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Well, I did say that it wasn't really Christmas until you've frenched Fleur's ponut beneath the mistletoe. This should make for a suitable substitute.


you actually did it

You madman


*Clap, clap, clap*

6765507 You've confused the letters 'o' and 'a' again.:moustache:

His biceps flexed, splitting the seams of his shirt sleeves. He'd prayed for this moment, for a home-invader he could snap in half like a skinny twig. So what if it was a woman burglar? He could still fight while sporting a boner. He clapped his hands twice. The ceiling light turned on. That's right. He has the Clapper. What of it?

This alone has my up vote.

Johnnie Walker taste like crap. Glenlivet is much better, also good story.

Yes, because Tia's foal(s) obviously need one or more half-siblings/cousins. :scootangel:

Well done, Shakespearicles! You've made another great story that I'm SO putting into one of my bookshelves! *hands out a cookie* Have a cookie! :twilightsmile: And have a Happy New Year!

That's was hot and fun.
And a sequel in the works?! Hell yes!:trollestia:

BRING ON, LUNA!:moustache:

The pony then did pluck from the tree an ornament, flinging it across the room as the dozing human.

I think you mean at in that sentence. Anyway, so far so good. Can't wait to see what happens next. :twilightsmile:

The first thing that stood out to my semi-critical eyes was the style of writing. Thus far, this is only the first of your works my eyes have laid upon, but, I must say, you know how to leave a worthy impression upon my mind and body. In light of this -though I have only read the first of these dual chapters- I give you my up vote and a thank you, for giving a piece worth reading. :moustache::twilightsmile:

Needing no further prompting, he got down on his knees in reverence to praise the sun. He placed his hands upon her solar cutie marks, pulling her hips back to him. He aroma was not at all what he was expecting.

I enjoyed the Dark Souls reference. And, I do believe that you meant to put her, not he.

You could, in my personal opinion from reading and self revising, take "He placed his hands upon her solar cutie marks, pulling her hips back to him" and turn it into "Placing his (optional adjective, such as nimble, rough or coarse) hands upon her solar cutie marks (optional detail), he pulled her (optional adjective again) hips back to/into him/his (optional add on).

Don't forget, you can just ignore everything I say about it, as it is good either way. :twilightsmile:

Nicely done. I'm guessing that the ending means a sequel with Luna?

I must say, that was a most excitable read, and, though it may have not been your intention, I got a somewhat comedic feel from it, with the well placed verses from what seemed to be Luna, or his writing, with the semi-obvious reference to How the Grinch Stole Christmas, as an example.
I do hope you produce one for the New Years season, as you have me interested in more. :twilightsmile:

with all the subtlety of an atomic detonation.

The best kind of subtlety

the whole thing is ryme....well I just lost 5 bucks

6768691 you turnin the lights on and off with that clapping tho. :rainbowlaugh:

I'll be waiting for the New Year's Eve story...

6770238 Okay! :rainbowlaugh: That just made my night and my day!

Um... I got one question for you... Sequel? :rainbowhuh: :rainbowlaugh:


Thus far, this is only the first of your works my eyes have laid upon, but, I must say, you know how to leave a worthy impression upon my mind and body.


6771163 Your avatar is supremely qualified for that comment.

I have to say, this was a fun read and I enjoyed it, but I felt the "climax" feel flat. At least for me. It really kills it for me when authors spend all this time with great sex and build up, but when it cums time for the big climax, they only spend one short paragraph or a few sentences on it. ln my opinion, I think you could have spent a little more time on that part. Maybe have Celestia struggle a bit more as he continued to hold her and fill her up.

Half the point of sex is getting to that climax, and I know that in real life that part is short lived, but if your trying to write stuff that's intentionally erotic and stimulating, then I suggest drawing out the orgasm a little more.

Anyways, everything else was fun and I enjoyed it, even though fisting isn't my thing. Have my like.

Well, that was a thing. Essentially a self-insert(?) clopfic...

~Crystalline Electrostatic~

6771163 "Congrats, your New Years gift is a pair of foals!"

6771873 That would be a very short pregnancy.

That would be a pregnancy test.

Really good story, best pressent ever! But I feel a bit sorry for a main character. Even if Celestia's appearance is real, anyway it seem as a one night stand. Have a sex only twice a year (with Tia at Christmas and, probably, with Luna at New Year) a bit cruel fate. Hope you will change it in sequel. (if you plan to do it at New Year)

Suckling my teats when they become full with milk?

Please do it.:unsuresweetie:

Who said cookies?

Oh shit! :pinkiegasp: Much better! Have a fav! Can't wait for more! :pinkiecrazy:

I wanted her knocked up. I am disappointed. :pinkiecrazy:

6771875 I doubt your arms are that big... Maybe a stylized over-the-top version of you, but not you as you actually are.

~Crystalline Electrostatic~

Chekhov's Clapper.

First chapter: beautiful blank verse poetry
Second chapter: clop with implication of sequel

*vibrating intensifies*

6772411 I'd probably kick your ass. Nothing against you, but unless you are trained to fight against people who know Krav Maga and other high-damage martial arts, you probably wouldn't last very long. My fighting style is actually a bit of a fusion of Krav Maga and Kempo, with some other MMA stuff mixed in.

~Crystalline Electrostatic~

6772837 Now you've actually got me curious. No, my arms are not actually as big as pictured. But I am a military brony. It shows through sometimes in my writing when I talk about Shining Armor and the Royal Guards at the barracks. I don't spar as often as I'd like. And I haven't had any (opportunity to have had) hand-to-hand combat with insurgents. I generally didn't get that close.
But it's adorable listening to you try to prove how tough you are to me on the internet. :pinkiesmile:


Psst... hey... what regiment are you in?

"You know, a mistletoe can be deadly, if you eat it," he said.

"A kiss can be even deadlier..." she whispered, "if you mean it."

Did you steal that? Because if you didn't that's a damn good one.

6773042 Well, if you are a military person, you probably could kick my ass then.
While I can fight, I can't stand up against military trained people.
Military trained people are scary.

~Crystalline Electrostatic~

6773582 6773596 "A Batman Returns quote, in my clopfic?"

It's more likely than you think.

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