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When a strange black and red alicorn appears in the Everfree Forest, Twilight and the others are sent to investigate.
Unfortunately, this visitor is an incomprehensible mess and quickly drives the girls insane.
Featured 1/9/19. Now with an audio recording here. My goodness, what an honor!
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He's mind, is Not to be compared to discord
lolz ur oc is not as kewl as mine oc his names Darkblade Kunoichi and his katana is made out of his own hatred and anger and all the mane 6 plus ceelstia and luna and cadence love him and cadence leaves shining armor because he beats her so darkblade has to go cut him up and oh my god this started as a joke but I think I legit have a brain tumor now.
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Yeah, I think I developed cancer writing Death Star's lines. Or at least lost a couple of brain cells.
And your oc sounds pretty cool, dude. He'd beat Goku and Vegeta and Saitama and Superman and Thanos all together.
Oh, my gosh, I felt stupid writing that.
*Sigh*
I wish.
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Not as stupid as the sequel I'm sure you'll write where your oc beats up the entirety of the MCU, kills Chrysalis, and marries Fluttershy and Black Widow.
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You have no idea. I've read about dozens of these guys.
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I don't make it my pastime to browse others alicorn OCs (although I'm sure there are plenty of very well thought-out ones... somewhere), but I've read enough Alicorns to decide that if I'm gonna design an OC, it's gonna be as faaaaar away from an Alicorn as possible.
(Keep it classy, keep it Earth Pony)
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Then you would love A Journey Beyond Sanity, by Stardust Balance. He's an earth pony in that story, and it's also really, really good, and it's over a million words long.
I don't know what to say.
But yes, Naruto fans must die...
God, I can see why you were giggling, this was a riot.
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I was considering asking you to do this for one of your reviews, but it appears you've already got it covered. Thanks for reading and commenting, dude! You're awesome!
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You're welcome. Really loved the Displaced genre sporking moment you did. Lost it at about that moment.
But I love Naruto😫
Oh, what a lovely tale.
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"Gentlemen, surround him. He's not getting away from the arm of justice. Careful now! He has jutsu he could use against us!"
"Sir, did you just order an arrest because he likes Naruto?"
"He's allowed to like it. It's forbidden to tell anybody he likes it, however."
Yeah, I'm a bit hypocritical here. I like Attack on Titan, so take my word with a grain of salt.
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D'aww, thank you! And please, if you enjoyed it, check out some other fics I've worked on!
Cute story. Funny concept, executed quite well. You get bonus points for that shout-out for Legend of the Galactic Heroes.
The only thing I wish is that you'd been a little more careful in your proofreading. Also, wasn't this the subject of one of your blogs?
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Hehehehe
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The lack of proofreading was intentional. It was a bit of a personal challenge for me to squeeze out a good story without extensive proofreading. I just checked beforehand to make sure the grammar was right (or wrong) and where the plot elements were.
And yeah, it was a blog subject. But I wanted to let people know I was making something before I actually put it out there, you know?
Also, thanks for the Legend of the Galactic Heroes catch.
Upvoted and faved just because this sums this genre up perfectly. Also so many in the fandom with this.
Parodies of the black and red alicorn oc are always welcome.
Oh my fucking god, this is perfection in a nutshell, this is the story we have been waiting for.
Fucking A, I love it
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This is the best comment I've gotten on this story. Or in recent memory. And I'm going to follow you for that comment, man. I'm following you for that comment.
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It's too good, hahaha.
Hahaha, I'm following you for the story, cause this is just... perfect is all I can think of
And thanks!
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TheLegend27?
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Beautiful
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(actually reads it)
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I went into it with the mindset of "doing something stupid because you think it’d be funny".
It was not.
I am now traumatized.
Send help.
And bacon.Never mind that last one, I found some in the freezer.
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Holy crap, I just read it too. Those comments were more entertaining to read than the actual story.
Oh, holy crap in a chicken basket, that was an ordeal. I should have read that one before I wrote this fic for inspiration.
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The author himself?
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You?
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Man, I love your comments. You're amazing, you know that?
This...this was beautiful. This is probably the best bad-fanfic-bash story I've read since The Unfortunate Discovery of Marissa Roberts. I love how even the dialogue of the OC was written like a bad fanfic. This is literally perfection.
A little while back–a couple of hours ago, actually–you asked me what you did to deserve my follow. This is what you did to deserve it.
Thanks for the laughs. This is definitely going into my favorites.
Good story
Keks were had
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The sacrifices you make in the name of your art are an inspiration to us all.
Also:
Congratulations on getting featured, by the way.
Hello there!
Meta I guess
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General Kenobi!
Death Star is such a deep, complex, and compelling character.
Deep in billshit, so complex even he doesn't know wtf is going on, and strongly compelling me to rip my hair out
THIS IS ONE OF THE BEST STORIES ON FIMFICTION
Last bit sounds like SAO and many other anime.
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Aww, thanks! That's an amazing compliment!
I just gotta compete with My Little Dashie, Rainbow Factory, Cupcakes, The Lost Element, and Fallout: Equestria now for the best story ever.
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Don't forget about Past Sins.
Also, congrats on getting into the feature box!
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"Death Star, you're evil!"
"frum mY . of vu, CeleStiA is evul!!.!"
"Then you are lost! Actually, you were lost from the very beginning, but my point still stands!"
Ahh… this story was hilarious. I quite liked how you butchered Death Star's dialogue.
But somewhere deep down inside, a part of me is screaming for this:
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