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Tragedy strikes the Carousel Boutique, when Rarity's younger sister Sweetie Belle is hit by a speeding carriage.
As Sweetie Belle fights for her life, hanging on by a thread, Rarity feels her entire life fall apart.
The doctors have warned that Sweetie might not make it.
Can she live, continue on her life, without her little sister?

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Comments ( 65 )

Wha..? So Sad, Yet I Can't Take My Eyes Off It. I am A Monster... But I Don't Care. You Deserve This :applecry::fluttercry::raritycry::ajsleepy::yay: And I LIKE Sweetiebelle Too. She's Adawable

Poor Sweetie Belle :fluttercry:

Reminds me of the news article I read from the 1700's about the first carriage related death.
Favorited!

so sad,but well done.

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Lol I know, I felt the same way. I love Sweetie and the CMC, but with a roll of the fanfic dice this is what came up.
For the sake of good story telling!

:fluttershbad::fluttercry::raritycry: Noooo Sweetie must live!!!!!

Van

Good idea for a sad story, looking forward to new chapters.

Oh boy. I sense an epic tale a'comin'! Looking forward to future chapters!

So sad. I have to know what happens next. :fluttercry:

Who was pulling that thing :twilightangry2: I DEMAND JUSTICE!!!

I'm on the point of crying and it doesn't help how my brother is wacthing star wars 3 and it was playing the sad music from when the clones start killing the jedi and as the music started sweetie bell was just about to get hit with the carriage:fluttershbad::fluttershyouch::fluttercry::applecry::raritycry::raritydespair:

Who are those ponies pulling the carriage? They deserve thr wrath or Rarity...and why?:applecry:Sweetie Bell? I love Sweetie Bell. I have to know what happens next. Please update soon.:raritycry:

It's a good start and the idea of the story is sad and isn't overdone. I would like to see future chapters longer though, if you don't mind. Here's a thumbs up and a fav.

Of all the stories existing on this page it had to be this one that wich caught my attention.:applecry:
Goddamn, that feeling all over again.
Sweetie Bell must survive. :raritycry:

This.. Literally.. Made me cry. :fluttercry:

More and more sadness. I really liked how Rarity didn't care for her own safety, she just wanted to see her sister.

I can see Scootaloo beating herself up over this accident, especially if somepony offhandedly says something about how she's been warned that her ideas would get them hurt one day.

Applebloom's reaction hurt. It seems the poor girl just shut down, and still trying to process just what happened.

I'm really hoping that Sweetie Belle pulls through. I still have the image from the first chapter in my head. Right before she was run down, Sweetie Belle had a smile on her face. Now she's a broken little filly. Yup, sadness all around. :fluttercry:

:applecry::fluttercry::fluttercry::raritycry:

All the sadness. I...The poor cutie mark crusaders. All I know to say is you have to continue this story. I really want to know what happens.

Van

Really painted some vivid pictures with this chapter. :raritycry:

997225 Applebloom went into what we call a Heroic Blue Screen of Death in which when someone is exposed to something extremly traumatizing the body's response is to just shut down all unnessciary body fuctions, if it's physical it's called a Heroic Red Ring of Death. Either way the victim usually takes a while to snap out of it if they ever do. :twilightoops: (You can look it up on TV Tropes if you don't believe me or want to find out more)

Also things are not looking good for Sweetie Belle, internal bleeding in her brain, Sweetie Belle will be lucky if she not only survives but doesn't suffer some form of irreveresable brain damage. :raritydespair:

Wow, Applebloom's state makes me sad :fluttershysad:

Scootaloo feeling responsable for what just happen it's really touching.

And Rarity is such a good sister.

DAW :pinkiesad2: I Had A Dream Where My Aunt Was Trixie's Voice Actor. I Wish It Was Real.:raritycry: Just Like The One Where I Met The Girl Who Plays Derpy Fanmade Voice And KeikoAndGeilly

BANG! Right in the heart. A great update even if it was short. It was effective amd I love it. Of course she's guilty and such, and I think you showed it well. I love tis story so much. I can't wait for the mext update.

Even if this was a shorter than I would have preferred, it's still a good chapter. :pinkiesmile:

Van

Yay another addition! Sad as ever :raritydespair:

That's the second time today a song has made me feel sad :fluttercry::raritycry:

I has so many sads.

