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The DJ Rainbow Dash


Stuck somewhere between writing funny and sad horsewords. Don't forget to add romance in there!

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Twilight Sparkle has a double dilemma on her hooves. First, it is Rainbow's birthday soon and she doesn't have a present. Second, she really wants to have a relationship with the mare.

The plan?

A week long vacation, each day dedicated to the pegasus. Twilight has a plan of action laid out, and she is certain Rainbow will love it.

But what will become of the relationship between the two close friends?

(Not based at all on Journey to the Center of the Earth)

Accepted into Twilight's Library 12/8/13
Thanks to Bookish Delight for the proofreading and editing!
Submission into the 3rd Twidash Group Competition
Cover art by SharpieBoss can be found here

Chapters (8)
Comments ( 220 )

Not based at all on Journey to the Center of the Earth

But why?! :fluttercry:

Oooo. This has my interest.

And it's a contest submission? Very nice!

~Skeeter The Lurker

man, please, next time, a less pornographic title :rainbowwild:

This sounds promising, haven't read this yet but i have good feeling about this one :rainbowwild:

EDIT: Just read it and it started rather nicely, let's see where this goes

3101612

My thoughts exactly.

3101618

Your new profile pic O.O I feel like... I should call you Bowku from now on (Bowser + Aku)...

3103516

Bowser The Lurker. So sayeth Dunsparce.

~Skeeter The Lurker

Okay...

Im now even more...
Not really confused...
Lets say...
Disoriented.
The rainbow has 7 colors...
But RD's mane only got 6...



LUNA DAMN YOU HASBRO

3103516
I'm going to ship these two together now.
BAWKU IS BEST SHIP

“I won’t ask what the reason is, but I’m sure if you want to tell me you well. Now let’s get thinking.”

Should be will.

Apart from that it's a promising start to the story.

3105985

You are officially my new best friend

This is going to be cute. Very cute. Trackin' this shit.

3101612 Science fiction is not a strong point of mine. And... I never watched nor read it before :twilightsheepish:

3101618 3103516 Indeed! I'm going for earlier (the deadline is a month away) than right at the deadline like last time.

3101620 Yeahh.... :twilightoops: Didn't notice that one till now. But I like the title so much, so I'll keep it. Also, mind out of the gutter now :facehoof: :twilightsmile:

3102105 Thanks!

3102186 Thanks for reading! This is just a setup for the rest of the story remember.

3105096 Actually the 7th color is there, just not in her mane :raritywink:

3106268 Will (HA! :derpytongue2:) fix that one now

3106586 Thanks!

3106990 you just love to confuse people, dontcha?

Great start to what I'm sure will be an interesting fic. I await gleefully, good sir!

Now I need to write my own contest fic.... ugh....

Twidash always!
Twidash forever!

Potential, i like that

Pretty good, pretty good.

3107662 Perhaps :derpytongue2:

3107848 Twidash forever! :pinkiesmile:

3108009 Thanks!

3108308 I hope it does :twilightsmile:

3110541 Yes I know, although it is on my list of things to watch.

3115993 Thank you!

That depends...what kind of freshly baked cookies?

This looks promising, I'm waiting for the next chapter!

Rainbow: cool! A pit of thousand degree flames! I should totally fly over it.:rainbowwild:

3106268
...Did you color that green for the reason that I think you did?

Well, you have to use wiki to tell what the symbols means for every single color.

I somehow get a feeling about the last colour... To what could purple possibly connet to?:twilightoops:
Pictures of unicorns, libraries and books come to mind but I have no idea at where they come from...:twilightsheepish:
Whatever could it be...:facehoof:


Okay that was enough... but this is really interesting and I look forward to the other sights. Especially the one of the colour green.:rainbowwild:

Nice work. and very clever. the way this vacation is plans out is very unique

3175650 Um, probably? I can't read minds over the internet, just in the immediate vicinity. :twilightsmile:
What do you think I used it for?

Down, down, down, in a burning ring of fire~

This is cute and fun to read, good luck finishing the rest of it up!

