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Scootaloo's life hasn't been the easiest. Being orphaned at a young age and brought up in the foster system came with its own set of challenges, not the least of which was a lack of older pegasi around to teach her how to fly. Fortunately, Rainbow Dash can help with that. With her honorary big sister taking a more active role in her life, Scootaloo learns much more about herself than just how to fly.

A story about love, family, and growing up.

Editing by Formerly Committed and Shellsh0cker.

Dramatic reading of chapter sixteen available here.

Chapters (18)
Comments ( 1303 )

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Aww... Poor Scoots. :fluttercry:

I can tell this will be pretty hard on the ol' feels. :pinkiesad2:

I have few words, but much enjoyment. :pinkiesmile:

I have been waiting for this for quite some time now. I can't wait for you to get the rest of it uploaded. Keep up the fantastic writing!

damn you equestrian adoption system

TwiDash, possible ScootaDash adoption and a well-written story? You, my good sir have more than earned a fave.

Ah, one of THOSE foster families. Yeah, delightful.

Hrm... Tags... Twilight/Dash... Scootaloo X Sweetie Belle too? o.O Interesting, not your usual fare.

Looking good so far. I hope this kicks off some more Rainbow Dash and Scootaloo stories with Twilight to round it out.

So much HNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNGHHHHHHHHHHHH :heart:

IT'S HEREEEEEEEEEEEE

Interesting, I always love a good scootalove fic.

This looks interesting. Not a bad start, and congrats on the featured box.

Scootalove AND Twidash... it's not December 25th is it?

Good stuff. TwiDash adopting Scootaloo. :pinkiegasp: It doesn't even matter that the plot is the most predictable thing in the world. Scootaloo is best pone.

Just cause no one's done this yet...
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Oh, and congrats on the feature man. It really is a fun fic. Wanna see what happens with those rather apathetic parents... What kind of foster home is that?

Bats, I'm sure you hear this a lot, but I love you.

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Poorly kept secret: Scootabelle is Twidash the Next Generation.

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I will neither confirm nor deny that sequence of events, but I do like to think it's the journey, not the destination that's important. :twilightsmile:

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I've broken YoutubeRepeat at least four times so far listening to that song over and over again. Not even from writing this, I just love Owl City.

The Takers are the Equestria equivalent of a state-certified caregiver, providing a private home to foster children for a small financial compensation. Basically, a little more personal than a group home, but still a state custodial arrangement unlike adoption.

Well it's by the numbers, but I love it anyway. I am always in the mood for more Scootalove. Also, Rainbow's dad's parents, geez what type of parents inhabit this universe?

I thought MLP was all sunshine and rainbows.

2503070 I've actually found myself perversely fond of the three-way pair?ing of all the cutie mark crusaders.

Finding it in NOT creepy porno form is the hard part.

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I have a similar view to Scootabelle vs. Scootabellebloom as I do Twidash vs. Appledashlight. I love both the pairings and the triads, but writing single pairing stories that believably develop a relationship are way less work than writing triads. If I wrote a triad story with the CMCs (which would be aged up, because it's my opinion that writing about triads necessitates an inherently sexual type of story, which I'm happy to write about for adult characters, but children? Eeeeugh), it would need to be the focus of the story, not a part of another story like this one.

2503263 I disagree that a three-way relationship must needs be a sexual one. I think it can be written in such a way that the emotion can shine through without that. That said, yeah, if they're fuckin' they'd better damn well be at least teenagers.

Does This take place after Twilight Holmes?

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In saying sexual, I don't necessarily mean explicit; it could be done with a teen rating and wouldn't even necessarily need to 'fade to black' on sex, it could be fairly chaste. However, there is a certain amount of sensuality to a triad that is fine in adult relationships, but creepy in toy ships. That's all.

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It does not, this is a separate continuity. The story of how Twilight and Rainbow Dash got together in this continuity has not been explained. Yet.

2503346 I'm totally with you on meaning, I just don't think that's necessarily true is all. I think you could write up an innocent three-way relationship without even implied sexuality.

Of course the idea of any kind of romantic relationship between small children is kinda fatuous anyway. It's gonna be a little... silly regardless.

Come to think of it, I'd argue that a romantic relationship itself inherently requires some sexuality if you want to be realistic about it. But since this isn't the real world, liberties can be taken.

Mmmm, TwiDash, and a possible Scootadoption in the future... Rainbow and Twilight taking the role of Scootaloo's parents is probably the most adorable family ever. That's right Rainbow Dash, I'm calling you adorable. :rainbowhuh: Loving it so far, time for the next chapter!

