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This story is a sequel to A Human's Guide to Surviving Equestria


There is always more than one side to any story. Here are the records of somepony from one of those sides. From the pony responsible for, what the citizens of Ponyville call "The Human Incident.

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Jorbun #1 · May 6th · · ·

Glad to see a continuation of this. I enjoy stories where good people/ponies screw up irrevocably and have to earn forgiveness. Usually the Mane 6 or Celestia. I often see it in stories similar to this, where a human appears in Equestria and suffers due to poor communication and/or racism. It tends to devolve into a revenge story though.

Common pitfalls of stories like this are the forgiveness happens too quickly and easily (often without any attempt at restitution at all), or it gets relegated to a background element in favour of other plot developments, or the aggrieved party stonewalls any attempts to earn forgiveness (which is their prerogative from a Watsonian perspective, but not how I usually want to see such a plotline resolved.)

This situation has more nuance than I usually see because James is partly to blame for his situation. If an attempt at an apology is made, I can easily see him taking the explanation as an attempt to shift blame onto him, rather than dispelling his fears.

Stet709 #2 · May 6th · · ·

Poor Twi. She realized she messed up and tried to remedy the situation, but both James and some ponies weren't making things easy.

Oh it was all just misunderstandings!!!!

I’ve been waiting for this!

Edit: I think Audio 13 needs to have the color corrected?

Edit 2 The Post Readining: I like how this followed the original concept of the first story, told via audio logs instead of journal entries. I can’t wait to see where you go from here, maybe letters between Twilight & Celestia following his recovery?

Pete100 #5 · May 6th · · ·

So this whole thing was just a big misunderstanding. Now I feel bad for making assumptions.

we need a part 3 i have to know what happens next:pinkiecrazy:

popping100 #7 · May 6th · · 2 ·

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how is he partly to blame for his situation

Jorbun #8 · May 6th · · 7 ·

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He jumped to conclusions and ran away in the first place, and later set himself on fire and poisoned himself to evade capture.

popping100 #9 · May 6th · · 1 ·

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yeah but he was just summoned to an alien world and came across a new species with magic and finds himself in a lab with an operating table with cuffs. What other assumption was he supposed to come to.

Also the ponies only solidified the assumption; fluttershy has mind control eyes, rainbow dash just attacked him, applejack forms a search party to find him, pinkie is some kind of eldritch horror, rarity apparently is so protective of her trash she attacks any who come near and spike literally breathed fire on him. Oh also apparently there's this pony who can move the fucking moon and can mess around in your head.

Just what is he supposed to think.

Jorbun #10 · May 6th · · 7 ·

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Just because he had understandable reasons for his actions doesn't mean those actions weren't pointlessly self destructive.

The ponies bear most of the blame for his suffering, but none of them force fed him the poison.

popping100 #11 · May 6th · · 2 ·

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They were pointlessly self destructive which is the whole point, it's called tragedy. A series of events out of the control of the characters which causes them great pain.

About the poison while I personally disagree with his decision I do understand it. From his point of view ponies are violent and are seeking to capture him for experimentation. He is also aware ponies have access to mind altering magic. For all he knows he is never going to see his family or world again, is going to spend the rest of his life being experimented on and realised there was nothing he could do to prevent it. He had been starved, living in filth and injured; There was no way out for him, no path that has a happy ending.

Dawg #12 · May 6th · · ·

Very nice story

Glad to see this continued.

nit: only typo I noticed: speratic -> sporadic https://www.merriam-webster.com/dictionary/sporadic

Yeah, adds up for ponies and people say that humanity would speciesist. When it comes to ponies, we should take notes

A lot of rash decisions and unfortunate accidents.

Well written, word-smith.

Surprised to see a sequel to this; hope to see one made form this fic.

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I highly recommend you delete that shit ASAP, leaving it be makes you a target for other much worse ones. Report the account as well, I did.

Great stuff... This is a good sequel and I'm leery about any more chapters/stories in this. Maybe an epilogue but I think it'd be VERY difficult to realistically portray such confrontations and emotions when he wakes up. Although... maybe he can be in a coma and another human is summoned in a panic to somehow help him. Purple smart pulls a human related to him to try and wake him up. I always enjoy people getting mad in others place rather then the target themselves. Also, This doesn't tell of Luna and her involvement and reaction in this matter.

Then... the first of my two questions was answered, the reason why the MC was so desperate not to be found... And it was a combination of paranoia from the MC and stupidity from Twilight...

