occupy your time!

No his name is really Alto.:twilightsmile:

All of it was perfectly organized by size, color, and most likely order of consumption based on what she had observed in her many interactions with her friends. In many ways, she blamed her small obsession with organization on her Aunt

As you should :moustache:

"First off Sapphire," Flurry groaned. "Do you have any idea how hard it is to meet anypony who isn't afraid I'll blast them to oblivion? Plus, I think Dad would put a hit on anypony who could even get that far."

.... That is a distinct possibility with him :applejackunsure:

Was that what happens when you use a hot spring too much? She thought as she turned a page in her book. Nah, if that was the case, all of the Nobles would look like that.

HA :trollestia:

"Hey, wait," she exclaimed, casting an inquiring glance at her teacher. "How could they use magic and fly if they don't have wings or horns?"

Flurry Heart, there are several races in your world that dosen't need wings or a horn to use magic, and then there are those that can use magic completetly unrelated to the horn or wings they do have :moustache:

Though Opal didn't buy the filly's performance, he decided against calling her out on it. Instead, he smiled and said, "Good to note. Have a good day Miss?"

"S-Sapphire Trail," she stuttered, gaze still centered on the ground.

"Ah, yes," he sighed in relief. "Sapphire Trail. I'll make sure to remember that name."

With that, he gave her a reassuring smile and made his way out of the classroom.

He's good :trixieshiftright:

"Nice to meet you Alto. I'm Flurry Heart.

And so it begins :heart: :pinkiecrazy:

"You know, your Highness," a calm male voice chuckled. "The best way to sneak out of your own house is to not look like you're trying to sneak out."

But what would the point be of trying to sneak out, if you don't look like your trying to sneak out... the thrill of getting caught is part of the "sneaking out" process :scootangel:

No, he didn't even know what books and reading was. If her Aunt found out about this, she would lose her mind at the perceived impossibility of the matter.

Part of me wants Flurry to tell her... and then watch the no doubt hilarious fallout :pinkiecrazy:

"The very same. We have an assignment together tomorrow and Sapphire thinks that means we're dating."

A look of shock broke through Agate's blank mask.

"You mean you two aren't going out?"

Again, Ruby nodded.

With that, Agate slapped his left hoof across his knee and grimaced.

"Great, now I owe Fine twenty bits."

HA, i like how everyone think they are dating... admitingly i believe that they will start to date soon, but that's beside the point :twilightsmile:

"Speaking of bets, Ru Ru's gonna be walking around with a black mane for a while. Just a heads up."

Oh i seriously doubt that :pinkiecrazy: :heart:

"Yeah," he sighed as he wrote, "That's what happens when you mess with a mare that chisels rocks with her bare hooves.

Well, her teacher is Maud Pie, so that's to be expected :pinkiecrazy:

This time, the young Pegasus had to help his Unicorn friend get through the most difficult thing ever known to ponykind: understanding mares.

It ain't possible :ajbemused:

"Okay. So. She doesn't hate me at least. That's good. Do you think you could give me some advice?"

"Shoot," he wrote with a shrug.

"How do you date a filly?"

Quartz's mind stopped for a moment after he read his friend's message.

"How the hay should I know? I'm not dating anypony."

Another brief moment of inactivity, then another message appeared on the pages.

"Really? I must be really bad at this. Because the way you and Miss Ruby act around each other, I would've thought the two of you were together."

Quartz's face turned bright red as he hastily scrawled his response.

"We're just really good friends! That's all."

"If you say so."

Literally everyone thinks they're dating, its just a matter of time before they finally realize that's basically what they are doing and make it offical :heart: :pinkiecrazy:

"By everything do you mean-"

He just told you that she takes after Twilight more than Shining, so when he says everything, he means...

" Everything. Their hight, weight, lifespans, favorite food, even if they could have foals like ponies do or if they made them using magic. She even asked me if they had fangs and scales instead of fur, if you can believe that. I don't even know where she got that idea, but I digress."

Exactly :twilightsheepish:

"Well, that's good," she smiled, snuggling into his side affectionately. " If she's anything like Twilight, that should keep her busy for a while."

