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Twilight-the-Pony


If I had a cent for every headdesk... I'd still be poor.

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Rainbow Dash. Best flyer in Equestria, 20% cooler and the most awesome mare in Ponyville.

...But none of those traits can win over the heart of a local librarian...

This is one of the hardest challenges she faced so far...

Thanks to the amazing Cynical for the edits.

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Comments ( 69 )

I love a good TwiDash story. Great job! I look forward to reading more of your stories in the future. Keep up the great writing!

Excellent story!

*looks over at a copy of ‘Finding Your Balance’ that is laying there silently on the floor. I got my eye on you! :twilightangry2:

So I enjoyed this story, but it is Twidash so that was pretty much a given.

I do have to wonder about Rainbow Dash's characterization in this one however. I mean, I might have missed something, but there's a big jump from Daring Do to Astrophysics. The fact that she not only has developed an interest in this stuff, but understands it to the point that she can solve a problem that took Twilight a long time to solve, seems ooc and not very well explained. At the beginning I figured she was just checking out the books to try and impress Twilight.

I mean, basically what just happened was Rainbow Dash did in a matter of weeks/months what Twilight and others have spent years of their lives studying.

A minor gripe really, still enjoyed the story, so thanks for that :pinkiehappy:

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It's in my headcannon that Rainbow is more or less a genius when it comes to flight mechanics, and by extension, many areas of math. She just never shows it because eggheaded-ness isn't in her definition of cool. :rainbowwild:

what can i say. i must bow to a superior Twidasher :ajsleepy:

2468104 What? No... No... Just... Erm... *hides*

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In the end of this story Twilight asked Dash how she managed to answer a question that even bugs her. To which Dash replies: “Those weren’t challenges at all, those were just small distractions".
She never really answered Twilight's question. You hiding something Dashie?

LunaOntheMoon i think your over thinking it.

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Well, far be it for me to argue with someone's headcannon :D I can see what you mean, though I personally always attributed Dash's flight abilities to talent and tenaciousness, rather than study. It all works though.

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Dear lord... what if Dash has been replaced by a changeling?! Or... What if all this time, she was secretly part of Celestia's secret service, keeping tabs on the elements of harmony in case they ever tried to stage a coup? Or... Maybe Dash attended Iron Will's new "Matter advanced mathematics in a week" seminar?

It was ok i guess but good job you should make a sequel

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And that right there is the dawn of a new wave of fanfiction.

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@FlibberFlerber
I'm using my 'Twilight Sparkle brain'. Over thinking does not exist. :twilightblush:

XD ok think what you must

Eww, TwiDash... FLUTTERDASH 4 LYEF

But the writing is decent. Not bad

Marvelous story :twilightsmile::rainbowkiss:

Kinda fast paced, but still cute. Of course I love anything TwiDash related but this is really good.

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I do have to wonder about Rainbow Dash's characterization in this one however. I mean, I might have missed something, but there's a big jump from Daring Do to Astrophysics.

I am well aware of the difference between the two. I wanted to portray Rainbow as rather than being super-smart like Twilight, being driven by self-imposed challenge.

Challenges can produce insanely creative thinking. I've left open-ended interpretation of how Dash managed to get the answer that she was after for a reason.

Nice take on Rainbow and Twilight. I can totally see her learning to read harder and harder books, if not to impress Twilight, but for herself.

Cute and fun. This fic is gooooood.

~Skeeter The Lurker

Cute story and a fun read. Well done!

Like others, the only issue I have is the Astrophysics, and at that level is more of a 3rd level university (maybe even Masters/4th level) module, I literally just took it this semester. Yes, it isn't very hard really, but a 'personal challenge' taken up by someone who is typically described as the athlete (shuns reading due to 'cool factor') seems highly unlikely.
Apart from that though, it was rather good, if you had done any quantum I probably would have stopped reading, done enough of that this year, don't need to read about it when I'm relaxing at home.
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2472837 My other choice was genetics, since that's my kink :twilightsmile:

But, like I've said. People and ponies do strange things, if they're fueled by motivation :twilightsheepish:

Nice and fluffy.:twilightsmile:

I have visions of Princess Luna (In brainey specs... *takes a moment*) solving the problem for RD to "Helpest her winneth the heart of fair Twilight Sparkle"

2475980 I was kidding but okay, people hate me. :rainbowlaugh: Regardless, the writing quality is quite good, well done.

2476309 Hence why my response was not serious at all. :p

2476433 I'm just saying because I realised my comment had 12 downvotes, never seen anything close to that. Although, I think this could all easily be resolved with a gentlemens' duel.

