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Majin Syeekoh

We’ve got dents and we’ve got quirks, but it’s our flaws that make us work.


Sunset Shimmer is having a really weird night and she can’t make heads or tails of it.

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I give it a 2 outta Goddamn it. Would Syeekoh again.

Random... but I liked it.

Majin Syeekoh
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8044203 I’ll goddammit your Syeekoh.

8044230 glad you liked it!:twilightsmile:

Majin Syeekoh
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8044261 HAH!

I knew I heard it from somewhere.:ajsmug:


Thank goodness Twilight was there!:yay:

Majin Syeekoh
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8044272 It’s fortunate that she has such a good friend, yeah.

Majin Syeekoh
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8044281 ‘The fuck’ is exactly right.


OK, instead of confirming that my reaction is what you intended, why not simply explain to me so that maybe I can figure out some things, irrelevant to this story, for myself.

Majin Syeekoh
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8044297 Okay. What did you have in mind?

“I’m feeling kind of… [i[bleh, actually.”

Slight formatting error there, Syeekoh. Another story down and another step down the ladder of sanity, eh?

Majin Syeekoh
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8044325 Thanks for the catch.

And I’d say sanity is trying to catch up with me.:rainbowwild:

And I thought I was harsh on Sunset. Oh well. If you'll please excuse me, my brain is currently leaking out my nose and I should probably staple it back in before ebaegahoksnvornsa;a4/...

Majin Syeekoh
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8044336 Yeah I guess I did put Sunset through the ringer a bit here.

Also I suggest putting a bowl under your nose.


You get this image because I can't find the one of Ronald McDonald going what the fuck did I just read.

Majin Syeekoh
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8044354 Man.

I have to write more stories like this to use up your “wat” pictures.

Yeah, I've had dreams like that.

And SciTwi really is a good friend.

Majin Syeekoh
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8044397 Yeah, one of the hard parts here was making a nonsensical dream that made sense.

And she really is, yeah.:yay:

This story does the same thing to my brain that jalapeño cream cheese does to my bagels


giants bagels in a cave

Majin Syeekoh
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8044514 Fixed.

Also jalapeño cream cheese sounds amazing.

I claim editing credit n_n

I understand the first part of her dream, that was due to the drug she was tricked into taking, the second is dark, and sad.
Showing Sunset feels, she thinks she still unworthy of friendship and love, and seem sees that they will leave her, and they have the right.

Self inflicting guilt, shame and self hatred a very hard thing to rid of.

Majin Syeekoh
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8044573 I can really relate to that sentiment.


It was good, there just wasn't enough. That and the explanation was so brief and impactless I had to re-read the last section three times just to figure out what the heck happened.

Majin Syeekoh
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8044642 I can understand that criticism.

I often forget that other people don’t share the same headspace as I do, so what I think is impactful may not be so for others.

Every time you post something, I'm typically baffled by what I read.

And just like every time before it, the next time you post something, I'll happily stumble right into it. "This time for sure!"

Please don't change too much.

Majin Syeekoh
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8044802 Thank you for sticking with the Syeekoh experience. I’m glad that you’re enjoying the ride so far.:eeyup:

Hahahaha this was soooo random. Randomly hilarious!!!! Excellent job!!!! Awesome story!!!

One of your friends,


Majin Syeekoh
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8044844 Thank you for the correction. I appreciate it.:twilightsmile:

“Right,” Sunset replied as she took in the aroma of her cheap coffee.”

Bit too much quoting.

Hella dark, man. You're getting better at that.

Majin Syeekoh
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8044858 Fixed the excessive quoting.

And I wouldn’t really classify it as dark, per se, because the tone isn’t so easy to pin down imo.

Do you really think it’s that dark?

if im under standign this correctly some one tried to date rape drug sunset but scitwi saved her neat

needs more

The bagels need mucous for, sapient as they may be, they have not found proficient lubrication, lubrication which they may use to effortless glide through the frictionless surroundings of spehssssssssssss. They glide from planet to planet to find peace and pleasure. And also to get away from the foul pretenders known as Cheerios– foul, parasitic beings who pretend to be the young of the bagels, hitching rides on their mucousal residue like freeloading bastards. Damn the Cheerios! DOWN WITH GENERAL MILLS!!! GENERAL MILLS WILL RUIN THE HOMOSEXUAL BAGELS!!!!!!!!!

(I kid. Honey Nut Cheerios are the best. Especially when you add more honey. Yum!)

Also did Sunset Shimmy watch Sausage Party at some point? There was totally a homosexual Jewish bagel in there :B

It must be nice to have a nice breakfast with your evil alter ego. Y'know, just making snide comments rather than trying to choke and stab each other out the door or whatever.

This scene needed moar eggs :|



Bulk Biceps is best special snowflake.

Gonna go with it was Brad who spiked the drinks.

Wait. How can Twilight use magic to. Lock the door if she was a human?! Ohhhhhh... I bet the magical homosexual bagels gifted her with magic across dreamspace. Because that's totally a thing homersexual baygulls would do.

Nah. I changed my mind. Twilight spiked the drinks. For SCIENCE.

Well it exists? :rainbowhuh:

I really don't know what I'm supposed to do with this. If I go for a dark meaning, I'm not comfortable with what it implies, especially with Twilight picking a booger out from Sunset's nose. If I go for a lighter interpretation, there is still this part about Sunset and her demon-self.

So it was okay I guess?

What a clever little pun the title of the chapter is.

The chapter title speaks for it self.
And also the comment below mine.



Ah, where's the fun in making sense? :pinkiecrazy:

Not sure what to feel about this one. The second dream was cute and sad which is why I'm commenting, I guess, but it certainly hairpinned there at the end.

“One of your friend’s, I think,"

Probably should be the plural-possessive "friends' ."

What is this I don't even... congratulations, you did it again.

You are a perfect practitioner of what one of my teachers taught me at high school:
If you're unsuccessful at persuasion then confuse them instead.

You just, you know, skipped to the confusion part instead. And it's super effective. Good job :rainbowlaugh:

Wait, what!? Someone drugged Sunset, and Twilight didn't call an ambulance!? I know they have cell phones in this world, what the heck Twilight!? I mean, great job looking ater her and all, but seriously she should have recieved some medical attention.

Majin Syeekoh
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8045008 Okay is not bad. I can’t expect smashing success with everything I try.

8045252 You know, first I had “friends”, then someone corrected it to “friend’s” but that didn’t feel right and then you come across with the word I was originally going for but didn’t type. I love the English language sometimes.:pinkiesad2:

And I identify with the second dream so hard you don’t even know.

Huh. Well, that happened. Interesting stopover in Sunset's latent self-loathing on her way back to consciousness. Still, if Twilight has telekinesis, it means that Sunset's done quite a lot to make up for her past misdeeds. Thwarting brainwashing seahorses, saving reality itself, and helping Twilight through her post-transformation stress disorder more than balances the scales. I just hope Sunset can accept that.

Also, yay for slightly scary Purplesmart looking out for Condiment Hair.

In all, an excellent blending of the surreality of dreams and a surprisingly deep look into Sunset's deeply harbored self-doubt. Thank you for it.

Wait, where's Twilight's horn?

This was nice to wake up to.

8044870 Rape is kind of inherently dark, right?

Majin Syeekoh
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8045646 I mean, maybe?

I just don't really feel like it needs to be labeled dark because that's not the main conflict, I guess.

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