If she's anything like Twilight that will keep her busy for a few hours at most :trixieshiftleft:

"Oh really?" Starlight asked. "What could top that?"

Necromancy, Chronomancy.... Draconequui mating habits :trixieshiftright:

Thanks to him, the interior of his home was now minus three-thousand degrees with the spring at its heart just over one-thousand degrees

Those numbers don‘t make any sense. You can‘t go colder that absolute zero (roughly -273 C) and 1000 C is hot enough to melt aluminium, so the spring should have vapourized.

Siren magic and Windago magic. Extreme Cryomancy and Hydromancy. This is the same world that has talking technicolor ponies, Discord, the laws of nature managed by mere mortals/demigods, portals between worlds/realities, and whatever the hell Pinkie is, and you think Alto can't destroy the laws of temperature with his magic? Really? :ajbemused::ajbemused::ajbemused::ajbemused::ajbemused:


On the top end, sure, but absolute zero is when atoms stop moving. Heat is just energy being released, and you can’t have less energy than no energy. So having a temperature below the point at which atoms stop moving is not something magic can really work around.

Fare enough, but what if the spell freezes something to such a high degree that it turns it into pure blue ice?

Absolute zero would still aply.

Fair enough. Perhaps I should alter the scene a bit when I get the chance.

When will this be updated again?

most likely when I'm done with The Gaps in F r i e n d s h i p. Its one of my more popular fanfics so it kind of demands most of my attention.

Temperature issue corrected. I am also happy to inform all who it may concern that work on this fic is resuming as we speak so expect a new chapter to be coming soon.

Congratz, you got featured. 5/9/2019, for your reference. Good job.

Huh... didn't see that coming. :applejackconfused:

:rainbowderp: Story is back

"Tell me about it," Sapphire groaned. "I bet Flurry'll have a coltfriend before they figure it out."

Hmm, maybe :applejackunsure:

"Absolutely," he smirked.

Cadance would approve :moustache:

If the main OCs in this story were voiced, what would they sound like?

Ruby would sound kind've like Maud.
Sapphire would sound like Spitfire
Alto like a male version of Fluttershy
Quartz would sound like Sorin or Flash
Opal would sound like Time Turner
Onyx sounds like Big Mac minus the accent and southern dialect
And Platinum would sound like Octavia, minus the accent.
(While not an OC Flurry's voice sounds similar to Sweetie Belle's.)

what are the age ranges of the characters in the story? I can't really peg them down and the use of colt and filly cover anywhere from prepubescent to late teens in the MLP fandom

Flurry, Alto, Riby, Sapphire, Quartz, Opal, and Platinum are all 16 while Onyx is 25.

Can Sapphire and Ruby do some crazy combo magic? Maybe something with the word Garnet Associated with it.

AaAah this fan fiction is so good! I can't wait for more! :pinkiehappy:

Dangit, Starlight! XD

I do feel like it would be starlight though to get the ,if any, info about who flurry is meeting just from seeing that shes the confiding pony flurry seeks out.

"Flurry may or may not have a coltfriend," Sunburst groaned as he slumped onto the couch.

Nuff said :moustache:

"Do you think this will be the last time we deal with this insanity?" the gray Unicorn sighed.

Of course not :pinkiecrazy:

A shark-like smile spread across Onyx's face as he said, "I have no bucking clue."

That must have been fun to say :trollestia:

Hello, 🍎
Not trying to be a pain, just going to say you wrote "sattle" bags twice. Did you perhaps mean "saddle" bags?
Nice story concept too.

Yeah, that's an old trick of mine that I'm trying to fix. Thanks for the heads up. :twilightsmile:

Poor Platinum... :fluttercry:

"If I plan to join the Royal Guard, I will need all the resources I can get."

The Royal Guard? Nah, to join up with that lot you simply need to be able to stand still and put a helmet on the right way around. Now if you were trying to join a combat branch things would be rather more rigorous...

Nice to see more chapters coming. Hope that Platinum finds Friendship and maybe have a crush on Alo since he is a wild pony... though Flurry won’t be happy

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