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Monochromatic


Perfect has seven letters and so does meeeeee.

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When five foals asked Princess Twilight Sparkle to please try and paint the moon purple during Nightmare Night, she initially refused. It wasn't until they insisted (and Princess Luna quite basically dared her) that she relented. She only relented, however, because she really thought she wouldn't be able to do it.

Too bad she thought wrong.


A very silly story that started as a prompt that got way, way, way out of hand.

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Mono not getting shippy at all? Madness!

Good story, hun. It was fun to read. :heart:

That was good, I don't see why you had reservations about it :twilightsmile: Bravo.

Typos
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Dusk’s idea turned to be out unfeasible,
turned out to be unfeasible,*
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"Do one of you care to explain?"
Would* (not Do)

Good story, pretty funny, I gave it a like.

“There! Happy?! I voted for Rarity as my favorite color! I mean, pony! I mean, fashionable white as my favorite pon— I mean… Oh, nevermind… Just take it.”

Still managed to sneak in a little shipping anyway, I see :rainbowkiss:

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But of course. I have a reputation as 100% raritwi trash to maintain. :trollestia:

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Ah, thank you!! I've corrected them :twilightblush: And I'm glad you liked it and thank you for the like!

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omg thanks! I'm glad you liked it aaaah :twilightsmile:

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ehehe thank you!

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It was torture, I tell you. Torture!

And thank youuuu<33333

Great as always amiga. Though I do have one issue... Rarity doesn't kill. She leaves you alive to tell the story and let the fear of her spread. All fear the fashion horse!

Interesting story :derpytongue2

Though I must ask what was Luna's punishment on this deal? I mean she practically gave Twilight incentive and permission to do the painting in the first place. seems a bit unfair Twilight painted the moon all by herself :raritydespair:

Otherwise, fun to read XP

But the moon has no atmosphere. It would freeze dry immediately.

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That's why I'm using the canon of the official comics! There's atmosphere in the moon when the Mane6 travel to it in the Nightmare Rarity arc.

and even then, let's pretend there is because of cartoon logic

The MOON!

Also, who the buck thought that it is a good idea to paint the moon purple? Majora shalt rain down the moon from the heavens!

And then the economy crashed due to lack of white paint.

I loved it. I lost it on Star Furl the Beardy. Hahaha!

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Quick! Somepony get the pony equivalent of Link!

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Oh my god, I still laugh thinking about that :rainbowlaugh:

I always wished to sleep under a green Moon and purple stars

I'm not crazy! I'm only a dreamer~
:pinkiecrazy: :pinkiecrazy: :pinkiecrazy:



PS: I keep imagining Luna 'shaking off' the painting of the Moon :rainbowlaugh:

Yay! Fun read thanks for sharing!

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How did you even think of that?

Quite a fun little story here. Most enjoyable.

Featured, second place as I write this. Deserves it!

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Ah, thank you!! I'm really glad you liked it!

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I don't remember, I'm afraid D:

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Thank you for reading!

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Luna shaking the moon like that is a completely ridiculous mental image, but it makes me laugh a lot pffft

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Well, her punishment is that she's going to have to spend all night and probably the whole next day going to every town in Equestria and calming ponies down :P

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:twilightblush: Thank you, that's very nice of you to say! Really I'm just happy people like it! :pinkiehappy:

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Oh! D: I guess that'll be one of the things I'll keep wondering about for the rest of my life. Oh well. That makes it all the more funny. XD

Oh god Celestia made this awesome

You know Twi's utterly lost it when PINKIE PIE can't get a word in edgewise!

All in all, enjoyable enough. Luna antics coupled with a Level X Twilight freakout and a sleep-deprived Celestia is a winning formula indeed!

You're a pretty good writer, though given your propensity to write shipfics, I think I'll just be on my way. :twilightblush:
Not my thing, sorry.

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Thank you!

And that's perfectly alright. I know shipping is not everyone's cup of tea (especially when it's such an unpopular ship as raritwi is), but I appreciate your comment! It means a lot that you even took the time to read it, and I'm glad you liked it!

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:trollestia:

Cool story so funny :rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh: I give it 10 out of 10 :heart::pinkiesmile::twilightsmile:

You know what? I can honestly see this being an episode of the show. And Luna... I don't even:

Luna blinked at her a few times before her eyes went wide as the moon itself. "He WHAT?!" She unceremoniously dropped Twilight to the floor and rushed over to Spike, taking him in her hooves and magiking his mouth open. "Bring it back! Cease the fiery envoy! Your Princess orders you to bring that newspaper back!"

The lunar surface is mostly dust!

What's all this nonsense about repainting it? Can't they just scrape off the top layer and be done with it? Good gravy, they're all idiots! I'm a better princess than all of them combined, and I don't even have a tiara! Did you all hear that?

I don't even have a tiara and I'm a better princess!

Enough of this! Phyco for Princess!

