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This story is a sequel to Scion of Chaos

Five years after the summer in which the three had gotten their cutie marks, Scootaloo, Sweetie Belle and Apple Bloom, now young mares in their own right, decide to go on a quick summer vacation, all as an attempt by Sweetie Belle to cheer up a sad friend. However, the trip turns out to be more than they had anticipated.

Set five years after Scion of Chaos and An Emerald Treasure. For the sake of context I'd recommend reading both of those first.

Special thanks to Mac349 and Plebeian for proofreading. Thanks to CMC4TW for editing/idea-mulling.

First Published
25th Mar 2013
Last Modified
20th Mar 2015

Yes! it's finally here!:pinkiegasp: Now to read.

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A new adventure in the Crystal Empire? Oddly fitting.

Seems like Scoddri's still there. I wonder when he'll show up.

Just about to head to bed now this:pinkiegasp::pinkiegasp:

I'll totally read it in the morning:moustache::moustache:

Only thing I can think of now is: damn now I have to wait for the next.

Loving it already.

I agree I have been waiting for this as well. :pinkiehappy:

Oooh! Such foreshadowing! I am really curious to see how this will play with the Canon version of events! <3

I must know what happens I must!!

I have the feeling that this is going to shape up to be something that can only surpass my wildest of expectations. Thank you.

BWAHAHAHAHAHA!!! YES!!!!!!!!

*Ahem*

Time to start reading. :rainbowkiss:

More ruckus in the Crystal Empire? It's probably Sombra again.

:trixieshiftright::trixieshiftleft:

PREDICTION TIME!

#1: Sombra was also one of "Scoddri's" apprentices and is able to see magic, but instead of thinking it's beautiful and amazing all he sees is power ripe for the taking.

#1.5: He will doubtless try to tempt Sweetie over to his way of thinking.

#2: The reason Sweetie Belle's personal magic is so small is that she's been unknowingly feeding it to Discord for the past five years, and now it's starting to show results.

#3: Discord will at some point have to choose between his old chaotic ways and having Sweetie as a friend and/or daughter figure.

#4: Sweetieloo:scootangel::unsuresweetie:

I am psychic, and I will shout "Called it!" as each prediction comes true. No, I did not have any part in the writing of this story.

Yay sequel! magnifique! genial! awsome!! finally i can read this :pinkiehappy:

Three friends on an adventure in a distant land. Nothing can go wrong here, that's for sure. :pinkiehappy:

This is great. Keep up the good work.

>>2317349

I don't know about all that, but has anyone else noticed the similarities between the Crystal Heart and Discord's emerald heart.

>>2317349

We'll see if it turns out as you predict it will :twilightsmile:

I feel a very AJ/RD-friendship-vibe between AB/Scoots. And then I mean that they both act like AJ and RD would sometimes. Especially at the ending where they were racing eathother.

Can't wait for more!

>>2317333

I hope I can write well enough to do so.  Thanks for the vote of confidence :pinkiesmile:

This looks very promising and I've loved this series so far, I can't wait to see what you have in mind this time.

Yes! Finally it has arrived, been waiting so long for this :pinkiehappy:.

Hmm crystal empire, me thinks Sweetie belle might have infinite energies at her control....or the crystals will increase her font size.

Cant wait for more.:twilightsmile:

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Little did they know... chaos awaited... I hope. :pinkiehappy:

>>2317922

Well, there is a Discord tag.  That's gotta mean something :unsuresweetie:

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>>2317935 It's Discord. He could be playing with us and never make an appearance.:trixieshiftleft::trixieshiftright:

I'm excited to see where this goes ^^

I do have to remind myself to picture them older, though.  More time could probably have been spent establishing where each of them is in life after five years.  They can just pick up and go to the Crystal Empire for a while, so I can assume they're done with school.  That's fine as far as communicating facts go, but it doesn't actually help change the readers' perception of the character as much as actually addressing it directly would.

I'm not saying it's bad though.  There is still plenty of stuff that does show where they are.  Sweetie Belle still lives with her parents, but has a dream, Scootaloo having her own house, etc.  Seeing Applebloom actually buck apples (or anything, really) might have been nice, but overall it'll probably all work itself out in a chapter or two at this rate anyway.

Well I'm guessing Sweetie belles magic hasn't grown and stayed that small is because Discord crystal has been absorbing magic from her since she kept wearing it every day for five years. I'm guessing that Discord will be resurrected, albeit it could be he comes back in pony form aka his original form.

Though this is just my own view on what could happen further.

