• Member Since 24th Feb, 2013
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Twilight-the-Pony


If I had a cent for every headdesk... I'd still be poor.

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Applejack agreed to leave Rarity for a single day, since Rarity needs to prepare a new fashion line. But in silence, she loses her inspiration.


This story is for a friend of mine. She's silly, awesome and bestinastes (Shut up. It's a word.) all around.
Also, this story is a side story to Home is Where the Heart Lies. Her universe and her OC.

Art here

Chapters (1)
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Comments ( 8 )

I don't understand the downvotes? This was a cute story.

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Kneejerk reactions. Can't be helped.

~Twi

MY HEART~ :heart: HOW COULD YOU

asdfghjkl you do know that this definitely means war, don't you? :trixieshiftleft:

The most puzzling thing about this story is how long it seemed despite the word-count. Normally, I'd applaud this, but as it stands, the execution could've been better. Grammatically sound and well-paced? Yes. Cute and likeable? Of course. Lacking in some CRUCIAL backstory? Eeyup.

The story itself was crisp for the way it was written: smooth, direct, and calming. And the little tidbit about this 'Sonya Apple' was a nice touch. But, really, I'd have liked a broader backstory about Rarity and Applejack's union other than the dreaded and horribly overused 'Slumber Party'. Don't get me wrong, the story was okay for what it tried to do, but a layer or two of exposition would have stood this out, I think, and make the last four words resonate with heart-imploding finality.

All the same, this story has a like from this guy.

Craine...

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But, really, I'd have liked a broader backstory about Rarity and Applejack's union other than the dreaded and horribly overused 'Slumber Party'.

That was just a moment of stupid. It is a side story to this story, and, of course, that's not how it happens there. I've modified it here, but there's always bigger background story to be read.

make the last four words resonate with heart-imploding finality.

Also done.

~Twi

This is gonna be so cuuute! By the way, every time I read something you wrote, I imagine your voice as being Twilight's from the Mentally Advanced Series.

D'awww. Cute little RariJack slice of life here. Have another fave. :)

An inspiration to love. I wish we all had one. :twilightsmile:

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