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Tranquil Serenity

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Comments ( 12 )

The ending leaves a bit to be desired, but overall, not bad!

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What a nice way to capture Spike's thoughtful side.

Hmm. I like it! I kind of wish there was more to the ending. It dosen't really feel like an ending. I was actually going to track this story until I realized that it was complete. If the story was about writing the letter and nothing else, then add a scene with Spike deciding that finally finishing the letter and expressing his feelings is what's important. You know, a little character growth. Otherwise, maybe actually explore Rarity recieving the letter? Or heck, why not both? This seems like the type of story that would benefit greatly from being just a bit longer. You earned a big thumbs up!

this needs a sequel follow-up
or another chapter for the same purpose

:duck: Oh thank you Spike, Opalescence made a mess by the kitchen table and I was all out of paper towels ......
:facehoof: They were married two years later and their foals were....
:pinkiegasp: reallysuperdupercutebutyouhadtofireproofthebabysroomandeverywhereelseinEquestria

I left the ending open purposefully, leaving it up to the reader's imagination as to how Rarity responds to the letter. I wanted it to be more about Spike getting his affections for Rarity on paper, finally having the courage to let her know how he feels. I'm thankful you all enjoyed this little piece for what it was though. :twilightsmile:

i'm not a fan of open ends

Very poetic how Spike writes about his live. Nicely done

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