Candy Heart knew she wasn’t a normal pony. Between her unmatched intellect and unshakable ambition, she knew she was destined for greatness. She was destined to be the best, and once the incantation was complete she truly would be: everything holding her back, from loneliness to regret to remorse, would be gone. She’d be free, and she’d be unstoppable.
Except that isn’t what happened.
Instead, two more ponies came into being. This is their story.
Takes place prior to Season One
Full-cast reading by ajvasquezbrony28
Featured on Equestria Daily
Edited by Dubs Rewatcher
Cover art designed Novel-Idea
“… It's just an amazing story, however you slice it, and I hope everyone will take a moment to go read it right the heck now. Highly Recommended: Top Fifteen” — PresentPerfect
Arresting, memorable first sentence, and it stays great from there.
The Heartstrings discovery had me thinking of Citizen Kane. And I'll be interested to see what's left of Candy Heart after losing creativity and freespiritedness (and magic), as well as control and drive (and apparently the sense of taste she never had, which does rather raise the question of if she lost anything else but the horn).
Damn, from the first sentence you captured my attention, and you just kept on going, and this is definitely a radically different take on Lyra and Bon Bon. Although, I am curious as to what spell or magic Candy Heart was trying to accomplish, or at least what its intended goal was.
Regardless, I'd love to see where this goes.
Intriguing. What beguiling mystery have you made for us this time, BlazingInferno?
7346194 you'll have to bite the bonbon and find out. I think.
Uh oh.
Okay then. I was wondering at what Candy Heart was like and the spell she was working on, and you delivered.
Now, I greatly fear for both Bon Bon and Lyra. Sure, Candy Heart has lost her creativity and intellectual prowess, but pure ambition can accomplish both great and terrible things, and even the meekest, most unassuming can go a long way with just ambition and the will to continue, often farther than those of great intellect or ability/creativity.
I am so reading more Bon Bon dark fics
Woah
I'm gonna take a wild stab and say that Candy Heart was trying to enhance herself in some way. That she split into 3 suggests alicorndom - does our main antagonist have wings now, I wonder? It isn't made clear, but that -would- complete the trio.
Was that it?! Noo-
I gues it was a satisfying ending
Awww. Cute.
But what a strange story. Whatever BlazzingInferno writes turns to gold.
This is a very thought provoking piece about the nature of family, nature vs nurture, and oneself. Thanks for writing it.
This was really good, the only thing I could say story-wise is that the parts about Candy Heart, have a 'sketchy' feeling compared to others, as if saying 'lacking character',
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Very well written but I don't like the message.
I often find your writting style heavy and hard to get trough, but each, keeping on going further in the story is always rewarding.
you've always get these litle idea that make fine story.
In this case, I liked how you analysed what makes a personality, how one isn't complete without depth, without some aspect that may contradict each others.
But I think you cutted things just a bit short. when Bon Bon claim that her and Lyra have grown, it is hard to agree with how little we saw of that growth. and the litle deus ex machina to make them suddenly whole was nice and all, but a bit too predictable and ... cheap? It would've been so much more rewarding to see Lyra and Bon Bon define themselves and learn how to be a complete person by themselves rather then getting it all served on a golden plate like still.
I also think that Candy Hearth should've been more develloped and expended on. Although I get that the story wasn't about her.
It is just that we spent a lot of time on her, more then necessary for a imple plot device and yet not nearly enough for a major character.
Still, something nice to read, have a thumb up1
This takes dissociative personality disorder to a whole new level...
At first I was a bit confused with what was going on, but now I think I'm starting to understand. I'm slow with this kind of thing. :P
This is one of the more bizarre and clever things I've read. Definitely under-viewed!
This is just adorable. It reminds me a little of Kiki's Delivery Service.
Damn, that's a good twist.
This is like an especially dark Disney movie. It's freaky, yet it's also got a childrens fantasy charm.
This is what The Underappreciated Story Society is made for. What a hidden gem!
Edit: Oh, it doesn't look like I can upload other people's stories to that group anymore.
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I'm so sorry for her loss.
7420623 I know its my fault for skimming comments before reading the story, but could you please *spoiler* your quote? I don't even want to read the story now that I can pretty much guess it. Sorry.
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That's less of a story-ruiner than you think
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Spoiler-tagging that would be a good idea, if you'd be so kind
Well, that was certainly interesting.
I can't help but wonder if what Lyra was thinking and what he is thinking about what Lyra said to him are the same thing...his thoughts might be more along the lines of 'Jackpot!'.
7357528 Or perhaps that was the point?
I seem to recall reading this, it was good.
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Oh, don't stomp the old bad joke, it tends to make its replies serious looking, and rather sarcasm ambiguous.
Like this.
A very rocky begining for Bonbot, but Lyra fixes everything.
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Nice!! That is one satisfying villain death.
Beautiful ending.
reviewed
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Awesome! Thanks for the review
7637233 no problem. check it our and leave a comment, then share with your friends. It was a pleasure to have added thi story to my list.
I didn't even realize this had been released!
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Dang, I must've given Bon Bon the wrong address for your editor 'thank you' basket.
Happy Halloween!
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Brilliant beginning, but it's a little confusing to give them names before they decide on their names. I would recommend not referring to them by name until the appropriate points in the story.
Guh! The feels! Can't breathe....passing out....from the adorableness!!!!
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Thanks! Using names from the very beginning was a conscious choice to aid in readability and to stave off tiresome clichés like lavender unicorn syndrome. Plus it helped make for a snappy hook
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Very well written. I don't read many Lyra and Bon Bon stories but I must admit this one was most refreshing! The character's reactions and how they were brought to life was very creative.
I loved this. I could conceivably see this on the show or in comics, minus the rib-kicking of course.
The only thing confusing me is time. This takes place before the show(seeing as BonBon lives in Ponyville during the show). Applejack is a very young mare during the show and she appears to be one when talking to BonBon as well. How long exactly did BonBon take to build her confection empire?
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Thanks!
I haven't kept up with the latest comics, but this always struck me as a shade darker than they'd do since Candy Heart is mentally unwell, and likely a sociopath; she's outside of the typical good/evil/reformed labels we stick on characters.
The timeframe is admittedly vague, but I presume this is the sixish years immediately prior to the show: Rarity is just starting her fashion career, Applejack is out of school and about the family business, and Twilight and Lyra attend Princess Celestia's School for Gifted Unicorns.
Congrats on 100 likes
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Thanks
This is already one of the best stories I've ever read.
Oh that is so cool
Oh god it's so good
Aha! So Bon-bon's talent is not making candy, but eating it!
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That’s what Bon Bon’s customers say
I quoted the tail end of your review in the description
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Making candy, eating candy, making candy just so she can eat candy,
telling ponies to shut up and stop judging her…This sounds gruesomely terrifying. I’ll have to give this a look-see.