Come what may and test what will, I always find peace in some form of writing. Be it famous, hidden, or simply my own, it is and forever will be a sanctuary.
You never did like to do new things. Changing what you did meant changing who you were. But no matter what you do, things will change. It can be because you did something well, or something poor, or even doing nothing at all. Things are still going to change.
The least you can do is make sure they change for the better.
Prior to Season 3
Story six in my Twidash Challenge: 2nd Pony Theme
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I have to sleep god damn
Aw yeah, more TwiDash.
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A chapter by WoW under 5k words?
....There's treachery afoot.
1993322
Oh, we have so much more to go.
1993311>>1993321
All aboard the shipping train!
I was just thinking about how I haven't been reading very many fics lately, and then this popped up in my notifications! Quite a nice coincidence, especially since it's both from your brilliant mind AND that it's Twidash
Commence read.
2nd Person, Dash. Okay.
Your*
Second person view isn't my cup of tea, but when it's you, why the hell not. I saw some minor errors and I cannot wait for what is next.
What's up with all the downvotes?
1993815
You're guess is as good as mine.
1993848
I mean personally 2nd person isn't my favorite but I can appreciate it once in a while; guess some people here don't feel the same.
I leave a comment on your last story, saying how much I'm looking forward to your next story, then this gem appears?
Win. So much win.
1993002 Looks good to me. Now I wanna see Rainbow dig herself out of that hole of hers. If she keeps this up, I might have to call her Cloudkicker (cause she has relationship problems. Yes, I went there. If you didn't get that joke, you should probably read Life and Times of a Winning Pony.)
On another note, I liked the change in pace from your other fics (meaning the second person thing). The description of the rainboom was pretty cool as well. Now, back to my efforts to summon Parasprites in the MLP gameloft game...
Oh this'll be good
Never really liked the idea of a second-person story, but since you're the one writing it I guess I'll give it a shot.
Every time I look at the cover image, I hear Twilight say, "Why are there words up here?"
And once more, a really good story, completely spontaneous on your part, and now I'm going to be waiting as always for the distant and never fast enough update.
(Joke) Alt. Title: Breaking The Norm... Yeah, Right
Ah, yes,
15 Ways To Steal The Featured BoxThe TwiDash Challenge Part II: Electric Boogaloo.1997627
If only I could publish a story that was assured to steal to the feature box. That, unfortunately, is highly unlikely, especially with my luck of attracting down votes.
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I hope I don't dissapoint.
1995111>>1993902>>1993399
I'm just curious, do you really think that just because I wrote a story, it will be good?
1997855 Well, because pretty much every story of yours that I've read was good, there is that developed expectation.
1997855
Knowing you and after reading your other stories...not likely. GERONIMO!
1997855 I have to agree with Stryker: every story of yours that I have read never seems to stray from the path of high quality. Certainly, every author is capable of writing a 'bad' fic, but I haven't seen one of yours that could be called as such. It's basically become common sense, for me, that anything you write at least has the potential to be an excellent read.
Are you feeling put off by the compliments, or does it just seem like brown-nosing? It just doesn't feel right to leave a bland comment like, "I liked this fic. It was good." on a story that deserves better, and that's how yours always are!
1998044
I'm not put off by compliments, that would be a weird feeling. It's just odd to see so many people excited, but then see how a good sixth of the people who read it don't like it (Down Votes)
Whoua ! I think the last time I read a 2nd person story was when I was a teenager and that was "Book where you are the hero". The book where you advance to ten pages or came thirty pages backward following your choice. Man this book was good stuff.
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Since I don't see the shadow of the slender man(aka dark tag), I hoping for a feel good ending, pretty please with a cherry on the top.
Good luck with the next chapter ( whatever fics this will be)
Cédric
Don't you mean asleep ?
1998113 Well, I don't know what to say about the downvoters. Maybe they don't enjoy the 2nd person writing style or maybe they're just a few Twidash haters, but you should certainly realize why so many people enjoy your stories! Your page says that you have skill and experience, in fact, you and kits are the main 'inspirations' I had to start my own terrible attempt at writing a fanfic, and I'm definitely happy that I did start it, but I hope to do just a fraction as well on it as one of your stories would.
So, I dunno, some people left down votes without reasons, but the story is still young and perhaps later they'll come around. You've probably heard similar spiels before, so I'll just leave it there.
ER MAH GERD! MOAR TwiDash!
But seriously, I love this, the style (2nd person) is a bit weird for me, never really liked it too much. But the contents of this story allow me to look past that niggling feeling.
When I saw this was story six of you TwiDash, I thought that I had some more to read, NOPE! read every one of them, might as well follow you now, you seem to write what I like.
I don't usually like 2nd person stories... But I loved this!
1993921
I wonder if she can even see the sky from down there.
I'm not sure I have read any other stories written in 2nd person POW before, but I don't see anything wrong with it, It's a nice change of pace.
And so the WoW TwiDash count rises
Bro, throw your homework in the oven and turn on your computer, becuse we demand MORE!
You’re speed is incredible, beyond even the most unimaginable limits of awesome and insane.
You're drifting slows as gravity takes a hold of you, your momentum reaching its limit.,
You’re flight path levels with the ground, sending you soaring parallel to the town beneath you watching it vanish beneath you faster than you could blink.