I never thought that someone should write about the door to hell. Impressive I admit

3117164 Any kind you'd like! :twilightsmile:

3154495 Its already up if you haven't seen it yet

3175060 It sounded like a daredevil thing Rainbow would do without first thinking about the consequences.

3175968 I already knew some of the symbols and such myself. The rest I went to specialty sites and such. Surprisingly used Wikipedia very little.

3175999 I won't give it away for everybody else, so I cannot say if you have the right idea :twilightsheepish:

And I have some simple and other cool idea for the other colors. The Door to Hell one was probably one of the cooler ones though.

3178773 Thanks! Its exactly what I was going for :pinkiesmile:

3179823 Johnny Cash!

And thanks, hopefully I'll get it done in time

3180343 I found it once a long time ago and it popped into my head when I thought red. It went red, fire, then Door to Hell. Worked nicely though :twilightsmile:

3180419
Okay. I totally understand. I just wondered...:raritywink:
The suspense is killing me though...:twilightoops:

It is interesting how you seem to plan this. Tell me if I'm wrong but I think Rainbow is going to find out more about herself and strengthens her spiritual/philosophical side by an in-depth journey into herself, led by Twilight. I have always been a fan of those 'finding yourself' experiences and with the romance sub(?)plot it gets even better!

Keep it up! You are doing very well so far!:twilightsmile:

3180477

In essence I was going for something along those lines, but you actually gave me another idea to build around as almost a secondary foundation to the story. So, I might as well have to use that now :twilightsmile:

3180623
Well... I'm happy to help!:twilightsmile:
I just wished could I got to use my ideas myself but I just can't bring myself to write anything serious...:fluttershysad:

EDIT: Dang it... I just realized I read a good bunch of your stories and didn't even notice they were from you...
*Stalking Mode Engaged*

3207866 Thanks a bunch. And yes, this is for the Twidash vacation challenge. :twilightsmile:

I see your in it also. Might have to check your story out to do the same thing :twilightsheepish:

Author's Note: Anyway, hope you're all enjoying this so far.

Definitely.:rainbowkiss::twilightsmile:

I...
I can't wait for the next one, This is such a great story!

U are clever than u look.:twilightsmile:

Loved the idea when I first saw it. It's proving to be just as adorable as it sounds.

Keep up the good work!

Great chapter, :twilightsmile::rainbowdetermined2:

Huh....
Doesn't blue stand for depression and sadness?
And Slice of Life? :rainbowlaugh:

Where my cookie? Where my cookie at?

The stallion brushed himself off a bit with his free hand before looking up at Rainbow.

Think you might wanna correct this.

I'm totally taking points off for not going in the proper order of the rainbow.

Not really

Faved four chapters ago, Liked three chapters ago.

Very good chapter, :twilightsmile::rainbowkiss:

Some mistakes I noticed:

The water was at the very least a few hundred feet lower than the cliff-like land they were currently traveling on. On most occasions, there would be some evidence of a beach or some sort of rocky alcove.

“Well where to begin? Blue is considered to be a color of the sky and the sea, and is usually associated with depth and stability.”

'It' is redundant, we know what the topic is, just describe it.

...It can is also color which can be used to represent a bunch of things several other things, some like confidence, wisdom, truth, and heaven...

To be honest, you could add an a between 'also' and 'color', but it sounds extremely awkward. It also doesn't add up with the previous statement - you've already defined what blue symbolizes, if you want to add on additional meanings, you should make note of any earlier associations. Otherwise it sounds disjointed and awkward.

Also, this is extremely nit picky, but it really bugs me -

“Aqua Caerula! It’s also Latin, and when you convert it to English, it means water of deep blue,”

Latin? English? I believe those are human languages, Twilight. You'd be speaking Equestrian, with Aqua Caerula being some peculiar, pony-like form of Latin.

About the colors - my OCD side is kicking in, and it's telling me that the order you're doing this in is a sin. I'm trying real hard to silence it.

Regardless, great story thus far, certainly deserved my like and favorite. Though... Where's my cookie?

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