Stupid question, but why didn't Twilight just put ANOTHER coat of paint over the purple one? At least it would have made the moon LESS purple, and calmed down everyone everywhere. :facehoof:

Seems like your first attempt at a Slice of Life/Romance fic was a total success!!

Oh my... :rainbowlaugh:

I really enjoyed this one. The characterizations of Lulu and 'Tia were, dare I say it, quite magical. :trollestia:

Twilights *cough* "minor" panic attack fit her perfectly, too. Pinkie was sufficiently Pinkie enough in my opiniom, and Spike didn't deviate too far either.

All in all, this read almost like a script for an actual episode. I think that's a good thing. :raritywink:

5531415 had to wait for it to dry.

I guess the moon's now... monochromatic. :rainbowwild:

"Miss Rarity made that costume for her, and it’s very pretty,” she added.

Teacher's pet. :rainbowlaugh:

whispering “Princess Twilight is the best princess” for the entire hallway — and Twilight — to hear, only for Diamond Dusk to whisper back that “gee, isn’t somepony a princess’ pet”.

:twilightsmile:

But not just that, she’ll take my wings away too!

"Why do they call it a hacksaw? :pinkiecrazy:"

"Which is exactly why you won't be using the spell,"

Ooooops. :twilightoops: :trollestia:

Wow congrats on the story. You've written something very well that is outside your normal comfort zone of Twilight and Rarity shipping. There's enough depth here that I could see something like this as an episode of the show. The little bit about Rarity being Twilight's favorite pony was pretty cute as well.

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Ah, thank you!!! That's a really big compliment!

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Quick! Someone get Phyco some wings, a horn, a crown and a Phyco scepter at once!

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Ah, thank you! Glad you liked it!

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Yeah hahaha I'm really glad people are liking it! :twilightsmile:

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Ah, thank you! That means a lot hahaha This was the first time I've written for all those characters extensively (save for Twilight), so it means a lot that you say that because at least I did a pretty decent job ahahah I'm glad you liked it and thank you for your nice comment!

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Oh my god.

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:trollestia:

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Ah, thank you, Glint! It means a lot, and I'm especially coming from you've considering you've seen my progress since my first fic, I think. D'awww.

But yes, I was honestly a little bit worried about posting this because it's so out of my comfort zone, but I think it's important I do these kind of stories once in a while? I really wanted to try and see how I'd manage in unfamiliar territory, so I got rid of my two safe things which where shipping and Rarity. I'm glad I managed to pull it off.

:rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh:
Twilight being adorkable? check.
Twilight panicking and blowing things all out of proportion? check.
Twilight going for a ridiculously convoluted solution? check.

You are the Element of Magic, are you not?”

Sorry Luna, you're addressing the wrong pony

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Yep I though the same thing. But apparently you need to wait for the first coat to dry before applying a second. I dunno.

Twilight squinted her eyes, reading aloud. “‘Fashionable white’? ‘Party pink’, ‘dashing blue’, ‘honest orange’, ‘shy yellow’, and ‘nerdy purple’? Spike, these seem oddly familiar. Also, Rarity’s coat is light grey, not white. Shining Armor’s coat is white, for exam— ”

I nearly died laughing here. Funniest pa-

“Give me that!” Luna quickly took the newspaper away from Twilight and looked at the poll results. “Hah! Fashionable white has seventy-seven votes! Surely the highest numb— eighty four?!” she screeched. “Eighty-four ponies want my moon to be pink?!”

Ok, this is the best line in the whole-

“Ooooh!” gasped Pinkie, clapping her hooves with excitement. “I’m winning! I’m winning! What’s my prize? Is it a heater for when we get banished to the moon?”

... Never mind.

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Because Twilight had to wait for the paint to dry before casting the spell again, and it would take 5 nights for the moon to dry.

Man, this is bullpucky, clearly the moon should have been left Party Pink, and only rigged voting spoiled the results!

New nightmare night tradition: Twilight Sparkle paints the moon!

Wait, isn't the moon really cold? Like, near instant freezing cold? That paint should've been frozen solid and simply flaked off, right? I mean, I never read the comics so I have no idea what it was like on the moon so I could be wrong.

5533565 They were able to walk around on it just fine with no notable environmental concerns. It was just a barren wasteland inhabited by evil mist-like shadow creatures.

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It technically is, but in the comics the moon is literally treated as if it was Earth (or the planet where they live in) with atmosphere and all that.

5533594 Huh, weird. I guess I need to get around to reading those comics.

Have you ever considered submitting this story to Equestria Daily? You can find out how to do so here.

What did Rarity do to twilight?

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Oh man, I'm not sure. I don't think it would make the cut hahaha but it means a lot thay you think I should submit it c:

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It was just a barren wasteland inhabited by evil mist-like shadow creatures.

Ah, central New Jersey.

:trollestia:

5533784 Sounds more like Seattle on a good day.

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