You’re speed finally reaches zero, and you come to a dissatisfying halt.
"You're" should be "your"
You watch her form give a small shake as her eyes relax as her lips are tightened into a straight line. This is a run on sentence. The two conjunctions make express to different thoughts, "Her form gives a small shake as her eyes relax" and "Her eyes relax as her lips tighten". You could use an "and" instead of "as" between "relax" and "lips"
She still there, still wearing that mask of indifference. Should be "She's".
Which is to say yes, I'll edit your other stories too.
you have a wonderful talent for writing emotion, I was drawn into it so that I could feel the emotional pain of dash, keep up the great work
I require more to live. Give it to me, so the deed to survive may be done.
2029350
But my homework...
2095634
Should I start drawing pentagrams... or something.
if you allow me to make a guess, probably next chapters will be "you fix it" or "you love it" ....unless you break the norm
you make me do it, this chapter is sad, very sad, I need to cheer up
on a good note: your ability to convey emotion through text is quite impressive
2095681
My Reaction to your pun above....
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Can't wait
Commence read.
That didn't go well.
2095895
Not well in what direction?
I... The feels. They hit me like... Like... Well, I dunno what, but they hit hard. Great chapter, bro.
2095898
In the direction of Dash trying to make things better, and succeeding.
"you hate it"
I better not
Don't you dare give me sad feels ...Wiz? WoW? TWW? ... YOU
Don't you dare write this so that I really feel like I am Dash, and that I has a Sad
Pfft. Actual reading time;
So, uh, rereading it a second time and so far I've only noticed:
Onwards and downwards!
Homestretch again!
Ehehe... the whole ' “Of course not!” You yell ' paragraph was a bit... I'm not sure
It's got some missing words or letters or somethings;;
'forcing your head down as your chest refuses to rise' or, 'forcing you to look down at your chest which refuses to rise' or... I'm not sure really
Not anything technically wrong... but (as cliche as it is) a caged bird seems better, or at least something that actually gets caged. Or maybe some creature that gets jittery when cornered...or trapped. Hm... Like the beaver, who's defense mechanism is attempting to chew off it's testic-YEAH NO
'your nerves what little you can' or ,'your nerves however little your can' or maybe ,'trying to calm your frayed nerves'. Something like that?
I'd guess you meant to have the second 'help' also be 'helped'.
...
Okay, well, um, yeah. It looks like a ton, but it's just a couple homophones, a couple sentences, and a missing letter...
Yeah, sorry, I.. yeah, not trying to sit on a pedestal or anything like that... just, yeah
ANYWAYS, about the state of my feels.
Rainbow at a loss the whole time... unable to recall anything special she's learned about Twi that anyone but a good friend would know about.
Then forgetting Twi was busy, along with the entire mess she caused in the first place. Not exactly the best scenario to try bargaining in.
I liked the whole 'brain filter' part. It's like the whole Freudian bit with the Id, Ego & Super-Ego.
It's got some sense to it. And then Twi pretty much says 'I know you wouldn't say that out loud, and instead keep it to yourself, but that doesn't make it any less true to you'.
...Gave me a sad you meanie
Two-three more of these? Seems about right. I hadn't actually watched that video about you explaining your whole situation, so seeing a chapter on something of yours was a nice double confirm after that aftermath bloggle.
So, looking forward to more of you
PS (technical PPPPS): sleep-deprived comment, will triple check later
'you break it' followed by 'you buy it'.
PPS (technical PPPPPS): all chapters following the 'you ____ it' format? How about 'you ID-E it'
Ouch, I've been there Rainbow, and it's not a good place to be in for yourself of for the friend you hurt. I always enjoy sad moments in stories like these (especially when the emotions are conveyed effectively). Not sure what else to say...I think xBeeCharm covered the few grammatical errors that popped up, so...can't wait for next update!
Well done with the second person and grammar. Can't wait for the next chapter.
Poor Dashie... I feel your pain.
Dang, a quick build-up to the make-o-up? I find myself wanting more drawn out emotional connections and supports, but it's your story, and it is DELICIOUS.
Usual stuff: Good god, why hadn't I found out about you sooner, you rite sew gud. I look forward to more, and thank you for my daily dose of tasty Twidash
Makes me wish I could write even marginally like that for my own collection of pony words, but alas, I have no experience 
Moar lesbian horse love plz
Ew. Second person. Second person is atrocious.
I've loved everything else you've written so far, mate, even the painful stuff, but second person makes me sad. I don't know if I can even bring myself to read it.
I have to say, it's been a long while since second person point of view was something I enjoyed. Those were choose-your-own-adventure books that I read back in the day. This is different from that in there isn't a choice in the ride. I don't usually give them a chance on this site. However, what you do differently from other writers of second person point of view stories is you are writing for a character from the show, rather than making a generic suit for the reader to put on and wear. That makes this ten times more readable to me and I'm loving it. Even more so because you have allowed me to be Rainbow Dash XD
woot, this is really the only second person story I really like. nicely done, hope to see more soon.
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I really don't get why so many people gripe about second person. It's only bad if it's written poorly (or used for the wrong thing) which this plainly isn't. Every POV has its time and place, none are atrocious. It's not to your taste, perhaps, but it's not bad because of that.