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SilentBelle


I'm a fantasy enthusiast who loves to write, and I'm aiming to be a professional fantasy writer eventually. I love to help out other authors when I can. Feel free to PM me or drop by and say 'hi'.

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This story is a sequel to Scion of Chaos


After returning to Ponyville from Canterlot, Sweetie Belle tries her best to find her place amongst friends and family and to remember what it feels like to be home.

This story takes place 4 days after the finale of Scion of Chaos. (I recommend reading that first, if you haven't already)
And set 5 years later is the sequel story: A Heart of Change

Thanks to Rameslack for his amazing cover art.

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Comments ( 109 )
Wanderer D
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This was a great read! Sweetie and Twilight will never see eye to eye in this, but... can't help but side with Sweetie on Discord. We do know more than Twilight does, after all. I do believe he would have bent himself into another dimension to keep Sweetie happy.

Yaaaaaaay i love thiiiiiiiiiiiiiiis :yay::yay::yay::yay:

I loved this. I'm even more excited for the sequel now.

Great story but I still feel something is missing... Is Discord gone for one or is he residing in the necklace in some way? I gots ta know!

Wow, my 30 minutes sure weren't wasted reading this. I'm now more excited on what happens next!:heart::pinkiehappy:

I love the emotion. It's what hooked me on Scion of Chaos. I can't wait for the sequel. :pinkiehappy:

I liked it a nice little way to wrap things up and end it or to start another story:unsuresweetie:

i was hoping sweetie would eventually take over the wold or something in the other one.

Absolutely fantastic! I can't wait for the sequel, And I am curious to see how Twilight and Sweetie Belle will be with one another now, with Twilight having "saved Equestria" or so she thought while murdering Sweetie's friend. I know if I was Sweetie I would never be able to forgive her.

Trying to reason with twilight is like talking to a wall:rainbowlaugh:
great story as usual:yay::yay:

Well that was one of the best things I've ever read. Can't wait for the sequel!:yay:

what!? that's it? come on, that can't be all of it. there's a sequel right?

Release the Blood Hounds! I smell a Sequel

is there going to be another one?

Oh wow! This was incredible, and a great followup to Scion of Chaos. I'd love to see more in this universe, if the mood ever takes you! :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

What an excelent follow up on Scion of chaos, it was a joy to read it.
And Im sure the sequal will be just as good. :raritywink:

Beautiful, simply marvellous :raritywink:

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Fear not, there is a sequel coming. I still have to work out a few more of the details.

Thanks to everyone for reading :twilightsmile:

I am looking quite forward to the sequel, you've certainly earned my Follow at least :twilightsmile:

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Most definitely, D. And let me just say if it weren't for the whole distrust thing with Twilight and Sweetie, I could see this as a prequel to Sweetie Chronicles explaining how Sweetie Prime (as I tend to call her) learned magic and became Twi's student.

Looking foward the sequel more than never, this is the best fic ever <3

2176181 You have to take her experience with Discord into account as well. Like D said in the first comment, we know much more about him than her in this fic, but Twi can only go from what she knew and that is that Discord is able to make a pony do almost anything with words alone.

2177953 I just speaking of her as a whole...twilight's always been skeptical about everything. look at the feeling pinkie keen ep :rainbowlaugh:

Want... sequel... NAO!!!!!:flutterrage:

In all seriousness though, I can wait, but I'm still looking forward to it. :pinkiehappy:

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YAY SEQUELS! twilight's really annoying in this story, who else agrees?

Awww!
It is beautiful!
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Can't wait for the sequel. :twilightsmile:
I hope Sweetie will sort thing with Twilight later. :fluttershysad:

Twilight needs to gtfo since she destroyed Discord.

More Sweetie stories are always good!
And i really doubt that Discord is gone forever i firmly believe that a part of him has survived somewhere and Sweetie will be his successor or something like that.

I'm glad I came across this. Great story. Discord is the best disembodied voice.
I'm nervous about a sequel. The big question: was much of this Discord's elaborate plot for freedom and power, thwarted by Twilight - or - his attempt to pass along much of what he built, before he changed himself for the last time - is strongest unresolved. Please make sure you have an answer worthy of it.
I would like to know your Discord's cutie mark, though.

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That's an interesting thought... Discord's cutie mark. That is definitely something I want to look into, I hadn't really thought about it before.

