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Twilight is stuck in a lengthy diplomatic meeting and can’t spend her time with the other girls during their beach vacation. Her being away causes Rainbow quite some distress – not only because she’s missing her, but also because there is a thing she needs to discuss with Twilight.

So when Twilight starts sending letters, Rainbow is excited. And she decides that she doesn’t care if Twilight is on a tight schedule – Rainbow Dash wouldn’t be Rainbow Dash if she couldn’t come up with a solution!


Written for the Third TwiDash Group Contest.

Cover art credits: Rainbow Dash, scroll, ink and quill, Twilight Sparkle.

Chapters (3)
Comments ( 59 )

Ok, I'll try this "using comments for author's notes".

There are two more chapters to this story. Second chapter will go up Tuesday-ish, third chapter some time between then and Thursday.

C&C welcome.

Um. Have fun? :twilightsheepish:

Particular loving how the narrative slip's into Rainbow's mannerisms. Writing quality looks splendid. Applejack is really being her coy, damnably frustratingly perceptive self :ajsmug: and poor Dash is slowly being driven up the walls. Characterization is done nicely across the board.

A fun story :twilightsmile:

So, tell me again... What do I do to give you more than one thumb up?
:scootangel::rainbowkiss:

Is it Tuesday yet?? :heart:

Me gusta, MOAR :yay:

A look at the premise and the biased character tags, and I was very prepared to downvote. Had to read it first, of course. [FYI, I didn't downvote, but failing to mention this earlier is probably why my comment was. :derpyderp1:]

It's a very nice piece of work so far. I probably won't be following it, but I definitely enjoyed this chapter. :twilightsmile: Dash herself, on the other hand, kinda reflects the mentality I was worried about.

Today we spent the whole day at the beach. Rarity and Fluttershy were sunbathing the whole time, and Pinkie dug a beach cave. I totally beat Applejack at swimming, which was awesome.

Missed one of yer friends there, Dashie. I wonder how she can think of a relationship with Twilight when she can't even be bothered to acknowledge the most familiar and dedicated person in Twilight's life.

Our hotel is nice. Rarity is sharing a room with Fluttershy, and AJ is with Pinkie Pie, so I got the room all to myself.

Missed him again. Why didn't Rarity catch that when she proofread it? And what room is Spike in? Lastly, wouldn't he have been the last one to sign their letter, not Fluttershy?

Cute and funny so far, I'm liking it. You have everybody nailed down to a tee, especially Applejack and Rainbow. I really enjoyed how you wrote their exchanges.

Curious to see what you have in store for the rest of this.

Good luck in the contest! :twilightsmile:

Good god man, this is almost exactly like my life right now minus the letters. One overly annoying person digging for info, another that already knows it and the rest oblivious to the world. Definatelly a good read so far though so I'll keep my eye on it.

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Or, you could use the author's note function that is provided.

And so you come out again with a story for this contest. Man, I loved your last one. I hope that this one will retain the awesomeness that your previous one had.

I am sure it will.

TO THE READ LATER LIST WITH YOU! But you can have my like just because I love you :heart::heart::heart:

Twidash stories are too common nowadays.

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I disagree. There more, the better.

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Thank you guys :twilightsmile: glad you enjoyed it thus far!

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Thanks for pointing that out. I shall fix this.

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Thanks! Good luck to you too! As always I will not start reading other contest entries before the deadline because panic :twilightblush:

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That was unexpected, but lovely :twilightsmile::twilightsheepish: hope I don't disappoint.

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Heh, haven't we all been there, sugarcube? :ajsmug:

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Yeah, I'ma go ahead and side with the fighty bread here, soz :twilightsmile:

I like the fact that you made AJ and RD kind of the besties type in the story. I always knew those two were really close when it came to friendship. :rainbowdetermined2::ajsmug:

Dammit! My finger accidentally slipped and hit the like button!
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Oops, while trying to fix my mistake, I think I just clicked on the favorite icon too.

:rainbowwild: Oh well, worse things have happened.

I'm liking this so far. I get a little frustrated with shipping that takes forever to get to the first date, so it's kind of refreshing to see one already in the works.

3249937 Yeah, same thing happened here. Blasted fingers. If only we had hooves, this wouldn't have happened!

Two chapters at once :yay:

I figured there's not enough going on in this chapter to keep people waiting for it :twilightsmile:

This was actually the third story I wrote for this contest. The first one wouldn't finish. Hated the second one. So you get this. You're gonna have to judge for yourselves if this is a good thing :twilightblush:

I really enjoyed it, though I do wish it was a bit longer.

it’s gonna be so fast that I’ll get you into bed before you even know what hit you.” She puffed out her chest; then, after a second, she realized what she had just said. “Erm, that came out wrong, I mean…”

No, Dash, I believe that came out exactly right. :rainbowkiss:

Awww shucks... I really hoped it would be longer.:fluttershysad:

But a really nice story. The 'speed date' is so Rainbow-like... :facehoof: BUT it is funny and somewhat heartwarming. and the awkwardness between them is also very authentic. And desperate Rarity is just so very entertaining!:rainbowlaugh:

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To be honest I sometimes even find myself stopping to read after a story got to first date :twilightblush: I like me a good slow buildup. But sometimes there's an alternative. Glad you liked it :twilightsmile:

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Yeah, I too find them to be a natural match :rainbowdetermined2: :ajsmug:

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Treacherous hands! Gotta be careful with those :raritywink:

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Yeah. As best buddies they are really great. Both are competitive, can take a beating (verbal and physical) and are generally funny. This is also the reason why I hate AppleDash fics. They are great as friends, or even as sex buddies if you really wanna read that, but as couple they just don't work on the long run. They just crash too much.

