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What do we truly fear in death? Can an ageless alicorn keep a promise to her beloved?

Can she remember who Rainbow Dash was?

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That was good. The two are adorable together, and the way it works over eons flowed just so.

I found it an interesting decision that you had her have a mortal-tier memory despite everything else being so powerful; it obviously was required, but it seemed to color things somewhat.

Beautiful stuff, Cloud.

Gosh it's dusty in here... :pinkiesad2:

Great job!

i still choose to believe that the ponies are reincarnated every few generations or so and only beings like celestia ever noticed it, like clover the clever is twilight and part of the fun is that celestia got to be with her ancient friend as she goes through life once more

touching story though

No one truly dies,

so long as they are remembered.

Whoa damn. I really liked this. :3

Heart tugging goodness.

Loved the evolution of Twi over the ages.

The story overall is good, although I do not ship these two, I can see it work.
The second part felt a bit rushed at times though. I think a bit more ... time ... would have put things in a better perspective. And I would have left out the third, although I really like how that part ended.

Though, personally, I wouldn't have thought that Twilight would forget her love in the first place, even if there were a few thousand years inbetween.

Still, I like it.

"I know a thousand years is a long time, so I decided to give you something to remember me by."

Perfect time to play the song 'A thousand years' by Christina Perri.

This was a very heartbreaking and heartwarming story. Way to start a year, I love it! :pinkiesad2:

Wow that was beyond amazing. A bit sad but overall just amazing :pinkiesad2:

This is the most evocative, and beautiful, story of yours that I've read. Thank you for revisiting it, and sharing it.

This story sums up the tragedy of Twilycorn and why it triggers my autism so.

Imagine Shakespeare, on his deathbed, is offered immortality, with no strings attached. He would watch the rise of his work, it's towering popularity, and it's eventual fall. He would stand, unchanging, in a fickle society. Empires would rise and fall, the hopes and dreams of millions, and it would be like the buzzing of oh so many wasps.

Now, imagine aliens invade earth and you form a JRPG party with your neighbors, acquire godlike powers, and defend earth. Then you are told you are the most special person ever and granted immortality. But, unlike Shakespeare, you are not given the choice. What happens next?

The story is obviously based on an immortal with an imperfect memory. To live an almost incalculable amount of time and remember virtually nothing but the knowledge of what is missing; to have nothing but the knowledge of the gaps.

Yet, on the other side of the coin is just as terrible a fate: an immortal memory; to truly remember everything. It is a property of life to forget, and to forget is to heal. Imagine all the sorrows, forever fresh in mind. The triumphs too, but in time they will be drowned by the cacophony of regret.

Mortals were not meant to drink from the fountain of youth. That way lies insanity. Mortality is a blessing and a curse, but to live, one cannot have it any other way.

Besides my personal vendetta, the story is written well, so props for that. A shade of blue made me feel.

Stealing your headcanon, thanks fam.

Man, what a way to start the new year.

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Have a moustache! :moustache:

Oh man, that hurt my soul. I loved it.

Seven moustaches for this story: :moustache: :moustache: :moustache: :moustache: :moustache: :moustache: :moustache:

This was good. You got a good mix of maturity, solemnity and typically Rainbow brashness down there. :rainbowdetermined2:

putting this in my sad shelf cause tears

Well done on this. I am not much into TwiDash but this was very well done. Although short it has the right snippets of her life to get the feel of agelessness. :twilightsmile:


The Feels... they hurt... :fluttercry:

So, this piece has some large flaws, mostly in terms of character. Dash would not be inclined to wax poetic to this extent, nor would Twilight, the Princess of Friendship, completely forget the most important pony in her life so easily. But the feels you evoked were real as all hell anyway, so have a like.

7838192 I assumed Dash was older than canon. Plus, 3,000 years is a long time. People today forget things after maybe 10, and even more at 80.

Awesome work, great job. :pinkiesad2::heart:

Absolutely. Absolutely beautiful. :fluttercry: I wish this had been the first story for me to read this year.

I don't ship TwiDash (I ship PinkieDash)

but my god the damn feels.....:raritycry::raritycry::raritycry:

"Well, then... you'll have lots to choose from! Seriously though, the thought of you being alone, for thousands of years... it's terrifying to me. Promise me you'll never do that to yourself, Twilight," pleaded Rainbow Dash. "Ponies aren't meant to be alone. You deserve better than that."

Shame we're never told if she followed up on that promise.

Oh no it's raining.

... Wow, just Wow

First Fanfic that made me cry :,,)

Fantastic! :twilightsmile:
Or so I thought at first.:facehoof:

After one takes sometime to think things through, they can find that it would be, rather, natural for Twilight to forget. Well during the first few thousand years, or the first time skip. Which after that, when she finds the feather again, it would be natural for her to remember. Yes, one would forget the death of, even, their lover after sometime has gone by.

One thing that I really appreciated about this was Twilight's memory. she didn't start as an Immortal, and it only makes sense that her, mortal, memories would fade with enough time; without reminders that is. Giving Twilight an Immortal's memory at the start would have taken away from the story.

Anyway, I don't want to rattle on, so my final thoughts.:twilightsheepish:
This was one of the best stories I've read this year, given it isn't far into the year making this statement not carry much weight. But, it was sad, with a hint of dark. And I would say that this tackled the scenario quite well. No, really well!:twilightsmile:

15% of all pegasi currently alive are related to Commander Hurricane

Oh damn, Hurricane, you've been busy. :trollestia:

... the second part of this story is like a freight-train of feels.

That was damn ed beautiful... Well done! Well done indeed!

Not the first to make me cry. Not the last. But one of many. (I confess, I had trouble getting into the first half...but...the rest owns it.)

Fear me, for I have become Twilight, friendshipper of worlds.


Your fic reminded me so much of this song from FFX2

I've read a few sad fics before but I don't believe any of them have hit me this hard before. The emotion and very idea of it all just hits you right at the beginning, I didn't cry (I never do) but I did feel it in my chest which my own way of experiencing sadness. Any ways this was an amazing fic write more and never let that spark go out my friend.

You can't actually "forget" something that you remember fondly. Not unless you reach the maximum number of memory synapses in your brain. Even then there should easily be records written by those that experience this "memory overload".

That was one of the most touching stories I've read in many a moon! Beautiful!

Sees this...
Feels this.

That moment when you're not even a Twidash shipper and instantly read through a story as soon as you see the summary.

Very beautiful story!

7841207 I enjoyed reading this comment.

I'm not usually a fan of shipping in any fashion, but this... this wad beautiful and heart-wrenching at the same time. I love it.

I had had to forcefully hold back my tears cuz im in school:rainbowlaugh:

Well fuck you too, Cloudy, now I'm crying at work :raritycry:

Idk how many sad/ sad-beautiful/ sad-sad fanfics I've read these past 2 weeks, but this one is DEFINITELY a favorite. :twilightsmile:

I've just had the worst idea ever - reading this while listening to Stay and Bound With Time (both by 4everfreebrony).
The feels :raritycry:

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