Not So Sucky Anymore
Not So Sucky Anymore
“Lookie here who’s in a good mood,” Applejack greeted Rainbow as she landed at the beach, returning from putting away all the supplies she had organized for the date. The girls and Spike had already taken up their spot and were preparing for another leisurely day at the sea. “I half expected y’all to still be sleepin’ over there. Two of you looked a mite cute when I saw y’all on my morning run!”
Rainbow started. “You… you saw us?”
At that, Rarity perked up her ears. “Us?” She turned to Rainbow Dash and poked a hoof against her chest. “Will you finally tell me what is going on?”
“You mean that Rainbow and Twilight had a date last night and slept on the beach?” Pinkie asked, her head poking out from her strip mine.
“You knew!?” Rainbow, Rarity, and Applejack gasped in unison.
“Well, duh!” Pinkie Pie stared at them. “First Rainbow got all mopey when Twilight had to stay in the other hotel to meet the sea pony ambassador. Then Twilight writes a letter, and Rainbow is all excited and jumpy, like me, when I tried a triple caramel muffin in that funny club in Canterlot. Then Rainbow disappears for the night and returns super smiley, and there’s a mark of two ponies on a picnic blanket right over there. You really don’t have to be a Twilight McSmartypants to make sense of that.” While everypony was still busy staring at Pinkie Pie, mouth agape, she pulled Rainbow into a crushing hug. “I’m so happy for you guys!”
Rarity’s eye twitched. “And Applejack, darling, you knew about this, too?” she asked with suspicious calm in her voice.
“Eyup,” Applejack simply nodded. “It’s your story to tell, sugarcube,” she encouraged Rainbow Dash.
The pegasus sighed. “Not much to tell. Twi and I went out on our first date on Saturday. I kinda needed somepony to talk to afterwards, so I went to AJ.” She shot the farmer a nasty glare. “Never. Again.”
“Aw shucks, sugarcube, it was all in good fun,” Applejack smiled. Rainbow Dash snorted.
“Fluttershy, dear? Did… did you know of this, too?”
Fluttershy shied back and hid her face behind her mane. “No, I didn’t. I mean, I could guess they went on a date last night, and that Rainbow Dash was… oh, but I didn’t know that Rainbow and Twilight spent the night on the beach. Eep!”
Rarity’s eye twitched once more. With very self-possessed motions, she got up and put on her hat. “Spike, I am in desperate need of well-mannered company right now. Would you care to join me for a bucket of ice cream?” Spike jumped up and followed Rarity towards the ice cream parlor. The others laughed.
“Ice cream!” Rainbow suddenly shouted. “I forgot the ice cream!” Before the other girls could react, she had already darted away.
***
“… and we will meet again in half an hour,” Princess Celestia said. Her smile looked as radiant as ever, even after almost two days of tedious negotiations with the ambassador of the sea ponies. Twilight fought back a yawn. She had slept perfectly fine last night, but the proceedings were really tiresome.
Suddenly the window of the corridor burst open and Rainbow Dash darted in. “Rainbow!” Twilight exclaimed, surprised.
“Hey Twi!” Rainbow pulled Twilight into a hug and gave her a kiss on the cheek. Yeah, she was just awesome as that, kissing her… kissing Twilight like nopony’s business. She shoved an ice cream cone into Twilight’s hoof. “You never got to taste this amazing ice cream!”
Belatedly she bowed before Princess Celestia who was watching with an amused smile. “Sorry for bursting in here like this, Princess,” she said, scratching her temple and grinning.
“Princess,” Twilight said, blushing under Princess Celestia’s curious smile, “allow me to introduce to you my girlfriend, Rainbow Dash.”
Girlfriend! Rainbow totally liked the sound of that!
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Two chapters at once
I figured there's not enough going on in this chapter to keep people waiting for it
This was actually the third story I wrote for this contest. The first one wouldn't finish. Hated the second one. So you get this. You're gonna have to judge for yourselves if this is a good thing
I really enjoyed it, though I do wish it was a bit longer.