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You know, after your first comment sounded rather unenthusiastic, this is all the more welcome :twilightsmile:

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:twilightblush: :rainbowderp:

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Glad you liked it :twilightsmile: I'll blame RL and contest time constraints :twilightblush:

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I'm really happy the awkwardness and the speed-date idea kinda came across :twilightsmile: Glad you enjoyed it (poor Rarity :raritydespair: )

XD Oh my. I wanna see the rest of it! I love how it is coming out!:twilightsmile::heart::rainbowkiss:

Two words:
oh...shit
BTW love the story!

I'm surprised that Rarity didn't do the old "pick it up and drop it hoping that it opens" thing. You know she "accidentally" opened it.

Rarity is out of the loop. :rainbowlaugh: Great story.

T'was a wonderfully written story. Very charming, very funny. I liked this quite a bit.


No place for wimps.

SHL

Very good one :pinkiehappy: And Pinkie Pie with her deductive skills XDDDDD

Another great story from you, i look forward to the next creation of your's :twilightsmile:

Great story, I have nothing to complain about. Exept that such a wonderful story have to end so quickly. But even when it would have ended after over 100.000 words it would be still to soon.

It´s short, but not rushed. All of it seems right and after a long time I can´t find anything wrong in a story.

Ok....one little thing. In the end it should stand "marefriend" instead of "girlfriend", but thats just my oppinion.

Oh TwiDash...you never fail to melt my heart:heart: (and get me in a cheesy mood to:twilightblush:)

Very nice and cute story, love it.
:heart::twilightsmile::rainbowwild::heart:

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Well, considering that the term "marefriend" is never used in the show, but "girlfriend" is, I'd say that girlfriend is the canon term for it.

Good story, if a little short. At least it was a cute, quick read. Certainly a breath of fresh air from the 100k+ word count stories I have in my read later list...

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Um... sorry to disappoint, but that's all there is :twilightoops:

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Glad y'all liked it :twilightsmile:

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Poor girl :raritycry: ( :raritywink: )

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Thanks, glad you guys liked it :twilightsmile: Yeah, it's a little on the short side of things, but I wanted something shorter this time around. Glad it still doesn't feel rushed :twilightsmile:
My reasoning for "girlfriend" is that they address each other as "girls" all the time, so the word / concept of a "girl" exists. I don't mind "marefriend" or "fillyfriend", but I just decided to go with "girlfriend". Arbitrary when I'm using expressions like "on the other hoof"? Hell yeah! :twilightblush:

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I'm flattered :twilightblush: thanks!

✈ Don't question me...

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:rainbowderp:

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Glad you liked it :twilightsmile:

I would also like to mention that there has been a slight update, polishing some stuff I thought could use some more polishing. Just sayin', so it doesn't get lost or nothin' :twilightsheepish:

3266846 YOU QUESTIONED THE MAGICAL PLANE GERDAMMIT

A nice story.
As some said a little one the short side, considering how good I find your writing I could certainly stand to read a bit more, but with the current plot there's no need for it to be any longer.
Good luck in the competition.:twilightsmile:

It may have been short, but while I wished there was more, I can't help but think it was perfectly encapsulated. A good finishing point for the reader to imagine what happens onwards, you know?

Anyway, this was an adorable story, and I'm glad to have read it. Thank you very much! :)

How come you say girlfriend and not marefriend they are pony's after all.
Except that great story kinda an interrupt ending but a good story nonetheless :twilightsmile:

:rainbowwild:Simply fantastic. I like how simply its written. Nothing is really overly described, and its sort of breezed through, but not in a bad way. You get just enough understanding of whats happening in a scene, then it moves on. The character interaction is great too!

Excellently written, and a great read.

I liked this a lot. Not exactly the style I'm used to and the characters seem closer to the show than most shipfics, but still wonderful! :twilightsmile:

I came in expecting another "Daring Dash and Rosetta Sparkle" -esque story, and it wasn't. Not at all. Completely different.

I like it.

I like it so much that it deserves a like. Take this like, because I like it. Did I mention that I like it?

Oh, and yes, I am the head of the department of redundancies department.

3244836 That sounds like me and my bronydom (it's a word now).

“Her head?” Pinkie cried, jumping out from her underground lair. “Isn’t that going to hurt? And wouldn’t the top half just fall off? That must look so funny! Aw, I wish my head would split in half.”

While I love a good, random Pinkie, this seems to take it a little too far for me :pinkiesick:. On the flip side, it's good to see a Twidash where Applejack (my fav pony) and the others have a significant role in the plot. The interactions between AJ and RD are great, especially with Rarity present.

I love all the verbal slip ups in this chapter! For example:

“And I hope I don’t have to get you drunk,” Rainbow heard herself say.

And I love it when writers use the word chortle! Kudos to you author.:moustache:

Common what guy has not slipped up like that on a date i can tell you i have

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