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When Midnight Sparkle shattered reality in her mad desire to understand everything about magic, Daydream Shimmer was able to reverse most of the damage.
But not all of it.
Weeks later, Sunset Shimmer and her friends find themselves dealing with some annoying magical pests from Equestria that are running wild all over CHS.
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I get it!
AGAIN?!!?
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Was this gag also commissioned?
7573414 Nah, the gag was my idea. Same with the Turducken.
Well, I did ask for someone "completely unexpected" to save the day. I should've known what I was getting into.
In general, it's not all that much like I expected, but I do like it. If there's a complaint, it's that the Ben Dover joke was a lot of awkward buildup relative to the payoff.
Time to start thinking of something for next month, I guess.
Its.. Something ahahahah
7573452 The whole point of the Ben Dover joke was to be absurd in its repetition. Sometimes that kind of joke works, sometimes it doesn't.
*notes the payoff of the Ben Dover gag* Well, the Comedy tag is well earned, I must say. Nice to see your view of canon EQG's Twilight Velvet, and how she interacts with Spike. Interesting take on why Sci-Twi's device went haywire in the movie. I liked the little discussion her and Flash had concerning her being a "replacement" for Princess Twilight, and their interaction in general. Those were the standout parts for me.
This belongs on Nostalgia Critic's top 11 Mindfucks countdown.
...it was great!
7573467
Personally, I think the joke worked. I smiled a little more every time I read it.
So damned random! I love it. Discord should take notes.
Poor Sunset gets into the weirdest stuff in your stories.
At least Convicted serial anal rapist Ben Dover didn't run into Molestia.
For the love of Faust, please make a sequel to this story, I just got to know what would happen if any humans from CHS had fallen through one of those cracks into Equestria, it would have been cool though if the girls had taken a picture of Zebra Zecora and Pony Twilight, then have someone upload their pictures onto the net and see what other people would think about said pictures.
You know, I typically wait until I read through the whole story before I like it, but that line just earned you an instant like. Well done.
Epic story. Nice fun adventure of the humans dealing with creatures from Equestria. I admit, that convicted serial anal rapist Ben Dover gag was amusing. I think my favorite part was Flash's interactions with Sci-Twi and how she still needs to take some time to be her own person instead of Princess Twilight's "replacement." Too bad Flash says he's over Twilight, but he still has Sci-Twi as a friend so I will not lose hope!
Oh Celestia this is one of the most entertaining stories I've ever read
Godddamn start to finish, this was just so funny XD I can't help but crack up at every turn.
Cheers to you mate for writing such an awesome story!
Aah, I not the most versed in pop culture reference or news stuff but is the convicted serial anal rapist Ben Dover a reference to something? I still find convicted serial anal rapist Ben Dover (character or mentioned) hilarious but I'm just curious about this convicted serial anal rapist Ben Dover.
He is an adult!
(Drops mic and sprints away cackling)
(P.s. So are you, Will.)
7574044 Ben Dover = bend over.
its a saying from prison IRL. its just like 'don't drop the soap.'
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"don't drop the soap, or ben dover will visit you.'
WHY?! BRAIN, JUST WHYYYY?!
Is that a Phineas and Ferb reference I see?
That was a long one shot, but boy was this one gold.
I laugh during all the reading, so much comedy, puns, awkward moments, thrilling adventure, convicted serial anal rapist Ben Dover
and that damn Turducken coming back for what the fourth or fifth time.
All in all magnificent job you done here. Have a like and a fave.
7574081
Thanks so much! Now, it just got a hell lot better
7574044 Convicted serial anal rapist Ben Dover isn't a reference to anything. He's just the result of a silly pun colliding head-first with a nonsensical conversation I was having with a friend one night.
7574138 Yes. Yes it is.
Ah you are a joy to read, Sunset.
A Timberwolf. Shit.
Anybody got a flamethrower?
She's a mad scientist, all mad scientists know how to build ray guns, it's a requirement.
Rainbow Dash is best Scout.
Really? I liked Ezri. I'll admit, I preferred Jadzia, but she had a lot more time for the fans to get used to her compared to Ezri.
I feel like this is a reference to something.
That's it.
Linda is.
No, but it does get weirder.
Equestrians don't have the exact same biology as your horses, and plus, magical world. Not everything makes sense.
You ARE an adult.
Oh, poor girls. Will you ever get a break?
I loved this.
7573467
Oh, it works.
Spike calls Twilight Velvet Mom? what's she think about that?
So... is the name on his birth certificate "convicted serial anal rapist Ben Dover," or is this similar to how everyone refers to the principals by their titles?
I really like how Twilight confronts the "horse analogue" issue and expresses herself as she does so. Flash makes a good showing as well.
In all, a very fun adventure. Nice pacing, good tension, very enjoyable moments of levity, and great character moments. Thank you for it.
7573882
I think a toy company would use them for a cartoon.
7574664 That's a very damn good question, although based on the ending, I'd say he was given that title rather than be born with it.
