While on a week-long vacation at one of Equestria's quickly becoming popular vacation spots, Lunar Bay, the town where the night sky is rumored to be the most spectacular in the entire kingdom, Applejack is surprised to learn that Twilight and Rainbow plan to spend it in no different way than if they had stayed back in Ponyville. Applejack has easy solution to fix that, a friendly bet with the new alicorn and pegasus. A bet that may spark something new between the two ponies.
This is my submission for the 3rd Twidash group contest.
Chapters (10)
Me like.
Me also like...
ME LOVE
Suck it Skeeter!
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Well, well... Is that a new trend or something? Or are you just a Timaeus twink acc?
Also: Really great start! I love how you portray Twilight here... Probably because I did exactly the same when I was reading the part where she read until her food got cold...
Can't wait to see more of this!
This will be interesting, no magic for the princess of magic
3129569 Timaeus and I started it together, with Lostzilla.
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Ah! Okay. It just occurred to me that you two have a similar profile picture, thus the assumption. And I WAS right then...
where's Skeeter been recently? I haven't seen him around....
Anyway, great start to the fic. A few minor mistakes, but nothing that really detracts from the whole, and nothjing a little more editing can't fix. hThe plot sounds interesting, even if the beginning bit felt a bit rushed, the rest of the chapter was nearly perfectly paced.
Twidash always!
Twidash forever!
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I'm glad to hear that any remaining mistakes weren't too distracting.
Hopefully though I can find time to remedy that later, and that I can avoid it in the proceeding chapters.
Yeah, I'll admit, I did feel the beginning was a bit rushed as well. I guess I forced myself too hard to write when I wrote that portion (I wanted to avoid having the beginning chapter be the reason for a writer's block for me).
This actually sounds rather interesting. I really like how unmalicious you made the bet, too; usually stories like this would have the characters suggest extremely embarrassing punishments for the losers. This friendly bet is so much more in-character.
Keep it up!
This sounds fun, let's see where this goes
I'm interested, and await more
Seven days and no Skeeter comment... I think that's a sign of the apocalypse.
Enjoyable beginning to what I assume will be an enjoyable story, carry on.
I cannot wait to read more!
Me gusta, MOAR
Yes! Update!
Some grammatical errors but worth the read. I wonder what is going on with the guard that hits papperazi... looking forward to more!
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Glad to see you're liking it so far.
Darn, I guess my editor and myself aren't as sharp-eyed as we'd like to think. Despite scanning it as thoroughly as we could, there's still some errors.
I loved the fact that this time it was Twilight giving Rainbow a ride...
Let me tell you... So far, I'm loving it...
Yep, I must say that I loved it and an epiloge would be really nice...
Discord eats hair...
intresting
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Sorry for being picky but here is the next one.
I think you meant "there are still some errors". Singular and plural...
And yes I'm definitely enjoying it.
Man we need Luna Tag
What happens when they get back home
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Yeah, that's one of the few issues with my lingo. It always gets by me. I'll try to make sure that I avoid that as best I can in the future.
Agh! You're killing me Battlebread! JK. Jk.
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That's something I'll be addressing in the epilogue I mentioned in the author's note. I just decided to declare it complete at this point since I was running short on time for the contest, and how the 9th chapter ended seemed more than sweet enough to make for a good ending in my opinion.
3291309 wel plz do that
Great story, love it.
Waiting for that epilogue.
I'm impressed, not many people know how rare jellyfish fossils actually are. The only problem I see is why the actual paleontologist ponies allow that site, which apparently has a Lagerstätte, to be a tourist trap. They'd jump on that really quickly, those types of sites are incredibly rare and really important to the fossil record.
Wait, the game wasn't Civilization?
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Ehehe, I guess I was hoping that no one would analyze it that deeply. As you said, not many people know how rare jellyfish fossils really are. In retrospect, I guess even with possibility of most of the fossils potentially being fake, it'd probably still be better off as a dig site rather than a tourist attraction.
I'd be lying if I said 'yes' to that question. The game is actually suppose to be slightly structured toward something that kinda replicates Civilization (esp. since I find that game so fun). The reason I mentioned Ruse was because I explained how the game dynamic would work out to my two brothers (one of which is my editor) and both seemed to come to the conclusion right off the bat that it sounded like Ruse. I did a little bit of research into it, and found it almost matched perfectly since the game Twilight and Rainbow are playing can be played at real-time or turn-based (which they were) and, as I described it to my brother, Rainbow is controlling the map via outposts and small towns (primarily through outposts though). Rethinking it though, I guess it's more along the lines of a kind of hybrid between the two, leaning more toward Civ though.
This, my friend, was a masterpiece
That was adorable and seemed well paced. For a short fic like this, I mean. Altogether a nice read. Great job.
So far I am enjoying this tale. I now have a tail.
I feel like there's more to this story but alas I'm okay with the ending. Good Job on this nice story.
Cool... I thought it was over and then BAM! a new chapter!
You've done good, son... You've done good...
Huh, Luna must taste good for Discord to take a bite out of her.
More more
3568082 indeed, applejack sure is a crafty one
Ok sadly im puting this on my to-read list, because im might be having a friend stay the night! unless he wants to read with me i guess i might have to wait...
(using sleepy applejack as a disapointed face)
Ok so i did read it (meh friend was busy) and now this chapter has forced me into reading the next 9 chapters! *GASP*
wait 9 chapters? Holy Sonic Rainboom! 
I can see that
and im only on day 2! holy sonic rainboom i have alot to read!
Well im going to read the rest later as for now ima play some minecraft!
"Twilight, who was still muzzle-deep in a book, granted it wasn't the same one from earlier, and using a semi-formed barrier to protect it from food bits that the pink earth next to her somehow managed to make airborne for a time despite that she was eating her food in a rather neat way."
I think you missed a 'pony' after the 'pink earth'
I don't know how to Twilight and this sentence seems unnecessary
Unless you meant:
I didn't see Twilight come up to the suite once."
Shorter then the others but really good detail wise! :D Gunna keep reading!
I hate this part of the story, why you ask? because its the ending
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Right...thanks for bringing that up to my attention you two. I actually re-read one of the chapters, and I did find a lot of errors, I'll go ahead re-read the entire story and make the edits a bit later.