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A living meteor has fallen, bringing the threat of Equestria's destruction. The Elements of Harmony have broken, following Rainbow Dash's ultimate sacrifice to protect her friends, and they scramble to solve the mystery while the world prepares for war. Moving forward is hard with Rainbow Dash dead.

But peace in the world beyond proves elusive to Rainbow, and she'll never let her friends down when they need her. Not even death will stop her from coming back.

Currently undergoing rewrites, no I don't know when or if I'm going to get to them, stop asking me about it

Editing for remastered version by Formerly Committed and Shellsh0cker.

Chapters (13)
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Author's Note: It begins! I've been extremely excited to tell this story since before I finished my previous fic and it's a great relief to finally begin sharing it with all of you. Barring any major disasters, Coming Back will update once a week on Thursdays with a new chapter.

Any and all feedback, positive or negative, is welcome. I've got thick skin; if you don't like it, tell me why! If you do like it, I'm an insufferable egotist so tell me why for that too!

For those that read this, there is a small contest going on for this chapter. Echriedz devised an excellent game when we were editing, which is roughly entitled "What Rainbow Dash's Last Words Should Have Been." Here is a small sampling of some that the two of us came up with:

"None of you are in my will."
"Dear Princess Celestia....fuck you."
"Rarity...you're starting to get a lil fat."
"Shit...I forgot to feed Tank."
"Damn, what smells so delicious?"
"Hey Pinkie, hurry up and pull a fire extinguisher out of your ass."
"I guess I'm..." Puts on sunglasses. "FIRED."
"So how was your day, Rarity? We never have a chance to just talk anymore."
"Hey AJ, wanna hoof wrestle?"
"I secretly poisoned one of you."
"Are you ready kids? OOHH who lives in a pineapple under the sea?"
"This is what I get for voting for Obama."

The contest is to come up with your own "better" final words for Rainbow Dash. Post to the comments here or shoot me a PM between now and Sunday, December 2nd at 11:59 PM EST. No restriction on number of entries per person, although for the sake of sanity it might be best to confine your entries to a single comment or PM. Winner will be chosen by the rigorous method of "which one we like the most" and will get the chance to preread chapter 2 before it goes live next Thursday. In the case of no or too few entries to judge, y'all are a bunch of spoilsports.

Umm I gonna try something but I knees I not going to in sooooo " Ohhhhhhhhhh FFFUUUCCCKKK!!!"

Damn, this is pretty good. Can't wait for more.

edit- as for last lines, how about:
"Rarity, I love...your sister!"

The Beast: Hey is that the Element of Loyalty?

Twilight: Yeah?

The Beast: Imma kill it!

Twilight: Don't you do it!

The Beast: Imma do it!

Twilight: Don't you do it!

*kill

Twilight: Dangit!

Dont you just hate phantom neggers, people who dislike your story without leaving a comment telling you why, a pretty good story so far let's see where this goes

This premise, it intrigues me. I shall be watching you...

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Let's try that again in English this time.

1707439 I don't think he capable of it :rainbowlaugh:

Great story can't wait for MOAR!! Also

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You know listening to those lyrics I'm wandering that this song is whre they got the idea for the return of harmony :rainbowhuh:

Boredom and procrastination led me to putting our full convo on a Gdoc. Names have been taken out since knowing our true names will send us back to the 8th dimension of Xzuthian where we would be re-enslaved by Cthulhu's second cousin Steve (Dental plan is great but he's a dick). Fair warning some of the suggestions are a bit....adult natured. Forgive us.

:twilightsmile::heart::rainbowkiss: <---That's the link if you couldn't guess.

I was going to think of a caption to submit, but I don't think I could beat

"Did yall know Twilight can sleep through orgasms?"
1:22 AM Nov 22

There's just no surpassing that.

On another note, nice story, will follow.

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The scary shit we think of in the wee hours. But submit some anyway, since the ones on the gdoc are bats and mine, so they don't really count. Just there for musings and prevent duplicates.


Psst...the orgasm one was mine

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Eh, it happens. Cost of doing business, I think. Obnoxious, in that I got a thumbs down before any views on both Coming Back AND Rainbow Rambles when they first went live. Couldn't even wait for someone else to look at it before you trolled? Really? :rainbowlaugh:

Interesting... the arrival of this bull was incredibly surprising and this war thing is not exactly what one would expect. Dash's loyalty and focus on her friends REALLY shines in this, as does Spike's youth.

