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Pearple Prose


"A cheeky idiot tweedling around the moors." ~ Aragon || Avatar by Aragon and Mousse

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On the Night Mare's Night, Archdruid Twilight Sparkle prays to her goddess, and, for the first time, her goddess answers.

Unfortunately, matters are never quite that simple when one is dealing with a being of power beyond mortal comprehension.


Entry for the Second TwiLuna Contest

Thanks to Obselescence for his help.

Chapters (1)
Comments ( 128 )

Spoilers: Twilight and Luna become funky dance-cop partners and work to take down Drug Mogul Celestia, who's sporting the mad afro of crime.

10/10 totally tubular.

I'm about half way through, but this is lovely.

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I'd totally read that.

~Skeeter The Lurker

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Well, then, read this story. Because this story is that, as I have said.

Brilliant work, man.

Very interesting take on the sister worshiping.

LOVE the ending, man. I think you got this in the bag, honestly.

~Skeeter The Lurker

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Way ahead of you, mate.

~Skeeter The Lurker

I'd love to see this AU explored a little more.

This story deserves first place. It was amazing to read!

4561889 We all would.

~Crystalline Electrostatic~

Quite the enjoyable read.

That was quite an different interesting read, and a different, interesting take on the nature of Luna. With Twilight being the Archdruid, would I be correct in assuming then, that Celestia and Luna would be Tuatha DĂ© Danann? Roughly approximated, of course.

Brighid and The Morrigan are the closest I can think of in terms of personality and realms of influence.

I enjoyed it quite a lot! Good luck in the contest!

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Obs, we have spoiler tags. Use them next time you drop the plot for the sequel, mmkay?

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I'm already yelling at Pear to get started on the epic multi-part clop sequel. He's due to deliver the first draft on my desk tomorrow morning.

Feature box, incoming!

Wow. I have no words.
Faved

A concept I would love to see expanded upon. It is truly fascinating, one that I have yet to see done.

This is very interesting, I love how this could be a possible scenario where Celestia and Luna chose to be revered as Goddesses that sip above, rather than Princesses who sit among. I wouldn't be surprised either if Luna never became Nightmare Moon that Twilight would've become her student, or maybe she might worship and be archdruid to both, but since this is a Twiluna story she's Luna's and Luna's alone.

Good story, definitely a green thumb.

I love it!!! There are no words for how much I love it! :heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart:

4561836 .....Your avatar:rainbowderp:...IT'S AWESOME!!!:pinkiehappy: Where did you get it.
Is that a Vampony Twilight or Dark Twilight pic. Sorry about the random comment but I just have to know. "Sniff" please:fluttercry:
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Well it was well written, but I've always had somewhat of a distaste for the whole Luna and Celestia being puppet masters of fate type figures, seeing the ponies as mere mortals. It just doesn't tickle me right. Anyhow, like I said, well written story, thumbs up! :)

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Ave, Dea Noctis!

Tu loquerisne Latin? Valde bona fabula, ac ego similis opertorium art. Is est Ridiculam , sed ego operantes in a fabulam nomen.

"Dea Solis." Non kidding Im ego opus in eam nunc. :twilightsmile:

Wait, that's it?! NO! I want more!

Good gooly miss molly..

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The site would crash from the awesome if that were to be written.

Ya ever read a story that you wish you could up-vote more than once? Yea. This.

I don't know what it is about this story, but...

Everything just felt off. It's a weird premise with almost nothing explained. Clearly there are differences between this universe and canon, but they're never explored.

The TwiLuna itself is... plausible, I guess, and the idea is interesting, but it felt forced throughout the piece, and not really compelling.

I'll forego my downvote because the piece works, I guess, but...

Nice, powerful "concept" piece! Seems that Twilight specializes in friendship in this universe, too.

4562802 "Non kidding..." Vere?

It's possible that I just hate the "princesses are gods" trope, I guess. :unsuresweetie:

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Not going to lie, I was slightly disappointed when the story wasn't what you described. I'd read that story any day.

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I have to agree with you there. I just can't get into the fact that the Princess's are gods here.

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I think the reason for that might be because I kept a really tight hold of the reins in regards to exposition and exploring the universe - normally when I write this sort of thing, it all sort of sprawls out and I never finish it.

Unfortunately this story didn’t turn out as well as I envisioned. I can’t quite put my finger on why I'm unhappy with it either.

Oh well. This story in itself was just kind of... something I felt like writing. I didn’t really expect it to get featured or anything.

Very interesting. That moment of realization was rather perfect, I think. Great story. :twilightsmile:

That was great. But, maybe - too short? Don't you want to continue this? :twilightsmile:
P.S. Sorry for my bad English.

Pear, I swear to God, if you take my stupid comedy starring Celestia and Luna being stupid out of the first place of the box with a story involving Twilight Sparkle romancing one of the princesses again, I will hunt you.

Anyway, cool story, although I feel it's far too short. The idea is cool, and the concept has potential, but it being just 4k words is not enough. We get to take a peek at the story, and I liked it, but damn this could be incredibly awesome as a multiparter. As it is now, it feels rushed.

I would really advice expanding this later, dude.

I hope we see more from this universe. I am currently writing a story with themes of worship in it. It's called Children of the Gods. It involves the heirs of a long-dead pantheon including celestia, luna and cadence.

4563728 it's that they have the power to at least create that illusion, even to themselves.

4563728 Me too, I just don't know why so many people think of the princesses as gods...
It kinda ruins the tension for me whenever I read something like this. :trixieshiftright:

Very nicely done, PP! Deserving of its Feature Box stint.

The Druidic elements could be played up a little more, perhaps; not to an overwhelming degree, just a detail here and there. I wasn't sure how much time passed after the break before the scene with Celestia. On first read, I thought they hooked up that very same night! On second read it seems like some time had gone by, that they were in a (slightly) later stage in their relationship, but not sure exactly where / when. I think the Trixie bit could be either done away with or played up. As it is, it's namedropping but even given the AU tag it doesn't feel like TGAP Trixie, so it could really have been any pony (even an OC). I realize she's there as a bit of Chekhov's Fridge Logic for the "cold and distant not-quite-villain just needs a hug and a friend" theme, but I thought that theme could have used more exploration if she stays in as Trixie. There was a certain Obs-like quality to the first third of the piece, too. Not that that's bad, it's just a feeling.

Overall quite nice. Thumbs up!

No, there nothing that she could do to a being like that.

Missed a "was".

4563754 I was thinking that as well.

I know that dea noctis means goddess of the night, but I can't remember what tenebra means. Something to do with work?:applejackunsure:

Love the use of Latin by the way.

I suspect something like this happened in the distant past, with some loving mortal literally bringing the sisters down to earth. In any case, a very sweet AU story, and a delicious bit of Twiluna. Thank you for it. :twilightsmile:

My, I do hope this will come to have more chapters or a sequel! This is one of the best Twiluna stories I have read! Honestly, I a full time supporter of TwixLuna and NightxLight (Nightmare MoonxTwilight). Twilestia is good, but not as good as the other two. At least, not in my book.

4565574 I thought tenebra meant Darkness?

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