Did I catch it right that Scoots has synesthesia (she perceives tones as colors)?

I really like the way you portray Sweetie belle here :raritywink:

>>2317554>>2317349 Everything but the sweetieloo sounds awesome.

You clearly describe Apple Bloom's cutie mark, but not Scootaloo's. Why?

>>2321128

Eh, it was a triangle with two wings.  I did describe it, and I have back-story planned for it, it might take a number of chapters for Scootaloo to focus on what the mark means to her.  But I did give it a cursory description.

>>2321146

See if you can find it in the chapter, will you? I'm not entirely sure I actually read every word.

>>2321184

Snagged it:

What can I do? she asked herself in doubt, giving her own cutie mark a glance.  Two purple wings, with a purple triangle at the center.

>>2321205

I was even paying attention to the stuff above and below it too! How'd I miss it!?

You wrote this in a week? I am green with envy. Like poor Jurgis, I'll just have to work harder.

Very believable dialogue and thought-lines. The personalities of the CMC felt nice and familiar, while still hinting that they're growing up through more mature conflicts, namely those with themselves. Already, you're hinting at some adventure, and we've got a lot of excellent interaction between the main characters. I'm especially glad that you were able to keep Sweetie Belle as a dynamic character. Too often, I've seen characters once dynamic turn to static because of an "already past the finish line" sort of feeling, as if they've nothing left to learn. I also like the particular theme of the characters' inner conflicts. I know this will turn out to be something incredible!

>>2321705

Thanks for the fantastic comment.  This story is going to be the most ambitious bit of writing I've ever set forth to tackle, so I hope I won't disappoint.

Squee!  Oh yeah, this is the good stuff.  Mm. :twilightsmile:

Nothing epic to say, other than I'm really looking forward to this and it's a fantastic start. :pinkiehappy:

>>2322006

I'm glad you like it.  I'll do my best to make it a worthwhile read :twilightsmile:

More Chaos Belle. Huzzah.

Sweetie Belle has the power to drain crystals to fuel her magic and she is going to a place populated with ponies made out of crystals. I don't see a problem here.

Interesting how she doesn't seem to have chosen a single gem type. Didn't Ruben say that every dog (or pony in this case) finds one they like best?

I think that

1# Discord will be comming back, having been draining Sweetie's magic reserves through the emerald to rebuild his body

2# Sombra will return and try to either corrupt Sweetie or destroy her as her crystal magic may compete with his.

3# ScootaBelle, though this is my least fave CMC ship

>>2322586 I have waited a while for this fic, and once again my good stallion, I am pleased in its quality. I will comment on mild ooc for sweetie bell but with age comes maturity.

Call me crazy but I think Discord is still alive within Sweetie; I'd imagine that she would yank him out and give his original form back. Would kill Twilight's mind (not literal)

"making sure to each line of the spell formed it's proper insignia before it hit it's mark."

Usually, when something is possessive, it does have an apostrophe. "Discord's Gem." The word "it", however, is a special case. For some reason, (don't ask me why) the possessive of "it" doesn't have an apostrophe.

"making sure to each line of the spell formed its proper insignia before it hit its mark."

:twilightblush:

I love this story already....can't wait for the next chapter  :moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache:

>>2324427

It's always the "it's" that get me.  Haha.  Thanks for reminding me about that.  Fixed up the four that I found in there.  :twilightsmile:

>>2324591 No sweat. I had to google that one four separate times before it stuck.

Oh, look.  My favorite taco-filly hybrid:derpytongue2: has posted his eagerly awaited sequel to "Scion of Chaos" and "An Emerald Treasure".   There is naught to say but, "Yay!":yay:

This was a great start and it looks like it's going to be a really good story.  I did notice some errors however.  They were mostly omitted words and at least one word that should have been omitted.

Darn that cliffhanger!  Please don't make us wait for long for the next chapter.

>>2327173

I want to get it out at a rate of 1 chapter per week, I mean I wrote this one in a week why not others?.  'Want' being the key word there...  :twilightsheepish:

her own inner source of magic seemed to remain as miniscule as it had always been.

Check it Sweetie Belle: It doesn't matter. If you can refill it at any time through everything, your source of magic is like as big as the planet with every thing and creature on it.:facehoof:

God damn, do I love this series. Kinda dropped the ball on reading this chapter right away but from here I'll be quick.

Two purple wings and a matching triangle. Twilicorn?

>>2317349

Ooh, 1.5 would be fun, I always love stuff like that.

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