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Star Grazer


Just a brony/gamer/other guy wanting to try his hoof at writing something. Hopefully.

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Fluttershy makes a casual remark about Dash to Twilight, which starts a shift beyond friendship for the cyan pegasus and the librarian.

Picture for this fic was made by Bossinc at Deviantart, and was used with permission. http://bossinc.deviantart.com/

Chapters (6)
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Comments ( 76 )

I didn't notice any errors and I won't lie looking forward to a good read.

Then again.. I don't notice errors unless they have a giant glowing neon sign above them.

Very curious. I am certainly looking forward to more.

*Crossing fingers*
Please don't be another unoriginal Twidash. Please don't be another unoriginal Twidash. Please don't be another unoriginal Twidash. Please ease into the relationship slowly. Please don't make Twilight OC like so many others. Please don't...

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Honestly don't know what fics you're reading that I'm not. Most that I read never have Twilight out of Character, and I could care less about originality if it's a good read.

Regardless, gonna give this a read. Always enjoy some good TwiDash shipping.

I like where this can go. its got a lot of possibilities

I'll see how this plays out.

1564040 I don't plan on this thing ending in three chapters or something. From what I've got planned, it'll be rather long, actually. Perhaps not as long as some, but I'm not looking to break any records in that regard. And don't worry, I've got plenty of practice with the little librarian. :twilightsmile:

And wow! Over a hundred favorites in a few days! I never expected it to take off like that! I was hoping it'd get this kind of response, but never thought it'd actually happen! Thanks! :yay:

I really hope that you all enjoy it. Chapter two is shaping up quite nicely, and I'm about halfway through writing it, and I'm having a lot more fun writing this than I did Perseverance, although that was quite enjoyable as well. In other words, hopefully I'll have the second chapter out by the end of the week, depending on events.

Hope you all keep reading, and keep on liking!

b(^_^)d

Here, have some favorite.

~Dess

Taking it slow - good sign! Bonus points for not having them confess their undying love before the prologue's even over, which far too many shipfics rush into.

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In in the beginning Twilight was madly in love with Dash, despite knowing her for 5 minutes dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Twilight_Sparkle_lolface.png

She wanted to tell her, but had the emotional equivlancy of a 12 year-old and she didn't want to be called a dyke. dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/sillyfilly_Twilight_Sparkle.png

Turned out no one really cared about it, and Dash was all "ER MER GERD, I LERV YER TER."dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Rainbow_Dash_lolface.png

The Enddl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/shrug_Rainbow_Dash.png dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/shrug_Twilight_Sparkle.png

Hmmm, A statistical anomaly. I am very, very interested. After all, I haven't read a single ship fic for TwiDash that does not already have A: a preexisting relationship/romantic interest, Or B: a rushed or spontaneous declaration of undying love after three weeks of knowing each other better, and/or sexual intercourse five weeks into the relationship.

And trust me, I have probably read every semi-decent TwiDash fic ever.

For Science, of course. :twilightsmile:

But either way, I am extremely interested.

Author,
I really like the story so far. The pacing is nice, and there's no immediate "I love RD/Twilight but I'm keeping it a secret" sort of thing.

Now for the bad...You have RD call Twi "egghead" wayyyyyyyyyyyy too much:twilightangry2:

Great writing, and great pacing! You've really gotten the story off to an impressive start, can't wait to read more.

:moustache: This story...Moustache Spike approves of it.

Have a hundredth thumbs up. Good story so far, I like the pacing and the characters are well written.

Good chapter! And I didn't notice any glaring editing mistakes, so your self-checking can't be all that bad.

Good writing. I don't mind things progressing slowly. It makes their relationship feel more natural.

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I second this, also the fact that you're starting the story off with them having a platonic relationship. Most of the Mane 6 ships that I've read always start with one or both parties already having feelings for the other, or even if they start off platonic, it immediately jumps into their relationship. Keep up the good work!

This is great, most stories progress way to fast without any real build up, but you seem to be doing things in a more realistic tempo :twilightsmile:
Wouldn't mind more frequent updates though (not complaining only hoping).