As for that big question, I endeavor to do my best with the story I hope that my future writing will create a worthy answer.

Thanks for reading :twilightsmile: I appreciate it.

I think it would be interesting to see the sequel cross over into TSC, if this is just a warm up.....especially if the TSC Sweetie Belle suddenly gains access to the chaos magic that this one is able to use. It would certainly be harder for her to search for the fragment of Twilight in this world, if this world's Twilight was blinding to this world's Sweetie Belle.

I'll definitely be following the sequel from the start, so don't rush! I'd like to see better use of your apostrophes in the next story, as you still have random usages of them in words where they aren't necessary. The most glaring example is 'get's' while Apple Bloom is telling a portion of the story to Sweetie Belle:

“So then Scootaloo get's this 'great idea',” Apple Bloom interjected, “she says we should go out there and bring ya back ourselves, since we know ya best and all, so we'd know where ta look for ya. And if we left right away, you'd have had less time to get away. She also said we'd get some 'forest ranger' cutie marks.”

The apostrophe in 'get's' should be nonexistent. there are other incidents of improper usage of an apostrophe, but that's the only one that I remember being completely uncalled for. You do have an 'it's' were you should have 'its' at one point, followed by a major word typo: 'the' instead of 'there'. I'll bring up the quote:

Now it's damaged remains sat the with a very low glow of magic, the sight of it brought her back to that fateful day.

Digging through this story, I found another 'it's' that should also eliminate the apostrophe:

It's warm breath stirred the tops of the trees, while the half-masked sky kept the harshest rays of sunlight from scorching the town.

Make sure to work on your grammar, but don't go overboard. Hope to see the sequel to 'Scion of Chaos' soon!

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An amazing job as always, An amazing read, and I can not wait to see more from you. You are one of the people who inspired me to write even though i had no experience, (Kept telling myself no one would read what i put on metaphorical paper) but you did when i gave it a shot and I wanted to hank you. Also Your port-rail of Discord was a side of him i really enjoyed. Keep up the great work. Hope you will enjoy my next chapter when i release it (Should be tomorrow actually) Also my thought for Discord cutie mark would, be some sort of Balance, symbol Like the Tao But the black half or something along the lines that depict his chaotic nature, but also shows that their is more to him than just chaos.:twilightsmile:

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Thanks for pointing those out, I appreciate it. I'll go fix those right now. And thank you for reading.

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And that's an interesting thought. A magatama cutie mark, that could make sense.

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Yeah i thought it would be interesting. Remember Order and Chaos from my Fic, they have a color scheme of the Tao. So i thought that would be an interesting cutie-mark.:pinkiehappy:

Great job here! Scion of Chaos really needed more Epilogue.

Excellent Work! This sets up the sequel quite nicely.

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Thanks, I'll start writing the sequel really soon.

Loved it! :pinkiehappy:
Can't wait for the sequel.

Error, "followed her though the Everfree forest." Should be "through".
Also, "Mmm, you you know how"

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Thanks for pointing those out :pinkiesmile:

Great story, love reading about this universe. Greenthumbed!!

2230839 Aww, thanks. I appreciate it, and it inspires me to keep writing.

I love this and the story as a whole.

Applause, dear author, applause.

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Thank you so much! It warms my heart to know that, thanks for reading.

Pleasepleaseplease write more. Bring back Discord... You broke my poor little heart!:fluttercry:

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Well, the sequel is in the works, the first chapter is sitting at just over 4000 words and will be at least 6000 before I'm done with it. You can expect it to come out on Sunday.

I love it! I'm glad you're making a sequel!


"...the distant falling of a few dozen leaves dried up leaves." (Redundancy)
"Yeah, it's not your fault, the clubhouse was an accident." (I think the second comma should be a semicolon.)
"This was Scootaloo, the toughest pony she knew, she wasn't scared of anything." (Should be split into two sentaces.)
"It's in everything Scootaloo, in the trees, rocks, wood, you and me." (I think it should be split into two sentances.)
"I think he must have know that it was scaring me..." (Should be 'known'.)

2321494 Thanks for pointing that out, I really appreciate it. Writing without an editor/proof-reader has left a fair number of my earlier writings rife with mistakes that I'm still fixing even months later. Thankfully, I now have an editor/proof reader who is rather meticulous, and very good at the job.

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