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Muramasa


Never give a sword to a man who can't dance.

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In the dead of night, a thief breaks into the royal palace in Canterlot to steal Celestia's crown. She successfully sneaks through the palace and enters the room where this prize possession is kept, with not a soul the wiser.

Well, save for a certain Princess.

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Comments ( 25 )

This needs to be continued. Also, it was somewhat sad.

8713362
Thank you! I didn't think it was quite sad enough to warrant a tag, should I add it?

8713389
Eh, I’d say it’s on the edge. Any thoughts on a sequel/second chapter?

8713405
I intended the story to end here, so it isn't likely :(

8713422
Awwww. She has potential.

Well if the author doesn't do the sequal (and this absolutely demands a sequal), then someone needs too. There's too much potential.

Love the story as is.

Great fanfic! I like to see Twilight written as a wise princess.

This is indeed just begging to be continued... perhaps as a series of stories.

I think somepony needs to be recruited into the Equestrian Intelligence Service... :trollestia:

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I know, right?

maybe cerise could become a tax collector :rainbowwild:

anyway, i enjoyed this peek at what twilight might grow to be like!

Real quick, before I start reading, this reminds me of one really old fic. Some thief was gonna steal from Celestia, but she catches him by accident and he turns himself in. Reminds me a lot of the summary here.
Anyways, now to start.

8714393 I remembered that too - but if we're thinking of the same story, this one's much better.

8714416
Really? Hot damn, that's as good praise as you could hope for for a story like this. Again, if we're thinking of the same story lol.

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8714416
Thank you guys so much! If you do ever find that fic you're talking about, let me know, I'd like to read it!

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8714430
Found it
Took me a while because, for some reason, it's not tagged as a comedy. Is this the story you were thinking of Eru?

8714499
Heh. I knew exactly which one you were talking about, have it in my favorites, and was going to link it but you beat me to it.

Cerise definately needs to reference Blank Slate.


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I'm actually going to vote against a sequel. Unless it is a whole new story, there isnt much left to say. An epilogue would be nice, though since were left hanging regarding Cerise. If you do write another, make the epilogue a sequel hook, otherwise some straight closure.

Just my two bits. Im no writer.

Sounds like our Thief would make a great Spymaster.

I’m always here for Agressively Friendly Princess Twilight Sparkle. Nice atmosphere, nice characterization, well executed.

Twilight should have recommended her to the CMC. I'd definitely love to see that story. Or really anything more about Cerise. She's such an interesting character--a rarely well-done OC.

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Thank you so much! I don't plan anything immediate, but everyone seems to like Cerise a lot so I may return to her sometime :)

8713806
Indeed. It's such a shame that she was only ever allowed to wear that persona in Rainbow Falls.

the Crown Regent

Uh... it's not a title that Celestia would have... she is not a "regent" as she is the legitimate sovereign and usually the modifier "Crown" as in Crown Prince is usually used to designate the heir apparent to a position... so this title would mean something like "The person that is in line to become the substitute of the legitimate sovereign"

and grieves rang

greaves

quickly excited the room

exited

8724824
Thanks, I'll make the changes right away!

Full review here, but in brief: mixed feelings. The Thief: The Dark Project vibe I get at times with Cerise is interesting and that cutie mark point is thought-provoking. On the downside, it lacks a little sparkle and it needs proofreading. (Or did, anyway. I wrote the review before the changes Bahamuttone mentioned.)

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Thanks so much for reviewing! I haven't played any of the Thief series, but it's been on my list for a while. I'll keep everything you said in mind for future stories!

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