Definitely tracking this one! It's great so far.

Silly Spike, you forgot to ask her how she intends to heat up the water. As the only resident fire breathing dragon that is probably something you're going to want to know about.

Pre-reader bonus: First by days

But yes, this chapter was good and not a single error to be found

(Joke) Alt. Title: A Single Spark, A Million TwiDash Fics

You should have more faith in your writing. I've certainly enjoyed reading this story, and the chapters are definitely worth the wait.

Pacing-wise, it's nice to have found a great story that actually takes the time to build the relationship essentially from scratch, rather than jumping in within these first four or five chapters. Keep it up, I say!

twilight needs to stop her reshearch into weather she is going to put pegasi out of a job

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My thoughts exactly.
If the Unicorns render the pegasi redundant the Windigoes are sure to turn up.

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Ack! Even more story ideas! :raritydespair:

But in any case, that's a problem for another story, one that I'll probably be expanding upon now. So, thanks! I now have a solid idea for my next fic! Seems like I have an entire universe building off of this now. Hopefully this goes over well. :twilightsheepish:

1953885 your very welcome! if you ever need story ideas i could pitch you some, i sadly cannot write, ive tried and i think they now wander the dump preying on the minds of innocent garbage workers, but anywho keep up the good work cant wait for next chapter:rainbowdetermined2:

I think it says alot of the fanfics i usually read that all i can think at the moment is "well twilight just cast a spell and isn't staying to watch the results... Cue cloud turning into a hurricane due to complications"

Finally getting around to reading this one. Just a note I'd want to add before I get back into reading the story, there are some things that don't really bear explanation and just slow the story down. For instance:

Twilight's voice was raised slightly, helping to indicate her curiosity as to the subject.

You literally defined the way one asks a question.

Being descriptive is good, but you can have too much of a good thing :P

Anyway, back to reading...

Another amazing chapter Star Grazer, I look forward to the next chapter(and pre-reading it:twilightsmile:).

Comment posted by Osama Bin Laden deleted Feb 25th, 2013

Hey, you're back! :pinkiehappy:

The chapter flowed smoothly, and I love how neither Rainbow nor Twilight have any idea what's going on with their feelings. The sleepover next chapter should be great fun to read (crazy hijinks will ensue)

why so many twidash shipfics? it's starting to get really annoying

Hey, you got into the feature box.
Congrats on that:yay:

Wonderful chapter by the way.

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I sincerely hope no one is forcing you to read these.
I for one happen to like twidash, so I'm not bothered at all.

2169184 Well if you don't like TwiDash shipping then why are you reading a fic about it? Just sayin'.

the thing is I'm glad to read smth else but the problem is it can't find a good story, because people only want to write dash X %femaleponyname %.
how do you even can say she's lesbian? because she has rainbow hair? hah.
same story with vinyl X octavos and bonbon X Lyra.
"oh look Lyra and bonbon standing together in show, maybe they're lesbian? " and stuff like that.
so if can tell me about good story with even a hint of scenario, you're welcome

2169292 Why not search for a story in the top stories section? After all, not everything there is shipping, and they are all great stories.

That's where I go when I don't want to read shipping.

It feels less like feelings are growing and more like they are subconsciously deeply in love with each other already, and simply oblivious.

I was going to leave a several paragraph stream of consciousness comment but decided it may be appreciated if I am a bit more brief. I am enjoying this so far. Twidash is adorable. I want to see how this develops further. Maybe Twi will recommend some other books to a reluctant Dash and more cute bonding would ensue. Twilight was the one that knew what Rainbow would like to read in the first place, to the point that the pegasus seems to have already devoured the series by this point.

Comment posted by RainblowDry deleted Feb 25th, 2013

This was a good read man this is a great story keep at it:pinkiehappy:

Continue onward my good author in your quest of writing fanfiction.

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You're the one that so badly wants a straight shipfic with Dash. Go look for it yourself.

Always good to read a new chapter of this, good work Star Grazer. :pinkiehappy:

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