<------ Bawwwing like an infant.

feels so many of them:raritycry::fluttercry::raritydespair::unsuresweetie:

I do not see how someone could avoid crying given the contents of this chapter.

Poor Rarity and she is justified in her belief that she could have prevented this she froze the instance she saw Sweetie Belle was in danger and thus she feels as if she didn't do enough but in her case there was nothing that could have been done to prevent the reflex. :raritydespair:

okay i really liked this chapter, i hope that sweetie belle gets well soon

Ok, I love this. But earlier in the chapter you said Rarity had been in bed for 2 weeks, now Mayor Mare is saying Sweetie Belle had been hit 2 DAYS ago? That doesnt sound right. That means Applebloom would only have been screaming to nights in a row, Twilight would have only been up for a whole night, and Rainbow had only been out of work for one day. I think that 2 "days" should be changed to two weeks. Other than that, lovely chapter. I'm glad it finally got updated! :heart:

Van

Well worth the wait.

Holy. Crap. You're not dead! That's great! Means more chapters to read since you finally have internet. Geez... So long without conversation... Glad to see you're back and updating. I can annoy you beyond all reason again. Yay~:yay:

Liking the chapter Clover! You might want to fix the formatting on it though, especially if you have the time for it. Had to do a double take after seeing the occasional walls of text. It'll make them easier to read.

Such a touching chapter. Tears were shed as I read the candle wish part. I look forward to the next chapter. Hope it's with a breakthrough in Twilight's research or improvement in Sweetie Belle's condition.

The only thing that really threw me was Apple Blooms recovery being so quick. I understand why you did it, but it should have taken her at least more than a few minutes to be back to her 'normal' self. Half a day, at the least. She could have asked for the Candle Wish and still been in a depressed mood, after all. Other than that, and the two weeks vs. days thing someone above mentioned, I thought this was a brilliant chapter and I still can't wait to see what's next!

"The Candlelight Wish" seems to be based off of candlelight vigils that people hold in the wake of great tragedies, but I didn't know there was symbolism behind them. :fluttershysad:

Also the releasing the lights into the sky reminds me of the ceremony held in "Disney's Tangeled" where the King and Queen light a single lantern followed by the entire kingdom and then release them into the night sky. :pinkiesad2:

Here's hopping Sweeite Belle can pull through, and will survive with no permant injuries or brain damage what soever. :fluttercry:

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Huh.... Honestly guys I don't know how that happened. It was and is supposed to be two WEEKS. huh..... I'll fix that. I apologize for the format or any grammatical errors. Being without internet most of the time and having taken so long to update I just wanted to shoot it up and go, I really should pay attention more.
Thanks for the response! :twilightsheepish:

My... My feels... You can have them... You can have them all...

The ponies that were carrying the carriage are EVIL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!:pinkiecrazy:

EVIL!




P.S i hope sweetie belle lives she's my fave.:raritycry:

Wait i think the mom and dad were on the carriage


WHY SWEETIE BELLE?!?!?!? WHY?!?!?!?:raritycry:

OMG how can you end it liek that! it was sooo good! i mean i like the ending but leaves so many qestions! but still nice story hope to see a sequl to this or something

What a lazy Ending :ajsleepy:

Nothing is resolved here.
Many People have great setups for Storys but they just cannot end it in a satisfying way .
But the Ending is one of the most important thing in a Story, it makes us reflect about what happened in it and how the Characters handeled the situation .
I have seen that happen so often on this site .

I am very dissapointed by this

Why didn't Rarity use her telekinesis?

I thought Sweetie Belle was going to die and in all honesty perhaps a death scare could've really made us feel for her. You were going so strong but then you just crashed and burned at the end. If you ever have the free time perhaps you should go back and revise this chapter so the ending doesn't feel so dry and rushed. :eeyup:

With that being said I am glad that you didn't end it like most of these types of fics end. X dies and everyone grieves for them. :raritywink:

Wouldn't Luna be able to help AB with her nightmares?

wait this is the end! you can't end it here she just woke up; you havnt even portrayed everyones emotions to her waking

I played the song along side the ceremony. Oh God, the FEELS!:raritycry:

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