Also, noticed one little typo:
She stroked long, straight mane with a contented smile on her lips.
Should be, "She stroked the long, straight mane..." Then again, I would also say that starting that sentence with "she" is a bit ambiguous; I'm assuming that Rainbow is doing the stroking, since Twilight's hair is straighter.

I'm in agreement with what seems to be the general consensus: it seems to be by-the-numbers for a Scootadoption/Twidash fic, but that's totally okay with me. Can't wait for the next chapter. :twilightsmile:

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I suppose really what I should be saying is that toy ships need to be written differently than adult ships. Childhood crushes are a common event, and reciprocated childhood crushes are adorable even if they probably won't survive more than a few months. At that point it's less about sex, or love, or anything like that, and more about the characters figuring out who they are, what they want in life, and how they relate to others.

That said, this story is vaguely aged up, with the CMCs as preteens instead of older children (which is my view of their canon age; I'd put them around 9 in the show). Right at the age when humans start actually thinking about dating, well before those dates actually go anywhere.

And the complication of writing a triad extends well beyond the sensual nature of such relationships (which as someone who is polyamorous, I have biased and personal-experience-colored opinions on them and how they function), because they require an immense amount of relationship mechanics work. In a Scootabellebloom, a writer needs to cover the Scootabelle, the Scootabloom, and the Applebelle all separately, as well as them all together as a functioning triad, explain how this arrangement happened, and have some semblance of a plot to actually be a satisfying and complete story. Writing four thousand words of fluff with them being snuggly together might be adorable, but it is inherently dissatisfying to read. There needs to be more to it, and the triad relationship itself is complicated enough it needs an immense amount of focus. It could be done as a peripheral element, maybe by someone extremely talented and able to balance the amount of focus such a relationship needs with the other stuff going on in the story.

I don't know that I'm talented enough for that.

I couldn't stop reading. The story is just so well put. Can't wait for more! :twilightsmile:

2503471 ... Hmm... Well then.

Y'know what, I'm moving to PMs and topic shifting because I'm super, super curious about something.

Don't worry, it ain't a personal topic.

Very enjoyable so far. Good to see a fic that does Scootadoption and doesn't just have the adoption as a minor subplot where the author just sort of waves their hands and goes "and then they magically adopted her and everything was perfect forever".

On a completely different subject, I just realized how funny it is to see the word "karate" used in reference to ponies.

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I'm slightly fonder of shipping all the CMC and Spike, but I certainly don't turn my nose up at just the CMC. I know what you mean about finding non-pornographic fics with that ship...I think I've only found one fic which isn't.

I just can't stop reading! :twilightsheepish: The wait for an update is just to much! :fluttershbad: Anyways, keep up the good work! :derpytongue2:

master chaos emerald:hmmm very interesting.i look forward for more.

master chaos emerald:wonderful.good job

Comment posted by GaruuSpike deleted Apr 30th, 2013

You have my interest so far. Cute. Perhaps a little Scootaloo/Sweetie Belle in the future? Looks possible.I'll be reading it either way. :heart:

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This is obviously part of the same universe as Coming Back, so Dash will have to use her chronobuddha powers to hold off the invading fire bulls while Scootaloo learns to fly. Or something like that.

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:rainbowlaugh:

Clearly this takes place in the same continuity as Fluttershy Kicks a Puppy. Fluttershy's just on a different hill.

No, no, it's Coming Back. Fire Bulls are coming, Dash is somehow mentally projecting herself to Scootaloo and Twilight while they go about their daily lives instead of doing anything important. Because screw saving the world, this other stuff's way more important!

I'm reminded of this:

And the prom's tomorrow!

Haha! Now she just needs Twilight to help her out with her home work & it'll be all good.

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Well, its not like Dash has anything better to do right now, what with the not being able to move under pain of death thing. Being the Chronobuddha is hard work.

PS: What is Dash's current state on the vitality spectrum?

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I'm unfamiliar with any sort of vitality spectrum. What rating corresponds well with "greasy smear of ash on a tree?"

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What I was wondering was how alive/dead she was in the afterlife. And that rating would be higher than being flung into the bowels of the underworld for all eternity, but not as much as Shrodinger's Cat.

PS: Congrats on the feature

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Ah, I get ya. It's not been explicitly spelled out in the story, but as soon as Dash's heart started beating again she was technically alive. Alive in another plane of existence separate from the world of the living without a corporeal body, but alive nonetheless.

Seriously folks, my birthday isn't until later this next month! The sudden influx of Twidash Scootadoption/Scootalove is just to awesome. Love hire this one is starting, can't wait to see more!

Damn this is good. Usually in these things the foster parents are scumbags but the Takers seem nice enough, if a bit strict.

Wait, this fic seems eerily similar to your Scoot's First Flight challenge from Scribbled Notes. Was that the inspiration to write this fic?

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