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As it turns out, Rainbow isn't as good at skipping stones as she thought she was. Luckily for her, she'll end up getting help from a place that she didn't expect.
Maybe there will be more to this that she didn't expect either.
(An uncomplicated shipping story. Proof-read by Desol starting at Chapter 2.)
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Why this story has received two down votes, it is a mystery ta me.
Ah found it really nice written and the characters of Dash and Twilight were really show-like for me.
Hope ya release a second chapter soon.
A nice simple enjoyable fanfiction.
Never thought a story revolving around skipping stones would keep my interest for so long. Good job!
An uncomplicated shipping story.
I like when the romance is without drama (or just a little).
I can't wait for the next chapter.
Cédric
1926018 Probably because they don't like lesbian ships. I don't either, but I would never downvote a good piece of writing just for that reason.
*thumbs up story*
Ugh, I hate when people downvote stories just because they don't like the ship. That's so immature. But yeah, nice to see that this isn't a one-shot. Carry on, :D.
Nice, easy, enjoyable, really great job on this one!
Looks like you've found yourself an anti-fan with a lot of accounts
Anyway, what a perfectly sweet and harmless story. A perfectly sweet and harmless story that makes me think of Coldplay:
and learning to skip stones with my dad when I was little.
A very nice, simple, sweet story. Very Slice of Life.
1926571 I thought of the same thing :D
(Joke) Alt. Title: Entertainment Daily Visits ThePwnzorMuffin On The Set Of "Life In Stupid Technicolor"
Y'know... MAD Magazine.
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Ok, minus the skipping stones, but ugh. Why does every TwiDash fic get featured. It's just...incompatible.
1927058
How dare you doubt twidash's power? you should feel shame and despair
1927167 As long as there's hope, I can't lose!
I don't know, why would eye?
The title...Coldplay reference? (I don't know)
I wasn't going to read this, but then uncomplicated.
Glad I changed my mind.
I come back from school, and... Wow. I definitely wasn't expecting this to get featured, I think I just got lucky with the submission time.
Thanks to everyone for the feedback, whether it be comments or ratings or both. ^_^
And yes, 1927420 1926571 this is a reference to the Coldplay song(s) of the same name :)
1928388 Awesome, love that you did that!
1927058 in the immortal words of Patrick Star:
I mean, yeah, Twidash is a common ship, and not even a ship I especially like (
, 
and 
being my preferences for my beloved unicorn, and my tolerated pegasus' being 
or 
), but it's a decently clever story and it has good build up. If you don't like the concept, who cares? So long as it isn't offensive, corrupting the innocence of the show for attention's sake or hopelessly poorly written, it's not a big problem.
1927058
(In your opinion)
1928580 Tell me why it's a good ship then, O Mr. 'My-ships-are-automatically-perfect'.
1928537 This is a story, though...
1928591
Everyone likes what they like. It's just a fact that a lot of people on this site like TwiDash (myself included), and since a lot of people like it, TwiDash stories are usually on the popular side. That doesn't make the shipping any better or worse as a whole.
I, for one, don't like most straight pairings or background pairings, among other things, but that doesn't make me any more right or wrong than someone who does like those.
Also, I know it's been done before. I'm not the most original when it comes to concepts ^_^
1928591
I just stated that it was your opinion, and I didn't say all my ships are automatically perfect.
You should stop making assumptions before you see the whole truth, look before you leap.
1928631 Never said that popularity makes it bad. I just thought it's like water and oil.
Also, why don't you like hetero, if I might ask? It's what nature intended...
1928641 Yes, but you implied that because it's my opinion that it's a lame ship, it's fact that it's a great ship.
1928662
I wasn't implying it was a good or bad ship, I was just saying it was your opinion.
1928662 Yeah, I got a little off-track there. I just like it because I think it's cute, in a nutshell.
I have nothing against straight-ness (I'm straight myself), it's just that there aren't any well-developed male characters in the show, and pairing them with a developed female character seems more like an attempt to market that character as straight more than anything else, and since male characters don't really have too much of a personality to them, I just can't imagine that kind of thing working. If there was more character development and whatnot, I would probably mind less.
1928591 doesn't matter if it's a story or a drawing. You need to take it easy man.
1928686 I was joking, don't worry.
1928689 Fair enough.
No wait. This is an internet argument. We can't end this reasonably. Uh...Oh! Here we go!
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1928693 Fair enough x2 combo.
1928713
I will find you... Eventually.