Of course, this error has left the poor purple stain scarred for life, a lesson from the saying "the road to hell is full of good intentions", a necessary when it comes to governing... But too soon for her

Now my second question... And I have the feeling that it will not be answered, and is that there will be a real sequel to the fic? Because although I enjoy reading this fic and its predecessor, I want to see the consequences of the actions performed, it is always better as the author describes the reactions to the consequences, almost always are completely different

>Yet another microbox
His boots go missing, his microwave goes missing so he buys another one that disappears too, all before getting sent to horseland. No wonder he's strung out.

An excellent sequel! Will there be more?

I am curious, since you brought Starswirl into the mix are you going to have Twilight learn that he & Celestia stole the majority of pony development & culture from humans?

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I'm personally keen on another sequel myself, preferably a longer one (even just 30K words or so), with the human's recovery, apologies, and attempts to return him (which I would expect to not be successful, further compounding Twilight's mistake; I could see it ending with her having to live with the fact that sometimes the 'magic of friendship' fails, sometimes you can screw up so badly even if unintentionally, that you render the situation unfixable and the other party won't forgive you). I mean, even if things went exceptionally well, he would still have been stuck in an alien world for over two and a half months, and even if she was able to get him home his life would be a shambles and he wouldn't be able to offer his family, friends, and investigators a true explanation for his disappearance without being institutionalized.

This is pre-ascension. She's a unicorn still living in the treebrary, so she's not even the Princess of Friendship yet, let alone the primary ruler of the land.

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that would also be interesting, the two of you (your idea and the idea that the human is dead) are quite interesting and are a completely different journey of guilt, how this would be addressed would be very interesting and I really would like to read how it would happen, although the inclusion of a second human (and the chaos that would bring that) would be very entertaining and would complicate much things, it would be quite fun

I'd like to call the events implausible, but Twilight becoming obsessed with correcting a previous mistake and making things worse is SO her :twilightsheepish:

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The 'summon another human to help the first' would have to come with the pretty important caveat that Twilight is certain she can send at least the 2nd human back (leaving behind a magical marker or something). I don't think she'd make the mistake of summoning a second human, even out of desperation, unless she was certain of that. More to the point, I'm not sure how she'd manage to select a human with medical knowledge since she seems to have negligible control over what the spell brings back, but I suppose you could argue she changes it to seek out 'creatures like the human we already brought over'.

It might be an interesting direction to explore, it's just I don't think she'd compound her screw-up, even in desperation, by repeating the same mistake of ripping someone from their home and plopping them in a new world. Possibly some sort of 'do you consent' condition on top of 'requisite knowledge' feature?

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if I’m not bad, the spell Twilight uses was incomplete, so returning an object to its original plane should be possible, but at the same time impossible (the "magic" factor is the one that decides if it is possible, because the summoned human could have magic or not... although the ponies can equal the humans in regards to Stubbornness)

although I would like the spell to maintain the "gacha" factor because using the spell is a full roll of dice (even if it did launch an American... I don’t agree with that, it would be more interesting if someone appeared who spoke a completely different language like Spanish) and can give you someone random, with super useful skills or that are a total garbage (whereas these skills are not dependent on current technology, which is superior to that of ponies)

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.......the fuck? Okay, if people like you don't cut this out, I'm gonna start making some reports. I'm all for a good joke and all, but this could get a bit annoying real quick :facehoof:

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They don't care. Facebook is infested with these fake magic scams. Not surprised they've started appearing on this site honestly.

My audio reading of 'Human's Guide to Equestria' is one of the most popular readings I've ever done. So I think I better do it's sequel!

Wow, I just went ahead an recorded reading this for the audio version.
This is going to be a challenging audiobook. It's like it was written with the expectation of becoming one with sound effects actually described and such. Ironically I had just committed to not using sound effects in audiobooks any more and cancelled my Artlist.io subscription. I might have to find free sounds or make sound effects myself. This will be a lot more work then I expected and won't be finished by tomorrow like I intended, might need a week to get this one done.

I've been getting bored of HIE but im glad i read this, I've always preferred when the mc is confused/scared of ponys then isolates them self from them. it makes more sense and its a more compelling story then coexisting and accepting the fact they will never return home at the start the story.

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Creo que el problema es que estás en una postura rígida. Fimfiction es una página exclusiva para el fandom de habla inglesa mientras que Fanfiction también cuenta con el fandom latinoamericano. Eso puede darte un poco de variedad.

Twilight really messed up bigtime. I love seeing tragedies from multiple perspectives and really don't know which one is more heartwrenching. That the dude had his microwave stolen TWICE before getting kidnapped is just the icing on his horrible cake. The audio-log writing was a clever way of transferring her thought process to the reader <3

I can't believe I completely miss this sequel all this time how silly of me, but this gave me such great insight of his situation.

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