All in all, that was a fun adventure in and of itself, and I particularly liked the segment with Sci Twi and Flash and I'm honestly hoping something like that, not necessarily with Flash, happens in the next movie.
But, seriously? Serial anal rapist Ben Dover? One that's a horrible pun, and two what the flying hell? Just having him in the story is Pinkie levels of randomness.
Does convicted serial anal rapist Ben Dover have a cultured British accent? I read him with one.
>Daydream Shimmer
Please tell me that isn't the cannon name, that's on par with calling evil Celestia "Daymare Sun"
Is this before first period, or between second and third? A Phoenix discovered after second period can't burn up pop quizzes for a first period class. The inconsistency is minor, but still there
7574266
I like the way you handled both Sci-Twi and Flash, without bashing either of them.
7574776 Yes, he does.
7574802 That's exactly what it is, sorry.
7574977 I think you misparsed something there.
It's burned up the quiz papers she was going to grade. As in, the first period class already took the quiz, those were their ungraded quiz papers, and being burned up kept Harshwhinny from grading them.
7575075 Thanks.
I try my best.
If anyone cares, this was the prompt I gave to MythrilMoth:
I was vaguely inspired by the season 3 finale of BtVS. The end result has little resemblance to that, of course, but I'm definitely pleased.
7575094 Ah, ok, that makes sense. I didn't quite get that from the wording, but that's on me. Thanks for clearing that up.
This was...very appropriately titled. Have an insane Pinkie of approval.
7574266
How did I know you were going to answer with another reference?
Hey, you brought it up Rare....thank you for sharing?
May we beat this joke/pun into the ground.
Flutters means business.
....There are questions forming from Sunset's knowledge of this whiskey.
The MLP staff says their thanks Pinkie.
...You know....I do wonder if they could do EQG as a within MLP mini-series - EQG episodes being mixed in with the standard MLP ones - with Equestria's magic as part of the plot.
She also helped you save the school with her transforming car AJ.
Where's John Madden when you need him?
I really hope this is never made canon....not even as a hinted easter egg. .//////.
.....Anyone want this world's Flutters to stare it down?
....His bark is his bite.
....Well that's one way the fandom's described him.....least some of it.
I see two girls who know their mythology.
When motivated.....Fluttershy can do things that'll shock and amaze.....everyone.
No Sunset, the Cockatrice had a magical mutation. ._. Also....
Equestrian Animal Face-Off.....though I don't think you can replicate the stoning abilities of a Cockatrice with Styrofoam or steel.
EG!Flutters....The Stare and Mirror Master.
I don't think there was anything more that could be done with it pumpkin. ...I'm sorry.
To be fair Sunset....if it was just one or two disturbances and not a new one every few minutes.....would've figured it out eventually.
....Maybe it has a thorn in its paw?
Yes....yes it is AJ and we're sorry, but.....do you?
....Wouldn't exactly call Fluttershy being used in this capacity.
Behold.....the power of wubs.
Better been to escape and nothing more...
....That just raises too many questions.
You stay away from Rarity's powdered sugar donut, she's not that kind of lady.
Hi Zecora.
Not to mention, wrong show/franchise.
Dammit Discord, don't you know how important Fluttershy is in matters of creatures?!
Don't quite know how Fluttershy being herself could lead to the imprinting theory....outside of knowing Flutters being her caring, kind self.
....Wonder if the Phoenix will come to staying with the Principal as it grows up.
...I'm not sure what's more surprising.....the willingness to kill......or that they eat meat. .__.
....What a fickle man.
I think you missed something....or rather someone.
Ben Dover is an adult.
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All comedy out of the way.....I liked it. Comedy.....character development.....good story.
Convicted serial anal rapist Ben Dover then said, "I am an adult."
..*rolls with laughter*
okay, NOW THAT was Awesome. the Ben Dover gag was Great- oh and Iron Will? he IS an adult. as are you. i liked everyone in this. definately nice to see Zecora about as well.
Flutters with a baby phoenix. EEEEDAWWWW,
So this turducken wasn't killed for a Thanksgiving Prize? (kudos if you get that reference)
Great as usual... although personally I could have skipped the recurring rapist joke. I'm not saying I didn't laugh. I just think the story would have been strong enough without it.
I can't be the only one who thought of "Your mother was a salamander!"
Shots fired.
Reference.
Reference.
I swear to god, there was another reference in there somewhere. It's too dangerous to dive back in, I might get lost. Great read though.
I feel like this is a reference to that photoshopped bag of mini-donuts(?).
Iron Will dude, you are an adult and a buff minotaur, you can freakin take him.
Interesting gag ref with Kevin.
7575383 I've realised that a lot of bronies watch TFS.
7574266
Thanks!
7576678 Sorry, no. It's just a dumb joke. Not every joke is a reference.
7576986
Huh.
It's just... too great a coincidence, given the sheer number of references this fic is already crammed with.
Still, if you say it wasn't, then I'll take your word for it.