Anyways, good day.
This was a pretty good read. Nice and uncomplicated, just like the description said. One small error that jumped out though "Of course twilight why wouldn't eye" That should be I. Other than that, great story.
If ever there was an award for a story about skipping stones this would win
Oooo, a TwiDash slice of life that's not based around reading together (at least as the start)
It's... nice
Warmin' up to each other, starting out as just friends hanging out, that's... double nice
It seems to be up in quality compared to the last few TwiDash features... or at least I can't recall the last ones due to them not standing out that much.
[Aside from the who 'eye' instead of 'I' & the... missing 'I' from, '...interested me because always saw...']
Liked & favourited & all that jazzy jazz
This is sickeningly cute and I want to follow it to its completion.
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Inject pigments at the base of the petals and let it grow and spread for a rainbow rose.
It's great to see a fic where they discover their feelings, makes for good feels and that feeling that I get when I read when they are experiencing inner pain about the situation that for some reason I enjoy...
I have added this story to my Coldplay Group. If anypony wants to join, go ahead. Viva La Vida my friend.
Simple and oh so good. I like light stories like this.
1928713
Just throwing in an opinion, not to contradict or argue but only to offer my perspective.
I didn't really like any shipping, or fanfiction for that matter. But a "failed Twidash" of sorts got me totally into the Twidash pair, shipping and fanfiction all in one story. In a story where Twilight has passed away but gets to visit her friends and see how they're holding up, she discovers Rainbow Dash had feelings for her. That Rainbow Dash could never open up because of her pride and need to impress and never let her guard down, even around her friends, tore her apart every moment that Twi was gone. Although Twi was happy that Rainbow Dash felt this way about her, she was separated from her now. The whole thing has a bittersweet ending, but it got me thinking that it isn't just little blips and misinterpreted scenes in the show that makes good shipping pairs; it's context and story. If the story can make it work, it works. I've read good instances of most pairs.
I think Twidash gets featured easily because of its popularity: you have two of the most popular characters in the show. It's harder for certain ships to be written well: I think it's tough to write a good Pinkie ship because she's too whacky. Fluttershy acts like the kind of way-too-shy girl that, if in real life, wouldn't really be considered dating material regardless of how attractive she was. Certain characters simply have personality trait that work against their shipping potential. But this goes back to story and context. The story can make anything work as long as I want to turn the page and find out what happens next.
Having said that, there are admittedly too many instances of Dash crashing into library, needing to be nursed back to health, and coming out of the ordeal with a new purple-coated marefriend.
1930642
The broken wing was the key!!!!!
Not bad at all, though you may want to consider a pre-reader. Some technical stuff that could use work, but that's mostly just practice. Also;
....this has potential.
I love the pacing of this story! Not word or mention of any love dovey feelings yet, just two ponies seeing another side of each other and just a hint of physical attraction...
Even though this chapter would have been perfect as a one shot, leaving at this nice bit of (friend)shipping, I am sure that if this particular pace is being kept during the consequent chapters this will be a masterpiece.
Very nice continuation. Looking forward to seeing where this goes.
Hmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm... I liked it. A lot. And I can definitely see the friendshipping beginning to peak. Now I'm just wondering if you're going to continue strengthening the friendship and then give somepony confusing feelings, or if you're about to just jump right into one of them feeling 'extra strange' about the other. Either way, I look forward to moar.
Also, it's people like you that make me want to try and put words about small horses onto paper. Thank you for that.
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You're the one doing all the heavy lifting here, man. Also literally five full days of delay are my fault, despite having previously proven I can edit a fic six times this long in like 7 hours.
I'm a travesty.
In any case, glad I can help. Your shipping rocks, by the by. As I've said in my comments, I like that there's actually a natural progression as they begin to develop feelings for one another rather than the tacky clichés so many people go for.
I'm glad this updated. I've been keeping an eye since the first chapter with one word burning in my mind: Potential. The continuation did not disappoint in that regard, though I suggest you consider a little bit of planning. No need to go all nutso-OCD and write an outline or anything (*coughcough*like I do*wheezesnortle*), but it's easy to meander off in a directionless haze with only vague plans. Or not; it's your story.
Bring on the Twidash.
Also: DANGIT, I'M OUT OF TWIDASH AGAIN.
Too cute
Ah this is so good, it feels so natural. It has the slice of life-ish sort of feel from the actual show but also subtly moving toward a romantic development. Kudos to you my good sir or madam.