This was so sappy I think I just turned into a tree :-P

2468415 considering murder:pinkiecrazy:
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You're not worth it (also was joking)
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Your life shall continue:pinkiehappy:

outstanding i love it

Okay, THAT was adorable. Definitely one of my favorite short TwiDash fics, and one of the better shipfics in general I've read lately. <3

There's only one thing to say GEEEEENEUISSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSS

I hate to be that one dissenting person who didn't like it, so I'll start by saying that I did, in fact, like most of it.

The one problem I had with this is that it feels sort of... rushed, and inexplicable.

How did RD actually do all those things? Did she learn it just to impress Twilight? Did she cheat? Did she have a secret passion for it all along?
I mean, if Twilight had trouble with it, it would take a flippin' savant to read and understand all of that so quickly.

How did that win over Twilight's heart so quickly?

And the resolution felt sort of... sudden.
The things before, with the reading and the challenge and all that, seemed to really be building up slowly to a deeper resolution, but then you have RD just professing her love in her sleep and Twilight accepting it. I feel like this really could have worked, if you'd really built up to it; but the thing is, all that really transpired that even bordered on romantic was RD visiting Twi's library and reading impressive things.

Again, a lot of it was a good tug at the ol' heart strings, but the ending happened so suddenly that it felt meaningless. There was no weight, because there was so little development, and not enough buildup of expectation.

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You have a couple of good points there.

I hate to be that one dissenting person who didn't like it, so I'll start by saying that I did, in fact, like most of it.

That's quite okay. I don't expect everyone to like everything that I do.

The one problem I had with this is that it feels sort of... rushed, and inexplicable.

The story is fluff. It was never meant to be anything more than that. It wasn't supposed to introduce deep character development, personal and external conflicts or intricate plot point.

It is, what it is: fluff. I leave many things open-ended because of that very reason.

I am, however, writing a new story, that'll be a proper story with romance in it, rather than being just focused on fluff.

But, as I've said. You do have valid points.

Great story, I got what you were getting at with Rainbow just seeing the read as a challenge to the bigger goal. I also think that because she does everything fast she knows how to push herself.

Not a bad fic. Writing style is a little strange sometimes, but it's not bad.

“Hah... this looks like a battle zone...

*battlefield?
*war zone?

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Not a bad fic. Writing style is a little strange sometimes, but it's not bad.

It's actually my first story that exceeded 1k words.

“Hah... this looks like a battle zone...
*battlefield?

I went with "war zone" instead. :twilightsmile:

A nice read. Fast paced, and a little wonky, but I liked it.:raritywink:

Wouldn't 1 + the sum of 12/x from x = negative infinity to positive infinity have an undefined number in the sum, unless you're just ignoring how x would eventually equal 0? And if you just say the sum when x =/= 0 wouldn't it equal 1? How does it equal Twilight's face framed by a heart?

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Also, you seem to be missing the point there.

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I am not a nerd. I'm well read.

2678263 now you've missed the point of not only the cover picture but also of my comment.

Dash was really out of character for me but then again she doesn't really seem to be the thinking type.:rainbowlaugh:
Nice read.:twilightsmile:

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Dash was really out of character for me but then again she doesn't really seem to be the thinking type.

This is one of the points that I will argue furiously against...

RD might not be as smart as Twilight; but she does shows high level of intelligence throughout the show, starting with S1E2 with Shadowbolts.
She might be brash at a times, true. Not the thinking type? Hell, no.

2684175 Let me rephrase what I meant then...:applejackunsure:
I know Dash isn't stupid but she just doesn't seem like the kind of pony to figure out complex things that Twilight had a hard time with, even though it was for the sake of romance.:rainbowderp:
The idea and gesture did make the point of your story but still.:twilightsmile:
Oh and moral choices can be made with little thinking, its all about personal points of views I feel.:eeyup:
If there is a pony with scary intelligence it would be Pinkie Pie.:pinkiecrazy:

I'm gonna be frank with you people. This story has flaws. Some of the things in it were hard to understand, like Rainbow Dash understanding Physics. However, this is your fan fiction, and the whole point of fan fiction is to make the story you want to make. That's the beauty of fan fiction. Telling your own story with something that already exists.

I loved this story. And I don't think that it will ever become cannon that Twilight or Rainbow Dash are into mares, but I don't care. I'm on this site to find stories that I like. And this is one of those many stories.

Pony on.:twilightsmile:

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