Awww shucks... I really hoped it would be longer.
But a really nice story. The 'speed date' is so Rainbow-like...
BUT it is funny and somewhat heartwarming. and the awkwardness between them is also very authentic. And desperate Rarity is just so very entertaining!
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You know, after your first comment sounded rather unenthusiastic, this is all the more welcome
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I'll blame RL and contest time constraints 
Glad you liked it
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Glad you enjoyed it (poor Rarity 
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I'm really happy the awkwardness and the speed-date idea kinda came across
XD Oh my. I wanna see the rest of it! I love how it is coming out!
Two words:
oh...shit
BTW love the story!
Rarity is out of the loop.
Great story.
Very good one
And Pinkie Pie with her deductive skills XDDDDD
Another great story from you, i look forward to the next creation of your's
Great story, I have nothing to complain about. Exept that such a wonderful story have to end so quickly. But even when it would have ended after over 100.000 words it would be still to soon.
It´s short, but not rushed. All of it seems right and after a long time I can´t find anything wrong in a story.
Ok....one little thing. In the end it should stand "marefriend" instead of "girlfriend", but thats just my oppinion.
Oh TwiDash...you never fail to melt my heart
(and get me in a cheesy mood to
)
Very nice and cute story, love it.
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Well, considering that the term "marefriend" is never used in the show, but "girlfriend" is, I'd say that girlfriend is the canon term for it.
Good story, if a little short. At least it was a cute, quick read. Certainly a breath of fresh air from the 100k+ word count stories I have in my read later list...
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Um... sorry to disappoint, but that's all there is
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Glad y'all liked it
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Poor girl
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Yeah, it's a little on the short side of things, but I wanted something shorter this time around. Glad it still doesn't feel rushed 
Thanks, glad you guys liked it
My reasoning for "girlfriend" is that they address each other as "girls" all the time, so the word / concept of a "girl" exists. I don't mind "marefriend" or "fillyfriend", but I just decided to go with "girlfriend". Arbitrary when I'm using expressions like "on the other hoof"? Hell yeah!
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thanks!
I'm flattered
✈ Don't question me...
I like it :)
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Glad you liked it
I would also like to mention that there has been a slight update, polishing some stuff I thought could use some more polishing. Just sayin', so it doesn't get lost or nothin'
3266846 YOU QUESTIONED THE MAGICAL PLANE GERDAMMIT
A nice story.
As some said a little one the short side, considering how good I find your writing I could certainly stand to read a bit more, but with the current plot there's no need for it to be any longer.
Good luck in the competition.
It may have been short, but while I wished there was more, I can't help but think it was perfectly encapsulated. A good finishing point for the reader to imagine what happens onwards, you know?
Anyway, this was an adorable story, and I'm glad to have read it. Thank you very much! :)
How come you say girlfriend and not marefriend they are pony's after all.
Except that great story kinda an interrupt ending but a good story nonetheless
Excellently written, and a great read.
I came in expecting another "Daring Dash and Rosetta Sparkle" -esque story, and it wasn't. Not at all. Completely different.
I like it.
I like it so much that it deserves a like. Take this like, because I like it. Did I mention that I like it?
Oh, and yes, I am the head of the department of redundancies department.
Shut up and take my likes!
3266846 I really enjoyed the fic, it was well written, it had a great plot, with excellent use of true character personalities, i only have one grammar mistake i would like to point out being an English teacher.
Quote: -
"Her smile looked as radiant was ever."
it would of made more sense if it were
"Her smile looked as radiant as ever."
But other then that i loved it
10/10
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Thank you very much, fixed it
5844673 your welcome friend
Loved it this was freaking adorable and hilarious!
Rainbow Dash is just so adorable, and I can totally see this happening.
Mother of god, it's a chain!?!
Smooth?
Super super good
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First: would of should have been would have
Second: it wasn't a grammatical error, it was a spelling error.
You can has review!
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Ohh thank you kindly
walking along a beach alone being boring is lowkey the main message of death stranding