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Life's hard when you're small, especially if you're a breezie. The ponies keep trying to knock down your tree-home, steal all your fruit, and now they're about to bring back winter and doom your hive to a frozen fate.
Misty has had enough. She's going to leave her tree, stop the Summer Shutdown, and save the world.
After all, someone's got to do it.
Written for Equestria Daily's Outside Insight Summer Fanfic Contest
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This . . .
This here is my pick for winner of the contest. I don't even need to read this thing to know it's going to be good.
Interesting and possibly relevant fact:
Many varieties of trees need to experience a certain amount of winter before they start acting like it's spring and making the blossoms that will become fruits.
Probably the best Breezie story I've seen so far.
Misty seems to be unaware of a green one living in the house... since I don't see her tagged, I'm guessing she won't be relevant, though.
It's always nice to see a world so cleverly realised as this. The show breezies gave the impression of much longer lives, but it's always fun seeing creatures that measure their lives in hours and days. It feels rather like Pratchett's Nomes. Only more fluttery.
I want to know how the breezies interact with bugs. Do the breezies 'milk' aphids like how ants do? Are they omnivorous and eat any types bugs? Does their super secret R&D department realize the potential of using spiders as biological war machines against the evil ponies?
Damn this is an amazing story!
Please don't make us wait too long for ch3
This story is amazing!!!
But, the breezies actually have a place where they live in peace. And they aren't enemies with the ponies, if anything, they need them. They help them. But, please write more.I enjoy this story allot!
4852407 He'd better boogie. The contest turns into a pumpkin in about 25.5 hours.
Interesting.
Has the familiar feel of The Littles / The Borrowers.
I like it.
This is so much better than the draft I saw hours ago with the new half.
I hope Misty and the rest of the breezies get saved in the end.
Really. It's all so sad now.
Moar pls.
Man, I am loving this. It's been a while since I've been this invested in a new pony fic.
Interesting. It's all about perspective. I suppose that the Red Destroyer is supposed to be Big Mac?
BREEZY?!
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Ee-yup!
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Yes, chapter 3 has to come tonight if I want to enter the competition with this. Write or die, Blueshift! Write or die!
4852781 Yeah, the Borrowers books were a massive influence on me when I was little.
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...And Pratchett's Nomes books. I have them at home signed somewhere, I think!
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The thing about being so small is that the world is a huge and terrifying place. They just don't know about any other breezies as they've been so focused on living and hiding in their tree. I will go into that more in the last part, don't worry!
4853303 Clearly it's a metaphor for the International Chinese Communist Conspiracy.
Awesome opening sentence.
This is wonderful! The vastness and the danger of the big world for the tiny breezies comes through very well; for Misty, the Sweet Apple Acres is just as terrifying and strange as the Everfree Forest would be to the ponies, if not more. I'm eagerly awaiting more!
"We, who are strong, fly free. We who are not, will return to the stars and light the way for our children.”
This line had some special impact on me. Don't know why exactly but it is something special just as the rest of this wonderful story. I can easily understand their point of view, how big and terryfying this place must be and the hardships they have to endure. This story is unique and special and you did a wonderful job writing it.
So, Misty's dad is Prometheus?
Wow, that breezie getting smashed touched me more than some sad stories do.
Awesome story! Kinda reminds me of that Skillet song.
Extra points for hilarity if that was Fluttershy.
Big Mac, the most unexpected violent birthday party crasher ever. I imagine he would be horrified were he to ever learn of what's been happening.
This is both sad and strangely hilarious. These guys really need to find a safer apple tree to live in.
It's not a comedy, but the scenario, the breezies' misunderstanding, and their lack of knowledge make it feel like it is. They're almost as ridiculous as Spike's behavior in that episode.
My Little Pony: Accidental Genocide is Tragic.
Is that a john wilkes boothe referen
There's some really nice pathos in here. Can't wait to see the development!
Easily my favorite contest entry so far. Well done.
This is brilliant, and deserves its place on the front page! Bravo!
You actually made me care about a Breezie... wow. Let me be the first to tell you that that was no small feat, I hate them. You also have me interested in a story with environmental themes... which I also find annoying, but not hate-able.
Genius. The Apples as these terrifying god-monsters is an idea I probably never would've thought of. But to the smaller creatures living in their trees, that's exactly what they'd be. It's hilarious, yet managed to turn fairly grim and 'scary' once the 'attack' started. Will definitely keep reading.
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So basically like Chrysalids on a smaller scale?
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Yessssssss.
You have NO idea how much I've waited for someone to do a Borrowers style story with these guys in it. And the way you do it is so believable, it just pulls you right in.
Please tell me there's going to be more than just the three chapters. You really have something incredible on your hands here.
Manly tears were nearly shed. Nicely done, sir. Thumbs-upped and Tracked.
What about Granny Smith?
4855823 I guess she isn't involved in Applebucking, so they probably wouldn't have seen her around much. Especially not anywhere near their World Tree.
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I imagine the Breezies wouldn't have much contact with Granny Smith, as her hip keeps her from doing much Applebucking.
This story is adorable and awesome, and must continue after the contest. Do it for the breezies! Please?
Oh, now this is goooood.
Love the setup, love the execution. Haven't seen that many "outside/in" contest stories yet, though most I saw dealt with either changelings or griffons. A breezie story, that is new.
Looking forward to seeing Misty and Applebloom interact. Probably'll be quite surprised to find a breezie in their house, thinking she got left behind on the breezie migration.
Heh, it might be interesting if Twilight used her "turn ponies into Breezies" spell on the apple family. Possibly on Applebloom's excited insistence.
. . .
Err, on second thought... maybe that would be unwise.
I wonder though - how will the breezies react when they learn that their "war" was meaningless? That their "sworn enemy" didn't even know they were there, and that many hardships could've been avoided otherwise?
Sometimes it's easier to just hate. It's less complicated.
I expect them to follow Sea-Breeze into "The Promised Land" the next time he comes around.
Hmm... come to think of it, what is that "pollen" the other breezies collect for, anyway? It must be extremely important, why else would they risk their life traveling across Equestria - if even traveling across a single Apple Orachard is already considered suicide?
Maybe it's for making medicine or something. *shrug*
Life-prolonging medication, I hope, "50 weeks" is a bit short of a lifespan.
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Wait wait wait, please don't tell me the contest is forcing you to finish the story off in <arbitrary amount of time>.
This idea is amazing, I want to see it fully realized, not just a three-chapter story.
...Can we maybe get a "sequel" afterwards? (aka chapter 4 and beyond)
Please please please please please plese please please please, with a whole sugar-cube on top?
4855481 No idea what those are, but probably. Although a better real life example would be ants. Because these breezies are basically the exact same thing as thousands of species of ants, but less efficient.
Oh man, the goosebumps I am getting from the "We lift ourselves" line.
Apple Bloom confirmed for unkillable pony, for a given value of unkillable.
What's a death wheel?
Assuming Apple Bloom doesn't try for a CMC-only solution to the Breezie problem, Misty getting captured may be the best thing that ever happened to them. She may yet get to be the hero she so damn so desperately wanted to be.
On the other hand, Sweetie, Scootaloo, and Apple Bloom by themselves? Burned down Great Tree and accidental genocide.
Even worse, show and tell! The horror!
Ahh, there we go, Twilight.
Ehh, everything is relative.
See? Relativity in action.
Poor Mac.
Rise! RISE!
Well, I'm sad that it's over and would like to see more of this concept, but I enjoyed it while it lasted!
That's it? Are you serious?
:l I felt this could be expanded upon very easily. Got all this material and just....blah.
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Or a lawnmower.