But my favourite by far HAS to be the portrayal of Discord. He is completely true in that chaos isn't bad... and he's still sneaky. Can't wait to see what happens with him!

My entry. "I just want you all to know that I hated you all. Especially you Twilight."

I just read the conversation. Looks like I was beaten to it!

Entry two: "Twilight, Pinkie. I've always shipped you two"

Loving this already. You're definitely doing my favorite pony justice.

"Let's see the Wonderbolts top this... "

The contest winner is Subsolar Drift for his hilarious, "Twilight, Pinkie. I've always shipped you two."

ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh




feels

Man these are getting better and better btw that sad part got to me:fluttercry:

Man these are getting better and better btw that sad part got to me:fluttercry:

cant wait for the next one !!! :yay:

amazing start to what I hope is a nice long story. I love the thought of RD actually being still,:rainbowlaugh: it strikes me as funny. keep up the great story-telling and will hope for updates.

I do not see a Derpy Pony.
I see Derpy, a pony.

I will eventually find out how to have a sig on Fimfiction.

New contest for Chapter 2:

First person to PM me, comment here, or comment on the contest blog post with The GREAT and POWERFUL Trixie's last name will win a free preview of Coming Back's Chapter three. Contest deadline is before Thursday, December 13th when Chapter three goes live.

Trixie's last name is Lulamoon. (for the contest in the blog)

Contest over, two near-instantaneous winners! Jarlax and Brony 2893

I sence a hint of epic here...this shall be good.:rainbowkiss:

Powerful stuff at the ending there. Can't wait for more.

You missed an italics tag right at the end there.

I forget whether I commented before. But this is good, and I have a feeling it'll only get better. Or, with the influence from the Elements of Strife, a lot worse. Not to mention Discord.

And I know I won't be able to read the next chapter (or so) without seeing whoever carries War as War. I already see his home resembling, er... the place with the giant bat. Been too long since I played the first Darksiders.

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Thanks for pointing out the italics tag problem. Deciding to have dream sequences in italics will be the death of my last shreds of sanity, I'm sure. :pinkiecrazy:

Oh, hello rarijack, didn't expect to see you here.

Ha was eating meat and potato pie when I read that authors note :rainbowlaugh:

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Haha, yeah. I like Rarijack and I discovered that I couldn't write a story containing AJ and Rares in any real role without at least implying it a little. Man, I like Opposites Attract pairings. :rainbowlaugh:

Things are starting to get interesting.:rainbowdetermined2:

Ooh, this is really good so far! Shenanigans beyond the veil, rampaging inferno bulls and possible Twidash? Count me in! So far as I can see this is written super well, and the idea is unique, too. Looking forward to more whenever its available, but I'll have to tackle chapter three tomorrow, or I'm gonna pull a Twilight and pass out from exhaustion - so yeah, great job :pinkiehappy:

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I dunno, some blue bitch. :rainbowlaugh:

Dat Ttile Drop. So sexy.

Aw yeah! This is shaping up to be really good. And its gonna be a long story you say? Even better!

1799780 I burst out laughing - just thought you should know.

Anywho, still loving this and I can't wait for the next chapter :pinkiehappy:

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Haha, that's good. The inside jokes with editors aren't necessarily gonna land, glad this one did though. This all comes from Ech's grudge against labeling RD as cyan, since she's technically not. I'm afraid I was convinced, if only because 'tiffany,' 'celeste,' and 'sky blue' sound better anyway. I still use cyan on occasion, though, probably to Ech's continued annoyance. :rainbowlaugh:

Original estimation on length was 100k-120k words. At this point...No idea. Maybe that long, maybe twice that long. WHO KNOWS!? :pinkiecrazy:

1807695>>1807785
This is cyan This is Rainbow Dash

Just sayin'

I swear, if at the end, this all turns out to be a hallucination, and Rainbow isn't coming back and there's some bullshit about learning to let go, I will hate you forever!

Ahahaha! What can I say, I took a chance with this one (mainly due to the tags not being stuff I usually read, like ever), and I have to say I'm hooked so far. I knew that even with a description like that, you couldn't let me down, plus I swear if you keep this up I'm gonna become addicted to what you write. It's happened before, heck it's STILL happening now.
<.<

Anyway, the story so far is intriguing as hell, and I simply cannot wait to see more!

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